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Nightmares: Mal

Wednesday, July 5, 2006

Second in the series. The subject matter is a bit dark (it is a nightmare after all), but it's nothing too graphic. Let me know what you think!

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Mal stood quietly, and took in the landscape in front of him. The resilience of nature was remarkable, and as he looked around Serenity Valley six years after the war, only the deepest scars from that battle were still visible.

Though lovely and verdant, it was quiet as no one would live there. Most thought it haunted, if not cursed, by the men and women from both sides who'd lost their lives. While Mal believed in neither haints nor curses, he had to admit that while it was one thing to name your ship after the place, it was quite another to put up a farm and settle there.

As he made his way down into the valley, he'd come across an occasional leftover from the war. While all the big wreckage had been removed - what with the Alliance hoping to erase what had happened there as much as they'd managed to sanitize the history books - he would spot an occasional bayonet, or entrenching tool; even a canteen with the owner's name etched into it.

Mal picked it up, and brushed the dirt away. It was no one he'd known, but he thought maybe he could find the family and return it to them, so he tucked it in one of his coat's inside pockets.

He took another step, and heard an ominous 'snick'. He closed his eyes, and muttered a curse under his breath. The trigger must have been hidden in the tall grass, and he'd carelessly stepped on it. He guessed that when they'd de-mined the place, a few got missed. He took his comm unit out of his pocket and tried to contact the ship, but no one answered his hail.

There was whisper in his ear, "Betcha never thought that once you got out of this valley alive that you'd end up dyin' here, didja Sergeant Reynolds?"

Mal looked around wildly to locate the source of the voice.

"Down here, Sarge."

He looked down. It wasn't a mine he'd stepped on, but a skeletal hand

Comments
Thursday, 06 July 2006 06:22
Very good and affecting. At one point I thought Bendis was going to ask Mal to pray over them so that the dead could move on. I could see Mal remembering all the dead and feeling guilty that he survived but they did not. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 07 July 2006 00:11
*whistles*

Man oh man, that was heavy. I can picture Mal having a great deal of horrific dreams on the war - you've captured one possibility spot-on. For a second I wondered if you'd do a similar one for Zoe, but then it occurred to me that her nightmares might revolve around something far different and more recent.......
Friday, 07 July 2006 03:46
Oh...you have definitely captured what it must be like for Mal some nights when his brain ain't percolating about Inara or finding the next job, qwerty:(

Can't wait for what you have appear for the remaining crew...though I gotta wonder if you're gonna temporally backtrack to get Book and Wash's nightmares...

BEB
Sunday, 22 October 2006 22:40
nice
FREEBIRDJR
Friday, 23 February 2007 23:40
You've got to be kidding me! How perfectly you have portrayed the emotion I feel when I think about Mal. His character is so near to my heart because, atop that rough exterior, he has the soul of man his priority. He is the man who thinks more about the soul of a man than their body, or condition of his life (unless he must think first about his own!). He cares about what it means to have your wishes carried out in good will and he controls his guilt through the good deeds he does for those he loves. He is my hero. I can't imagine a better portrayal of his anguish, than to be the one left behind. The one who must suffer the loss of those who had no chance. There's nothing he can do, but he never gives up. Even in the one episode where they have one of their old comrades come back, Zoe and Mal still take him home. They know the importance of the basics of life. The need to bury our dead. The need to forgive and move on. He knows he won't ever forget, but, you have got his pain down. No skeleton's though, if it's a dream (if you meant a skeleton to be talking to him). That's a little too surreal for what I think Mal would think about. He's too realistic for that. Do you mean to say that it was just the hand that was dessicated or was the body drooping skin holding its hands out to him?? I need more detail... More, please!

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