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Testing The Fabric

Thursday, April 22, 2004

What if Mal had thrown Simon off the ship at the end of Serenity?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3186    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Testing the Fabric

by

KMS!

(kmspider@aol.com)

http://hometown.aol.com/kmspider/myhomepage/index.html

Timeline: Takes place during the pilot episode of Firefly: Serenity

Serenity:

Everything seemed to happen at once. Wash announced that Reavers were on their way, the engines were adjusted for takeoff outside, and Simon's attention veered for an instant.

The Lawman, Dobson, took advantage of his distraction and grabbed the gun from the floor, shooting at Simon. He jumped out of the way then rolled to his feet, but it was enough time for Dobson to grab River and hold a gun to her head.

"I'm not playing anymore. Anybody makes so much as…" Dobson began.

Simon barely had time to register the return of the Captain and his people when he jumped from the sound of a gun going off behind him. Dobson fell to the floor, a bullet through his head, his threats unfinished.

The full stride passed Simon by, and Captain Reynolds bent over the lawman, making sure he was well and truly dead. "Jayne!" the Captain called out to the big mercenary.

Too stunned to move, Simon continued to hold the gun pointed uselessly at Dobson. Watching the Captain and Jayne pick up the corpse and carry it out of the cargo bay got him moving again. He shifted toward River even as he heard Zoe telling Wash that they were on.

River's distressed noises made him realize that he was still holding the gun and he placed it on the floor, reaching for his sister again.

"It's okay, River. See? I've put it down," he tried to soothe her. Still skittish, she allowed him to wrap her in his arms. "Hush, mei mei, it's okay."

His arms tightened and he started to lead her back to the infirmary before being stopped by a large presence. The Captain loomed in front of them blocking their way.

"Where do you think you're going, Doctor? I told you you're getting off at Whitefall."

"What?" Simon replied blankly, glancing over his shoulder to the desert outside the carg

Comments
Thursday, 22 April 2004 20:11
Read this one on the Glow Archive, very happy to see it here too. This has to be one of the best AU's out there!!
Thursday, 22 April 2004 21:00
Loved it. Excellent characterization. Really enjoyed River being as useful as we've all come to hope she'd be. And liked that Mal didn't always take himself too serieously. All in all, a good time. Thanks!
Thursday, 22 April 2004 22:10
Very shiny, lots of action with some angsty bits and nice touches of humour too. I liked the tie-in with Patience and loved how Simon dragged a promise out of her not to shoot the Captain again, not that I am all believing that she'll keep it. Great fun, hope you write another soon. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 23 April 2004 00:26
The pacing of the story, with the different scene settings was very nice. I really like the way you filled in the picture with Patience and Whitehall. I particularly like the subtlety with Patience's greed -- allowing the obvious threat in her greed to come up, but stating it literally. And I like the way you wrote River's prescience.

A great read!
Friday, 23 April 2004 15:53
I must say, this is good! I really enjoyed it. Write more!
Sunday, 25 April 2004 08:17
You did a great job with dialog; all the characters sounded like themselves. I enjoyed it!
Tuesday, 27 April 2004 08:05
Good action and pacing, and a very intriguing direction to take the characters. Enjoyed it!
KMS
Tuesday, 04 May 2004 04:15
I'd just like to take a moment and thank everyone for their shiney comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

thanks,
KMS!
kmspider@aol.com
http://hometown.aol.com/kmspider/myhomepage/index.html
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 21 April 2006 01:16
Tippty Top!

Has to be the best fanfic I've read so far.
Excellent characterisation!
Wednesday, 19 March 2008 17:03
I just found this from the excerpt, and read it through. I have to say, it's excellent! Every character is perfect, and the story works on every level. I love Simon having a reaction to the opiates, and still getting the girls at the end! Mal's reasons for dumping him and River are well-explored, and reasonable, and I'd love to have seen this as episode 2. Well done!

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