Beginning's End
Sunday, December 31, 2006
Here's a little start of something I've been toying with for a while... The job finally goes smooth for once, but all is not as it seems. You never know what you'll find on a job. This is my first fanfic (actually my first piece of fictional writing that I've actually let anyone read) so leave me feedback-- good/bad/indifferent. May turn into a series if there's interest.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3316 RATING: 8.0 (G) SERIES: FIREFLY
Takes place midway through the series—long before the BDM.
Disclaimer: I don’t own the verse, I just fly there, and I don’t make no coin from it. Chinese is blatantly stolen from the show because let’s face it, I don’t speak Chinese.
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“We got a plan here, sir?” Zoe asked, standing on the bridge. Her hand was resting on Wash’s shoulder as Mal bounded up the steps into the doorway.
“You and I take the shuttle down and get coordinates for the pickup from our contact on Lakai. We’ll call the coordinates up to Serenity. Wash, you bring the boat down and pick us n’ the cargo up and we’ll be off this rock, easy peasy.”
“Easy, sir?” was Zoe’s comment.
“What?”
“Just sayin’, sir. Easy ain’t a term to describe how our jobs usually go.”
“Well, maybe we’ve had a few not go smooth, but…”
“Oh, well, you know, aside from the gun fights, the sword fights, the people trying to get lit on fire, kidnappings, Reavers, cross-dressing captains, Alliance…” Wash cut in philosophically
“Wash, just can it and get ready to bring Serenity down. Zoe, meet me in the spare shuttle. Dong ma?” Mall huffed before storming off the bridge.
As Zoe turned to follow, Wash caught her hand in his. “All joking aside, be careful, bao bei.” The grin had slipped from his face to be replaced with a look of genuine concern. He was already beginning to worry—she could see it in his eyes—and they hadn’t even left Serenity yet. Zoe squeezed Wash’s hand and smiled.
“I’m always careful, husband. And you never know, this job could be the one that goes to plan.” Wash snorted with involuntary laughter as Zoe headed toward the shuttle.
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“That’s a mighty fine dress for lounging about the ship,” Mal remarked to Inara as he passed her on the way to the shuttle. “Didn’t think there’d be many up to your standards on a backwater moon like this.”
“Acutally, there are some beautiful estates on the southern continent. This seems to be
You can't take the sky from me
Great story. You write very well, expanding a little bit upon the characters, while still making them true to form. It's short, but it tells the story. I'd rather see short and good, then something long for the sake of being long. In this case, this should be short. Cause it's damned good.
And what a way to introduce the plot! Definitely gotta love Mal's almost prescient hunches and Jayne's rarely discussed observational skills...really makes the plot work in all kinds of ways;)
BEB
“Hide and seek is a game for children,” came a voice from behind him - Well said, River.
good dialogue. they sound just like themselves!
good dialogue. they sound just like themselves!
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