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All By Myself- Chapter 2

Tuesday, May 17, 2005

What will Cas do when they find out about Kaylee's past?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3333    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer- Joss Whedon and Mutant Enemy has the pleasure of owning Firefly, but I invented the rest.

Sorry about the wait. Stacks of homework and a packed schedule have a way of preventing a person from writing. I also would like to apologize for any confusion that may be caused, but I'm sad to say that I don't really know where I am going with this story.

Dedicated to IdiotChild- the inspiration behing Cas.

All By Myself

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Chapter 2

The crew of The Messenger were gathered in the Infirmary. Greggors was sitting by the bed, dealing himself a game of Solitaire on the tray, seemingly oblivious to everything else around him. The war had changed Greggors, who had taken part in the battle at Lougier. It was considered one of the bloodiest battles, second only after Serenity Valley. One thing he never told anyone, including Cas, was which side he was on. Anyway, he was known by the crew to be slightly erratic- sometimes he would be off his own world, and sometimes he would be wild as a space monkey. Today was a quiet day for him.

Rhee and Marco were sitting on the bench, listening to Cam read from his handheld. Cam’s little blonde head was bent in concentration as his round rosy mouth struggled to sound out the words on the screen. Both Rhee and Marco smiled at each other as they listened to their sweet little boy attempt to read ‘The Ugly Duckling’.

Emma lay in the middle of the room, conscious but still in pain. She winced, but tried to hide it as she laughed with Cas and Kaylee over some lame joke. They were still laughing when the proximity alert went off. “That’ll be the planet” Rhee said, as she got off the bench and hurried out of the Infirmary. Cas followed and Greggors, snapping out his trance-like state, also exited the room.

“Kaylee” the voice came from Cam, who looked up at her with the big blue eyes he inherited from his mother. “Can I go into town with you to get the parts for the ship?” Cam had shown a particular interest in mech

Comments
Tuesday, 17 May 2005 10:56
Please please please review. I am a self confessed confusing writer, and I have absolutely no direction with this story- I am simply writing what comes into my head as it does.

No Power In The Verse
XOXOX-FREDIKAYLLOW-XOXOX
Tuesday, 17 May 2005 23:19
I really think you're doing good. I've been reading a lot of fanfiction lately and yours is one of the better ones. I really like the way your handling the deaths of the Serenity crew members. It gives me shivers everytime I think about it. The way you don't give too much away at a time is a nice apporach. So I'd say you're doing great and please right more.
Wednesday, 18 May 2005 00:29
If I may add a little constructive criticism...

I'd like to know more about Kaylee's new environment. Descriptions are good. Also, it'd be good to have more of a connection with her new shipmates. Show us what it is about them, both individually and as a group, that makes us like/dislike them. I'd certainly like to know more about what happened to Serenity. How did the crew die? And how did Kaylee survive?

Maybe it's the creative writing teacher in me... :)

Keep at it. You're doing a solid job of holding our interest.
Wednesday, 18 May 2005 04:24
This has me on edge. I really want to know what happened to our BDH. How did she get on board this ship?
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 18 May 2005 19:27
Really enjoying the story line although intially hoped (and still hoping) that somehow Kaylee meets back up with Serenity and her crew. You certainly have my attention, keep up the good work. I understand writing a story when you're not sure where it's going so I have this idea - Kaylee somehow meets back up with Serenity and her crew. (But probably not.) Patti
Wednesday, 18 May 2005 19:44
I like where this is going, even though you apparently have no idea where it's going! ;-)

Good stuff!

- Soul

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