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Eye of the Beholder: Chapter Ten: Part 2

Tuesday, July 13, 2004

Had to split the chapter, since apparently it was too long.

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Continued from Part 1

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Three Hours Later, Serenity

The cargo bay was busy with movement as the crew prepared for the job. Kaylee eyed Jayne warily as he polished Vera; the sight of the weapon unnerved her. Especially knowing its ability to extinguish life with one pull of the trigger, that’s all it took, and a good aim of course. The scar on her belly gave a phantom pull of pain, remembering all too well how the bullet of the Alliance fed had ripped through. She frowned, not liking the dark thoughts. Kaylee preferred to see the good side of things, like how thankfully she was still alive from that long ago encounter. The dark thoughts sucked the life out of a person’s soul, like poison, slowly killing them. She seen it happened with her cousin Marty, who had fought in the war, forced to enlist with the Alliance in a draft. Well, to be truthful, she hadn’t seen, but she had overheard her folks talkin’ about it one day. She was to have been doin’ chores but had preferred to eavesdrop on the conversation, and swim in the river with Sam, the neighbor’s son, later on in the afternoon. Poor cousin Marty hadn’t been right in the head afterwards, locking himself away in the attic of her Aunt’s home; never talking to nobody. He had been dead for three days before anybody had found him, hangin’ by a pillar on the ceiling. Kaylee shuddered as a cold chill swept through her body; she glanced upwards to the catwalk. River watched the activities with a focused gaze, as if trying to figure out a complicated problem.

Kaylee smiled cheerfully in the poor girl’s direction, waving a greeting. But River frowned thoughtfully, the mechanic turned to see what had captured the girl’s attention. To her surprise it was Jayne, or better yet, it was Vera, which the mercenary had carefully placed on a nearby crate. Just as Kaylee was about to say that it was best for the older man to put the gun away, a voice that sent her heart a pitter patter spoke behind her. She turned around, beaming a smile in Simon Ta

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Tuesday, 13 July 2004 20:36
keeping the review simple - WOW!!!
Tuesday, 13 July 2004 23:39
I really love that River is getting into this, going to make sure they don't end up getting themselves hurt. It was quite affecting how Mal acted towards Inara, giving her a way out in case she did not want to go through with it after he found out but not letting on why. In some ways, poor Inara is more broken than River. This is great, looking forward to the next part. *Xie xie ni*, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 15 July 2004 18:25
K, refraining from drooling in anticipation---still enjoying the high from this fix as I already told you. Perfect chapter, loved your take on everyone. Did zoe really well and think you captured river perfectly. Loved how she just kept scaring the bejesus out of jayne during the entire scene. Hope she cansave inara without getting into too much trouble her ownself.

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