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The Other Side of Serenity

Thursday, May 22, 2003

Another side of the coin.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 5827    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Old sergeant told me that you don't know that you were in the battle of such and such until a month after it's over. When you're in it, it's just you trying to kill them, them trying to kill you.

It's different here. Coming in, they told us this was the big one. Serenity Valley is the prize, the key to the whole campaign. We've got the numbers, we've got the support, we've got the angels on our side.

The damn Browncoats knew we were coming, knew for a while. They scan the cortex too, read all about it in the press releases, read the discussions from people who've never had to tie off the stumps of a woman's legs while she yells for her children. They kept talking it up, 'decisive edges' and 'overwhelming superiority' and all kinds of idiocy.

What the Browncoats don't have in troops and metal, they make up for with sheer bloody guts. First night in, they take out a battalion CP. We had hell clearing out all the infiltrators behind the lines.

Pound on them for days, a whole valley full of craters, burned-out tanks, destroyed fighters, bodies and parts of bodies everywhere. Three major pushes I've been in, one of theirs and two of ours, never had one like this.

Just lost a corporal, three rounds through the lungs. Couldn't understand what he was saying when he went, couldn't hear a thing.

They say that they'll break any time now. One more attack, and it'll be over. We've had three 'one more' attacks already. Prisoners are saying all their officers are dead, that a sergeant is holding things together over there. A lot of them think he's going to turn this thing around.

To hell with that. To hell with him. Air support is coming in, and I hope they kill every damn last one of them. Word is that the Browncoats aren't bothering with prisoners anymore.

The fighters are sweeping their positions while I run an IV on one of the new kids. His name is... hell, I don't know what his name is. He'll never walk right again, probably, so he just scored a ticket home.

Comments
Thursday, 22 May 2003 15:34
Marvelous! Its really interesting to see that war through the eyes of an Alliance fighter in Serenity Valley. I especially love how he knows about and almost... respects maybe, the Browncoats Sergeant. Very shiny. Please keep posting more fics.
Thursday, 22 May 2003 16:05
This is remarkable-- original, action-packed and emotive. This one-of-a-kind change in perspectives really reinforces, reifies if you will, what we already know about the battle.
Thursday, 22 May 2003 17:01
You really captured the intimacy of this battle. I felt like your narrator (is s/he a medic?) was in a foxhole not 100 yards away from Mal.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 May 2003 17:01
Great tone and well written. You have given me something to think about. Thank you

Badger
Thursday, 22 May 2003 17:44
Yep Futuresmith, the narrator is a medic.

Thanks everyone. I've thought about fanfics, but nothing had really fermented in my brain yet until last night. Ya'll other writers know how it goes. The scene just starts constructing itself in your head. For me it usually starts with a single sentence or image.

After I got done, I said to myself "There, did my fanfic. Wonder if anything else is going to come up?"

Took about an hour for the sequel to start putting itself together. Unless I get busy with something else, I should have it done in the next day or two.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 May 2003 18:34
really enjoyed this. very immediate sense of the battle and the identical sense of ineptness of leadership felt by the line soldier since the time of the Roman legions
Thursday, 22 May 2003 23:00
Ain't just folks gettin' kilt in a battle like that. A man can lose his compassion, his faith, all the best parts of hisself. Lotta cripples walked outta that damn valley with all their fingers and toes.

Good job, Archer. Damn glad to see it.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 22 May 2003 23:24
BC

Very good and it does sound like a medic. Someone who's seen all the death and tried to stop it but there's no way to stop war. That's one aspect of humankinds personality that I think we as a species are stuck with. It's the reason this old world is such a mess.
Thanks for the different point of view but still the same.
Friday, 23 May 2003 03:53
Love it for the grit, the anger, the sorrow and the despair. The medics right...the battles are named in far away offices long after it's over. Those that survive them rarely speak of them in the same way (if at all) as the paper pushers do. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Thursday, 26 June 2003 13:53
this one gave me a chill. I could see Mal so clearly, only from the other side of the valley...

funny how we oftentimes forget there's always more than one perspective in a battle like this.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 14 December 2003 04:27
Love it, love it, love it!! I hope I can write Firefly fics that are even half as good as this! And the portrayal of the Alliance medic is great. I like the way you slip in that line about the Browncoats taking no prisoners... because history has shown that in war, atrocities were often commited by both sides, irregardless of which side was morally right. I've been thinking similarly along that line... Browncoat wants revenge on the Alliance because of atrocities committed, then the Alliance man wants revenge on the Browncoats because of atrocities... and it becomes a vicious cycle, repeating itself over and over again. Great story.
Sunday, 14 December 2003 04:28
And those are my comments up above. :) I still love the story, only this time, you know it's me. :)
Friday, 07 May 2004 18:42
I like it -- tight, concise, well-written and thought provoking. Good job.
Friday, 25 November 2005 16:14
wow. i just...wow...

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