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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Nine

Monday, November 20, 2006

A huge steaming pile of exposition.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Nine

“Mighty big crowd,” Zoe muttered to Mal in a prison-yard whisper they had practiced in an actual prison-yard – the POW camp on Hera. They were sitting at a make-shift table near the middle of the group, waiting to be served by the dozen or so young spacers who had volunteered for the task. “That must be some good cookin’.”

“I’m thinkin’ there’s more to it than that,” Mal muttered back. “Though Winnie’s cookin’ is worth goin’ a couple o’ light-years out of your way for.” He looked at Zoe again, a long searching look. “Where were you last night, anyway? I got in during the wee hours. You didn’t show until this morning. And looking like hell, you don’t mind me sayin’. What happened?”

“Ran into an old friend,” Zoe said, evenly. “Stayed up late talkin’ about old times.” That there was more to it than that was obvious to Mal. That she didn’t want to discuss it further was twice as obvious.

“Musta been some friend,” Mal said with a resigned sigh.

The vast cargo bay of the Sky Hawk had been cleared for the occasion, and a dozen tables and hundreds of chairs had been scraped up or improvised for the feast. Billed publicly as a “Browncoat Reunion Banquet”, Mal had noticed that not every former Independent had been invited – but the ones who had been were all prominent members of the demimonde, full or part-time criminals who had made a reputation for themselves among the dens of thieves on a dozen Rim worlds. He waved to Monty, who was talking with a pretty long-haired woman he didn’t recognize. Tanaka was there, as well, and the Stiles family. He counted at least nine or ten ships represented, and plenty of loners who had served and had found their way to Muir had been admitted as well.

The event was “invitation only”, and three rough-looking Green Militia members with submachine guns stood at the entrance of the hold to check everyone off against a list. That had made Mal suspicious up front – it wasn’t the sort of thing that the McKlintocks would have

Comments
Monday, 20 November 2006 23:56
Sorry for the delay -- deadlines, again.
KITTYKAT26
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 00:05
Don't worry about it, good things come to those who wait, and this is freakin fantastic! I'll be reading this over and over again :)
ANGATWORK
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 00:51
I gasped!!! Duncan!? He's the perfect guy for it but ... Duncan?

:)

You're forgiven for the delay, but MORE MORE MORE!
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 01:31
wow... Duncan huh? Can't wait for the next chapter hope we don;t have to wait to long.
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 04:41
Wowza! Duncan was the double agent? This just keeps getting deeper and deeper!

I sense major plor development, and hijinks abound! Which usually equates to Mal, at some point, getting shot at.
I love it that Zoe was so forceful with Mal about going on the mission, and I can totally understand her reasons for it, both the the ones she stated and others she didn't. Things are starting to fall into place, and I love it!

Bring on Chapter 10!
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 20:15
Crikey. Another fine mess, heh. Love Zoe's insistence.

Bring on the next one!
Tuesday, 21 November 2006 21:02
I like this, although it was a heaping pile of exposition. Very intriguing premise you've got here.

I also liked Zoe being so forceful, but I'm a bit surprised Mal was that dense, of course she wants the Alliance et al. to pay, they are responsible for Wash's death!

Bring on the next!
Wednesday, 22 November 2006 00:05
Fantastic, as usual. This chapter really sucked me in.
Wednesday, 22 November 2006 00:18
Duncan!!!!!! Well I certainly didn't see that one coming, I am on tenterhooks for the next episode, but then, what else is new.
RANKTYRO
Wednesday, 22 November 2006 03:05
You are forgiven for the delay, on the condition that you make this story at LEAST as long as Kaylee's Lament.

:)

Wednesday, 22 November 2006 06:20
I get to be Candy Cane McBane?!? You friggin' rock, Screw!

:D

And holy crap! Duncan's the double agent?!? Now that's a plot twist worthy of being part of a Joss Whedon project! Especially since this twist will definitely cause some rough patches between the McKlintocks and the BDHs for a while, I suspect;)

BEB

P.S. I would suffer through all kinds of delays to ensure that this kind of quality writing pops up each time there's a post from ya, Screw;D
NEILEI
Tuesday, 28 November 2006 04:04
Hi STA,
Another great chapter, and I loved the nice toe to toe line in the sand for Zoe even though she threw Mal for a loop. I am worried about Duncan tho. What else don't we know about him. Hmmmmm..................
Looking forward to chapter 10!
NeiLei
Sunday, 03 December 2006 02:26
Holy Go-se StA!! Didn't see that one coming... Keep it coming!!

Keep Flyin',

K

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