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Eye of the Beholder: Ch.9: Half Lies

Monday, June 7, 2004

Chapter Nine: Half Lies

What if Inara never became a Companion? Mal/Inara pairing....

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Chapter Nine: Half Lies

By Cassandra E

A/notes: Well, here it is, finally! Can’t really say why this chapter took so long to write. I won’t dare mention writer’s block; because I know how this story is gonna go, as well as all the chapters. I guess you can say RL interfered, along with pesky migraines. I was also busy redoing my webpage-- http://www.geocities.com/serrabrowncoat23 At first, I wasn’t very happy with the chapter, but I ended up liking it a lot. Added a bit more humor, cause it was getting a bit depressing, after all this story hasn’t been a very happy one. This chapter is like the transitory stage of the story, the middle if you like, before everything starts moving forward towards the end. I decided to stop shying away on the fact, that River and Jayne are planned for the future, maybe in the sequel of this story. The pairing works well, if it’s executed properly, giving the relationship time to develop. I blame all this on my beta, Neroli….so all complaints go to her. Don’t worry this story shall remain Inara centric…and I’ll explain my reasons for doing everything I do at the end—which some of you might not be too happy with. Blame it on Mr.Whedon for his dislike for happy endings, he has corrupted me. Feedback very much welcome….cause I know people are reading this...so Review!

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Simon was finishing organizing the medicine cabinets when he heard the yelling. At first he didn’t make anything of it, assuming it was an argument between Wash and Zoe, or more likely Jayne. But then he heard the rattling that sounded suspiciously like falling cactus needles, along with tinkling laughter that sounded very familiar. River. He let the last medicine bottle drop to the floor as he rushed out. He followed the racket to the mess hall, nearly tripping in the process, and came before a scene that left him speechless. River stood on the table, barefoot, and in her possession was a rain stick. Jayne kept lunging after her, but she managed to dance gracefully out of his reach.

Comments
Monday, 07 June 2004 23:04
Holy Hot Damn! I'm completely engrossed. Lovely twist in the end... past and present is about to collide. I'm ecstatic to see where you take this. You truly are a masterful writer. I saw the update and immediately smiled for joy.
Tuesday, 08 June 2004 14:20
Loved it cass and i think your inserted humor worked great. Flowed well and I'm dying to see more (especially what w/ the teasers I've seen you and nerolie talk of).

Wallpapers aren't really all that important are they? Write more now:)
Wednesday, 09 June 2004 01:14
Worth the wait!

Can't wait to see Colin and Inara meet again. Ooh!

I feel so sorry for the poor guy.

Wasn't expecting the Jayne/River. It's done very well, even though I'm still of the ehttp://www...J/R. You may be pulling me on board. Stop it!

Can't wait for the next one!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 09 June 2004 21:47
Wowza! I like the way you've worked canon elements into your story, also how you're bringing the plot threads together. And that was a nifty bit of R/J (wouldn't mind some more of that *g*). Looking forward to the next chapter. HurrySundown
Thursday, 10 June 2004 02:47
Well, you already know I think this chapter turned out awesome...I think it is my favorite so far. ;-)

Love the River/Jayne bits...but, I think the Mal/Zoe talk is my favorite scene. No...the River/Jayne kiss is...no, Mal/Zoe...ARGH!

Ok, I love the whole gorram thing! :-)
Thursday, 01 July 2004 18:12
Yay!!! You just won't let Inara get any peace will you? Everytime she turns around it's something else! I guess that's why secrets of the past are never good ideas!!

I LOVED the River & Jayne kiss. I have mind to hook the two of them up myself. BTW: I see much improvement on your River stuff, she's seems just right now (BTW I loved the dancing with the rainstick). I also love that your Inara is the Inara we all love but you've given explanation for some of her behaviors. This is good stuff, can't wait for more!!!
Adrianna

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