Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Beginning's End Part 10

Wednesday, March 21, 2007

The next bit in the ongoing-- can I call it a saga now that there are double digits in the chapter number? This one's (essentially) all about the girls. Well, some of the girls.

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“Well, look who fin’ly decided to show up,” called the man riding the lead horse. He was a large fellow, both tall and heavy. The layer of fat he had accumulated around his midsection did little to disguise the powerful muscles that lay underneath, and his black hat pulled down low over his eyes only added to his imposing figure. The day was cloudy but there was a glare, and Zoe could see the light reflected from the man’s twin pistols and the guns of the four men fanned out behind him. Her eyes narrowed, assessing. Five against three and the enemy held the advantage of the lay of the land. Malachi’s ground was rocky and treeless, the terrain unforgiving, but the boulders and hills around them still offered cover for potential reinforcements. Serenity offered protection behind them and the crates holding the cargo stood on the flat stretch of ground between the three of them and the horsemen—still, at this juncture, it seemed that the likelihood of getting out of here far outweighed the likelihood of getting out of here with cash in their pockets. She glanced over at Jayne. The big mercenary was standing ready, attention grimly focused on the men approaching them. Zoe let her hands snake back and rest on her hips, inconspicuously close to her weapon, the better to be prepared without appearing overtly aggressive.

“Had a bit of a delay. Couldn’t be avoided,” Mal replied smoothly. “Still, here’s your cargo, all there and intact. So if you’ll pay us the nine hundred and fifty we agreed on, we’ll be outta your way and you can go ‘bout your business. No problem.”

“No problem? Not from what we’ve heard. Seems you folks screwed around and got yer ship flagged on the way here. An’ betwixt that an’ the bein’ late, I’m gonna say we’ve earned ourselves a mighty fine discount.” One of the men in the group fiddled nervously with the brim of his hat as their leader spoke.

“Just how big a discount are you gentlemen suggestin’?” Mal’s voice was still calm, but Zoe could hear the edge of steel that was

Comments
Wednesday, 21 March 2007 10:54
Very fine. I thought that was so typical of Kaylee using her small amount of savings to buy clothing and flip flops for Stephanie. Also relieved that this time none of the crew got shot - wow, could this be a record? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 21 March 2007 17:25
it's strange how you know for a fact that the crew is going to get into a gun battle and despite this knowledge, you just can't wait to see how it unfolds... good use of the horses.

i loved stephanie's bit here. wary of simon, engrossed in a novel, instinctively reacting to gunshots... good work with kaylee being the ray of sunshine. I believe Kaylee's heart will help immeasurably in reintroducing Steph to humanity.
Wednesday, 21 March 2007 22:35
I'm glad you had Kaylee be the one to find Stephanie all sprawled out on the floor, Uncomprehending.

Mal and Zoe would understand quite clearly, but I get the feeling that it would be extremely awkward...Simon would be a no-go because of Stephanie's lingering issue with medicos...Jayne's an unknown quantity, but I doubt Stephanie would want to seem weak in front of him due to potential past situations...Wash would be all gentlemanly and humorous, but I get the notion Stephanie would not be too comfy getting assisted by Zoe's hubby...River doesn't really have the necessary upper body strength (that I recall)...and I am not sure about the dynamics between Stephanie and either Book or Inara if they had been the one to discover her situation

BEB
Thursday, 12 April 2007 19:20
Aaw, Kaylee shone in this chapter, I loved the interaction between her and Stephanie. Not overly-friendly but not coldly polite either. Glad none of the crew was hurt doing the drop, but that makes me think something bad is going to happen later :-/ Hope not! Very good chapter though. I'm always intrigued when it comes to Stephanie and finding out more about her.

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