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Beginning's End Part 9

Friday, March 16, 2007

The story continues. Falling down, stargazing, shuttle-barging, and deep thoughts. Enjoy.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2600    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: Special thanks to valeriebean and McQ, who provided wonderful help and ideas to get this section off the ground. The quote in Inara's artwork is from Jetsun Milarepa. I crave constructive feedback of all kinds!

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The silence of a grounded spaceship was all-encompassing. Standing on the catwalk railing, balancing effortlessly on metal bars narrower than her feet, head tilted to the side, eyes closed, River reached out, listening. Just listening. She could hear the dreams of Serenity’s sleeping crew and passengers. The faint buzz of noise from the humanity-clogged docks filtering in from outside. Kaylee’s quiet humming as she tinkered about. The serene, meditative rhythm of Book’s morning prayers. In the black, the life of the ship herself—the sounds of her breathing and her beating heart—masked the sounds of the life she carried. Made it harder to concentrate. In the black, River caught bits and snatches of the music that comprised the crew’s lives without being able to follow the tune. Here, where a ship on the ground ceased to be a ship and existed only as a shelter, she could hear beyond the silence to experience the whole orchestra.

River shifted her weight further onto one leg, leaning, as she felt Inara’s melody, smooth and elegant as the silk she wore, flow into Serenity. Moving softly, drifting closer, a balance of sadness and hope, grace and indecision, passion and control.

The sudden blast of emotion that radiated from Inara’s presence, unexpected against the backdrop of the woman’s usual poise, nearly knocked River from the catwalk. She lurched, hands clutching at her head, balance gone, unable to block out the tidal wave of the other woman’s feelings. Then she was falling, knee striking the railing, body twisting out over the cargo bay, when a pair of strong hands seized her around the waist and pulled her back to safety, her feet resting firmly on the catwalk floor.

“Gorram it, Moonbrain, gonna take a header off that rail

Comments
Friday, 16 March 2007 18:03
Ohh, magnificent chapter! Promise us you're going to be writing fanfic for a long, long time?

The beginning sequence with River was nothing short of beautiful.....I'm going to be bold and say that's the best piece of River writing I've ever had the pleasure to read.

Stephanie's thoughts weren't what I was expecting - but they ring very true and are far better than what I might have expected to read. I'm really interested in seeing where this goes as the story progresses further.
Saturday, 17 March 2007 00:30
Oh...now this was definitely some quality writing, Uncomprehending! Especially the Mal/Inara scene in her shuttle and Stephanie's thoughts about needing to be free; the former because it's all about the subtle conflict over Stephanie bubbling to the surface, and the latter because we view Serenity as a means of freedom and exploration while Stephanie can only see the fact that it's enclosed and finite;)

BEB
Sunday, 18 March 2007 03:38
The Mal/Inara scene had just the right poignancy and very good rhythm.

I half expected Stephanie to just scream from the boredom, as if it were worse than any other torture she'd ever endured. I kinda wanted that lift from internal into the external world, even if just a scream. I like how she sees the change in Mal, even if she can't peg that he lost his faith. Wow... he was probably still religious when he knew her...

I love that Jayne/River piece, and that bit about dragging the alcohol-saturated Jayne back from the bar.

This is absolutely brilliant and I can't wait for the next chapter to come! Don't you dare cheat this story. Make it as long as it needs to be. You are an incredible wordsmith.
Thursday, 12 April 2007 18:30
Great chapter! I loved the Jayne/River moment at the beginning, and the Mal/Inara conversation was interesting and a bit sad to read. Great insight into Stephanie's thoughts too, especially her realisation that she and Mal might not be right for each other anymore. I don't know how I feel about that to be honest. Good work though!

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