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Scars

Monday, June 2, 2003

Kaylee knows they come from different worlds.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4224    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Author's Note: Thanks to Dangermom and LiquidEyes for betaing! Written for fic challenge #8.

Scars
by
Tara LJC O'Shea

Simon had never noticed the scar before. He traced the long curved mark darker than the smooth white skin of her lower back. They were curled side by side in her bunk. It was a tight fit, but Kaylee certainly didn't seem to mind.

"What happened?" he asked, lips against her spine.

"Hmmm?" Her cheek rested on the pillow, light brown hair fanning out over her shoulderblades.

"Here." He traced it lightly with a fingertip.

"Oh." She giggled. "There was this boy."

"Hmmm.... Maybe I don't want to know."

"We got caught in the cloakroom at church—"

"Church?"

"Well, there was a social goin' on," she offered by way of explanation. "He was a bit younger than I thought. You'd never've known it, looking at him. I mean, he was..." she waggled her eyebrows, then laughed. "My daddy whupped me so hard."

His hand on her back stilled. "He beat you?"

"It was just a welt that didn't heal, is all," she said with a shrug, and Simon was horrified at Kaylee casually describing a beating.

"If my father ever laid a finger on River—"

"River most like ain't never got herself into half the trouble I did. I was a wild thing. Wild things need taming."

Simon could only stare at her, unable to wrap his mind around the concept. "By beating it out of you?"

She sat

Comments
Monday, 02 June 2003 22:02
Nice display of the cultural gulf between them. It was also good to see Simon's self-honesty challenged and resolved.

Good job.
Monday, 02 June 2003 22:04
Another fine job Tara. You really have a way of bringing out emotions.
Monday, 02 June 2003 22:06
Also, excellent choice of title. Very apropos.
Tuesday, 03 June 2003 20:37
I love this. I really don't have anything constructive to say but to mention how wonderfully I think you write Simon and Kaylee. You've got Kaylee's slightly over reacting attitude, and Simon's talk first, think second characteristics down perfectly.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 04 June 2003 03:03
I hate trying to pick a rating number, what am I comparing it to ?

I love the way you introduced and compared the backstories of both characters, by having them use their pasts to relate to each other it gives them so much depth.

I ended up here after reading your post about no comments, I wouldn't fret it. If this is any example, I really like your writing. And as it is, I haven't had the courage to post any of my stories as yet. Keep trying to improve them and never seem to finish.

Keep Flying ( and writing about it )
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 05 June 2003 20:23
Thanks, guys--all of you. I really appreciate it.
LJC
Thursday, 05 June 2003 20:24
ack. the anon thanks? Yeah--that would be from me. I'm logged in. Honest. No clue why it showed up anonymous.

*sigh*
Wednesday, 10 September 2003 19:43
I love it when Simon and Kaylee fight. If I had anything negative to say about your work it would be that they aren't long enough. Vignettes are cool, but I would love to see an "episode" played out in front of me. Shiny work.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 07 January 2004 23:41
Great job. Simon and Kaylee are my favorites and you do a great job writing them. Please keep the stories coming!
Wednesday, 05 April 2006 23:59
Oh, this was just excellent. I wish you were still writing S/K. I'm a fan of all of your stories. And this one showed the cultural difference between them so very well, and how they could talk about it and get past it like a true couple.

Well done!

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