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Unfinished Business -- Chapter One

Monday, October 9, 2006

Albatross goes solo and Mal gets an intriguing invitation.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter One

“Cargo’s stowed. Port fees are paid, everyone’s aboard, hatch is buttoned up. Take us out of the world, Albatross,” Mal said as he entered the bridge.

“We got the release from navcom – guess we didn’t break any laws on this one,” River remarked as she checked the monitor, then started heating up the turbines.

“Nah,” Mal disagreed. “Didn’t get caught breaking any laws. A subtle but important distinction in our business.”

“I stand corrected,” River said absently as she cycled the gravity drive up. “What are we hauling this time?”

“The cargo or the contraband?” Mal asked as he took off his great leather browncoat and laid it folded in half on the back of the pilot’s chair. The consoles in front of it were still festooned with plastic palm trees and a motley assortment of toy plastic dinosaurs, a memorial to the late Hoban Washburne, Serenity’s former pilot. Technically River sat in the co-pilot’s chair. No one save Mal would consent to sit in the chair where Wash had been killed. Since she had begun her tenure as pilot after the deadly Miranda incident, River had taken up residence in the co-pilot’s chair. It duplicated the controls of the pilot’s station – but not the history.

She had only been flying Serenity for a month, now, but she had slowly been making the left-hand chair all her own. A few of her drawings had appeared taped to the console, and the hat she had picked up on Whitehall – a war-surplus leather cap with goggles, reputed to be a Independent’s tanker’s cap but similar in form and function to the traditional pilots’ caps from the ancient days of biplanes – hung on the back of her chair until needed. She donned it now, tucking her thick brown hair up under it. Sometimes she pulled the goggles down. Mal had never given in to the temptation to ask why.

“Both.”

“Lessee, we got six thousand pounds of premium industrial grade chalk in the hold, in lovely twenty-two pound blocks. Then in the super secret smuggler’s compartment we go

Comments
Monday, 09 October 2006 16:55
Heh. Giggled like mad over Mal's conversation with Kaylee. Nicely done. And Mal has regressed into Simon and how he used to behave until he got more than a few pieces of Kaylee :) While Simon and Kaylee finally get to release all of that tension, Mal and Inara's is steaming full force ahead.

Glad you decided to post. Excellent start.
Monday, 09 October 2006 17:09
The Mal/Kaylee conversation was excellent - they have such great banter. I love that while Zoe can challenge the captain on just about anything business related, it's Kaylee who can call him on being an idiot when it comes to women!

Very interested to see who this mutual friend is - not that I don't *trust* Monty per se, but ... well, you know!
DOLL
Monday, 09 October 2006 18:04
All is right with the world. Work is going great, the Yankees are out of the playoffs and most importantly, ScrewTheAliance is posting new chapters.
The Mal/Kaylee was great and the tension between Mal and Inara was perfect. I can't wait for the next chapters, keep them coming.
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Monday, 09 October 2006 18:46
New STA fic!?! Post BDM!?! YYYYYEEEEESSSS!!!!!!...Oh wait, manically checking FFFnet every ten minutes for the next chapter? NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!
NBZ
Monday, 09 October 2006 19:43
Wahay!

Good start.

I will be interested in the zoe arc, as too many people seem to have gone for the same (or too similar) angles on it. Just saying coz there better be one!

Will this story see us out til the end of the year? I certainly hope so.

(Not trying to give you a heart attack STA, but well... just don't have one.)
Monday, 09 October 2006 20:12
Oh man. Here we go again :)

Your take on the post-movie crew will, no doubt, be excellent. After all, it has been so far :D
Monday, 09 October 2006 21:05
Fantastic writing. You've captured the relationships quite well.

Keep up the good work.


"I believe someone mentioned beagles. They have smallish droppings."

Rob O.
Monday, 09 October 2006 21:09
RATFL at the scenes with Kaylee and the Captain, just so gorram funny it was hard to breathe for a moment or two. Priceless! I also loved the scenes with River and now I wondering what the good gorram Mal and co will find when they get to Muir. I can't think it will be a simple transport job. Great story, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 09 October 2006 22:34
I've wondered how you'd handle post-BDM River. It would have been the shiniest part of the chapter if the rest hadn't been so good, too. Thanks for a good time, and the promise of more.

Had a chuckle picturing Monty's ship looking like a brobdingnagian latex tube.
Monday, 09 October 2006 23:36
Good to see more chapters from STA. Can't wait to see what happens on this ride!
Tuesday, 10 October 2006 00:16
Oustanding as always, was going into withdraw from TW already. Now i have to check everyday for the next chapter of this.
Tuesday, 10 October 2006 00:55
Woohoo! A brand-new StA story!

Love River's piloting hat. Does she still have her harmonica, or did she lose it somewhere on the Sun Tzu?

Now I miss Wash all over again. You wrote him so well.
Tuesday, 10 October 2006 01:20
At last, I'm here for the beginning of one. I'm so excited! Plus, you beat me to the Reunion bit...that's the beginning of Part IV of my story. Darn, now I'm unoriginal! This couldn't have been written much better, though, so I'll gladly follow when the time comes.
Thursday, 12 October 2006 07:08
Oh...that conversation between Mal and Kaylee was a gutbuster, Screw! Totally could imagine Nathan and Jewel just taking this material and turning it into pure gold. Though for some reason, Mal's use of Kaylee's name seemed OOC....guess probably cuz he never got pissed enough at Kaylee any time during the series or movie to attempt a totally stonefaced "Captain vs. Mechanic" routine;)

Gotta wonder who this Martin Royce Tessarollo is...got an idea what the name means, but I will hold off till later so I can be sure;)

BEB

P.S. This might be something of an apoplexy inducer but....these chapters are too short, Screw! You last two epics had massive chapters! Please tell me you're just warming up for the big ones...please?
Saturday, 23 December 2006 21:26
who's martin royce tessarollo? tell me, dammit! tell me!!!

b

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