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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Fourteen

Friday, February 23, 2007

Zoe spends some quality time with her guns, and the plan is revealed to the crew.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Fourteen

It was late at “night”, ship’s time, and on the morrow they would land at Persephone. The idea was bittersweet to Zoe – she and Wash had enjoyed some high times on that world, and it was as close to a home off the ship as they’d had. She loved the beautiful landscape of the planet, still raw enough so that it’s pre-terraformed features were still visible, not yet eroded away by atmo and aqua and the pace of human civilization. In fifty years it wouldn’t look like that. The wind and rain and the mad hand of development would smooth the rough edges until it was as close to Earth-That-Was as made no never-mind.

Zoe wasn’t nervous about the visit, not even after the last few times they’d been there. They had enemies on Persephone. And they had friends that could barely be trusted. But she didn’t care. She knew nothing untoward would happen there. Even if it did, without Wash’s laughter and bad jokes to sooth her, she didn’t much care what else happened.

She was kind of hoping for gunplay, though.

Zoe hauled out her arsenal, nearly every piece, and brought it to a tarpaulin she’d spread in the cargo bay. This late at night, with River on watch and everyone else asleep, she doubted she would be disturbed there as she performed her most intimate ritual. She brought out a bottle of premium booze, a bold bourbon from Greenleaf, and poured four fingers into a metal cup next to her left knee on the tarp.

She preferred the tarp. Mal liked to spread his gear out on the kitchen table. Jayne kept most of his toys in his room, or the armory, and tended them there. But to Zoe the tarp reminded her of soldiering, where a comfortable bunk or a cozy table was a luxury, and the tarp was just good enough to do the job. She’d cleaned her guns on tarps under a dozen skies, and she took to the ritual with all the intensity of a samurai sharpening his sword.

Or an executioner his axe.

She started with the pair of lever-action rifles she’d picked up right after the war.

Comments
Friday, 23 February 2007 06:44
Sorry for the long delay between chapters. Deadlines plus flu plus a new book. Thanks for your patience! Next chapter within a week, I promise!

ScrewtheAlliance
Friday, 23 February 2007 07:41
The Devil is always in the details. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
TAG
Friday, 23 February 2007 17:02
Add me to the list of those who enjoy all of your Serenifly 'verse fics. Very compelling and very entertaining! One minor quibble, though: "They’d risk loosing too many data points when it hit the cortex." In my readings of BSR fanfics, I see this "loosing" used repeatedly. I have seen it in previous chapters of this story (or at least I think I have, lol!). It's "losing", with one "o". The root is "lose", not "loose". I think that you are consistent with this error, as are many others on this forum, such that it is not a mere typo.

Again, a minor quibble. The story is great! I can't wait for more! I thank you for the time and effort that you put in to providing engaging stories for us who are starved for tales of the Browncoat 'verse.
Friday, 23 February 2007 17:09
Thanks! That's what I get for writing at 2:00 am . . . I found myself nodding off towards the end of this one. It seems I'm writing about 10,000 words a day now, between work and play. I'm bound to have a few of them slip.

Next up: An old "friend" . . .

StA
Friday, 23 February 2007 18:38
solid portrayal of Zoe at this point in time...this is exactly how I see her post Miranda...she needs the short leash.

I hope Mal isn't to distracted by Inara's arssets. Oops! I meant to say assets. Zoe could likely get them all killed.

My verdict is still out on Rachel. Her self-serving ego clouds her intuition. I'm guessing that's why her assumptions about Mal's character are skewed. She's an engaging OC regardless of her untrustworthy status.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, Screw. You know that's a lot for me to admit.


Friday, 23 February 2007 20:15
Oooh...why do I get the feeling that this little contretemps between Mal and Rachel is only the tip of the iceberg concerning their personal issues over their duties during the war? Cuz I do:(

Still...this was utterly brilliant chapter, Screw. Especially how you handled Zoe during her supposedly cathartic gun-cleaning session and Inara's conversation with Rachel about "her first kidnapping." These definitely prove you got the ability to make small moments in the lives of the BDHs and major OCs really work:D

BEB
Saturday, 24 February 2007 01:35
Dude--you rock for writing this stuff! We all know that the stuff that puts bread on the table has to come first, so if it means that there needs to be a few weeks between chapters, then so be it! I'd rather wait a few weeks and get something good (like this chapter) than have something that you rushed.
Saturday, 24 February 2007 12:02
I pour more superlatives upon you, as usual. We're jus' happy that you're doin' good works.
SLICK
Saturday, 24 February 2007 20:52
My current read is "Splintered Light", Logos and Language in Tolkien's World, in an attempt to discern why we need fiction and fantasy in our daily lives. So far, no great enlightenment other than your work helps fill some void in my mind.
Consistency of character is important and your Zoe is developing as we expected post Miranda, thanks, though I don't expect it will go smoothly for her. (We all miss Wash!)
SUSANAH
Monday, 26 February 2007 02:02
This is a facinating story. A very worthy quest for our heroes. Poor Zoe. That is quite a collection she has there.
Monday, 26 February 2007 04:53
“‘Angel?’” Zoe asked, astonished. “Big, hulking, brooding killer in a long dark coat, and you call him . . . ‘Angel?’ What kind of sense does that make?”

Very funny Screw, had a chuckle over that!

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