Blue Sun Room FICTION - HORROR

Nightmares: Simon

Wednesday, August 2, 2006

Ninth and final in the series. I was a bit frantic while writing this, and I hope you all feel that way reading it. Love it? Hate it? Let me know.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3956    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The usual disclaimer: They're not mine (though I wish Jayne was), and I'm making no $$$ off of this.

Credit for the plot bunny goes to my husband Andy. Thanks, Baby!

Feedback is greatly appreciated! Leave me lots, good or bad. Your encouragement/criticism is what keeps me going. :)

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Another job had gone south, and Mal had yelled over the comm. for River to have the ship ready to go as soon as they returned. Simon manned the control panel for the cargo hold doors waiting for River's signal to open her up, and Kaylee was tweaking Serenity's engine to make sure the ship wouldn't balk on takeoff.

He was surprised then, when his sister came clattering down the stairs. "River! You're supposed to be on the bridge!"

She shot him a wild look then yelled, "Too many of them...they're going to need help. Now open the doors, and get out of the way!" He hit the button, then she pushed him towards the stairs, "Get up there!" Simon hastily climbed up the stairs, and into Kaylee who'd heard the shouting. They stood by, and watched events unfold.

As the doors opened, Mal, Jayne, and Zoe sped in on the mule, with the men after them too close on their tails to shake. The men hopped off of their motorbikes and streamed after the crew into the cargo bay with guns blazing. While Mal and Jayne returned fire, Zoe dragged the goods off the back of the mule. It was fragile cargo, and with all the bullets flying around, they couldn't afford for it to be damaged.

That's when River got into the action. She leapt off the staircase rail and pummeled the nearest gunman, then with a flurry of kicks, ducks, and dives, took out two more. Just as the crew was getting the upper hand, River got caught in the crossfire and a bullet found its way to her, piercing her through the throat. It struck her carotid artery, and a torrent of blood began spray out, and down the front of her dress.

"River!" Simon yelled, then realized too late that he'd made a grave mistake. The gunmen, who had

Comments
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 22:43
You sure know how to ratchet up the tension! I held my breath as I read this.

I can see this absolutely being Simon's worst nightmare. And I think if the series had gone on long enough, especially if it had gotten Simon and Kaylee together, that this would have been something that happened. He'd have had to choose who to save.
Something similar to the unfilmed episode 'Dead or Alive'.

Well done.
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 22:53
Amazingly frantic and wholly believable - this is Simon's worst nightmare, the fact that he cannot save them. I think making him choose which actually be worse for him as then he'd have to live with the guilt of knowing that he made that choice.

But I loved this, my heart is pounding in my chest. Too bad he didn't wake up with Kaylee in his arms though - then he would probably have felt a lot better!

Great job!
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 23:44
Very well written. An incredibly enjoyable series. God, don't I sound pompous. Seriously though, great work.
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 23:48
great, so now i've got to go and try to sleep... meeep...
Thursday, 03 August 2006 00:26
Wow, that felt fast paced, my heads still whirling from it
Thursday, 03 August 2006 18:53
I think that you've definitely captured one of Simon's worst nightmares. Poor guy, even so much as dreaming up something like that. Great work!

Oh and hats off for how medically accurate you made this!
Saturday, 05 August 2006 07:35
Oh...you definitely captured one of - if not THE - worst nightmare Simon's mind could conjure up, qwerty! Few authors I find really take time to delve into Simon's hero/martyr complex concerning River and Kaylee, and how it would affect him to have either woman injured and needing his help:S

Still...glad you had Simon wake up and find Kaylee and River safe in their beds:D

BEB

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