Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Beginning's End Part 5

Monday, February 19, 2007

Speedy McSpeedster here is putting up two posts in one weekend (insert noises of awe here). In Part 5: Ancient movie references, slippery escapes, irritable Alliance commanders, and Somebody Finally Wakes Up. Bear with me here-- action is tough for me to write and I'm pretty sure that most of my assumptions about space flight are incorrect.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2351    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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{A/N}: Read parts 1-4 if you haven't already, but bear in mind that part 3 is in the hangar for an overhaul since it has...issues. Thanks so much to everyone who has left feedback-- it helps so much! And it makes me grin when I get that little email that tells me somebody read my scribblings!

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“Alright, travelers, everybody strap in or grab onto something. We’ll be leaving atmo in… just under two minutes,” Wash’s voice came over the com. Though I don’t know where we’re heading after that, as our jing-tzahng mei yong-duh captain seems to have disappeared again, he continued mentally, a scowl twisting onto his face as he raised Serenity’s nose into the sky. If he could keep the ship just at the edge of the upper atmosphere until he could figure out where the cruisers the Alliance had undoubtedly brought in were orbiting, they might have a shot at getting out of here unnoticed. Having programmed his trajectory, Wash turned his attention to the map of Lakai and its few moons on the vidscreen.

“How’s it look, husband?” The sound of Zoe’s voice behind him and the touch of her hand on his shoulder made Wash jump a little.

“Not gonna lie, dear, it would be just a bit easier if I had any idea where the diyu I was taking this boat…” Wash’s gaze remained fixed on the map. There. That tiny moon. It was very small and orbited a bit further out than the others, but it was irregularly shaped, and if he could get them there, they could land until any orbiting Feds were on the other side of the world, giving Serenity a clear shot into the black.

“Next stop is Malachi. Got cargo to drop. Not too picky how we get there, though, long as the trip don’t involve Feds.” Mal’s voice cut across the bridge as he joined them. “Whatever you’re doin’ hangin’ here in this excessively low orbit, do it fast. We’re burnin’ an awful amount of fuel fightin’ the world’s gravity.”

“You said no Feds. I’m just taking a moment to make sure I’m not about to fly us straigh

Comments
Monday, 19 February 2007 10:38
Want the next part - NOW! Loved Wash getting ideas from the old "Star Wars" movie and wait to drift off with the trash. Can't wait to hear what a fully conscious Stephanie will have to say. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 19 February 2007 11:09
Oooooh! This is an awesome story so far, I just read all of it now :-) I really like the idea of Mal's ex making an appearance, and now that she's awake I can't wait to see what'll happen.

I think you keep everyone true to character, especially through the dialogue - even if they only have a couple of lines. Very well done! And you know how to keep the tension constant and the reader hooked, woot! The little Star Wars nod was great aswell.

I totally know what you mean about the emails btw, I've only posted one thing here but knowing people liked it made my day. So I'm happy to do the same for you!
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 01:50
Once, just once, he’d like to find a cooperative patient on this ship. One that accepted medical attention without assuming he had some ulterior motive, some sadistic enjoyment of poking needles into people.

This made me giggle, because it's so utterly true. I'm starting to really love this story - you have a knack for creating real tension, which is rare in fanfic, and you draw one into it beautifully. Your descriptions, like Jayne making seven people sound like ten, are excellent. And finally, I love Mal being tender and sweet with Stephanie. Tender and sweet Mal is one of my favorite things on this here planet :)
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 01:56
Seem like ten, I mean! Darn typos.
Wednesday, 21 February 2007 03:35
Definitely loving this series to bits, Uncomprehending...and I struggled not to bust a gut over Simon's silent wish for a patient that didn't try to fight his efforts at treating them;D

BEB
Friday, 16 March 2007 15:14
i knew i recognized that star wars trick! i love how stephanie reacts to the IV, associating it with bad past memories. very effective

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