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Finding Serenity

Saturday, November 11, 2006

I always knew I’d die in Serenity. - A story about how Mal dies.

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Disclaimer: Don't own it, if i did i woulda kicked Fox's ass until they didn't cancel Serenity.

A/N: Okay, so it's probably pretty bad. it's unedited, as i wrote it about ten minutes ago. the late night ramblings of a person who can't be bothered going to bed. i also know that the storyline has been done before. alot. i did get my inspiration from a story i read on here a little while ago, by Jane0904, but i swear i didn't mean to actually steal the storyline (btw- it's entitled 'Adventures' and everyone should read it. it's really good!!)

anyway, i apologize for any spelling or grammar issues there could be. like i said- late night ramblings.

Please review. i like nice reviews but if it really sux then that's good to know too!!

and now on with it!!!

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Finding Serenity

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I always knew I’d die in Serenity.

It was my destiny. It was how I had to die. Anywhere else wouldn’t have been right. This was the way I was meant to go. Here, where my heart was. The place that took life away, and gave it back.

Truth be told, I should have died in the Valley. Back in those days, when I actually believed in the goodness of mankind. I believed in that which I was fighting for- freedom. The chance to be the man I wanted to be without the gorramm government looking over my shoulder all the time. The minute I stopped believing in the cause, my heart stopped. Somehow my body kept going. It continued to function without a heartbeat. For so many years I was running on empty, and yet kept running. To this day I’ll know how I managed that.

Couple years later, and I felt like maybe my fuel tank was slowly being filled up. I had myself a crew, a boat, someone to love (although she never knew it). Instead of functioning, I started living. Maybe it was the presence of Kaylee- anyone whose ever been in the same room as that girlie knows that she had enough energy to light an entire ship, if they could figure out a way to plug her in. Maybe it was the

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Saturday, 11 November 2006 15:56
Bloody Hellfire.

Very, very, very good.

MORE!
Saturday, 11 November 2006 17:15
Oh God, that's so sad!
Saturday, 11 November 2006 18:28
So very sad but I am puzzled. Okay, you have everybody leaving for their own reasons until Mal is left alone on his ship but you don't say how he died. Was it old age, did he get shot or just point Serenity into the Deep Black until the fuel and air ran out? Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 11 November 2006 22:38
Damn...that was truly heartrending, Fredikayllow! Especially since it just seems to reinforce what Mal told Inara in "Out of Gas": we all die alone:(

And AMDOBELL...I think Mal just finally gave up completely after so many years of struggling to regain what was taken from him. Though who knows...maybe Patience had one of her goons off Mal while he was daydreaming about the old days so they could take Serenity:(

BEB
THEPHANTOMMILK
Sunday, 12 November 2006 05:46
I like this a lot, I think it's very well thought out and well written, and also very true to everyone's character.

one thing- be careful about switching point of view. It only happened once, here-
"No, it wasn’t any one person giving him the will to live, it was these people. Plural. He was around people again, living like a human being, seeing people the way they were, instead of shells of an ideal world."
wher the whole rest of the paragraph is in first person.

other than that, tis fantastic.
Sunday, 12 November 2006 07:23
Sweet Jesus, that was so good, it hurt.

Sunday, 12 November 2006 13:31
thanks everyone!! wow, who would've thought a ten-minute quick job would get such a good response!!
thanks for that phantommilk. i did pick up one such pov mistake just after i posted it, but i missed that one. thats what happens when ur writing fanfic at eleven oclock at night!!
thanks everyone.
Sunday, 12 November 2006 13:40
eek! i want to weep! i think what's movin' about it is that you can totally picture it happenin'... please god no!

absolutely awesome.
Tuesday, 14 November 2006 02:34
Wow, that's even better than you described!
OMG I am so sad how could you kill off the procreation of Simon and Kaylee?!
They don't deserve that!!! You are truly evil. I'm going to crack you one when I see you next. I am actually fairly upset Fred.
Hope you know that your late night stories are always the best!! And I only saw a few mistakes.. Okay I really am babbling now.. Something I learnt from you in fact so it's your fault. You are to be blamed.
Thursday, 23 November 2006 09:56
This is very good. And thank you so much for the mention in the blurb at the start! It is great to know I can inspire people!

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