Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Jayne's Kind of Dance

Tuesday, February 14, 2006

I rewrote this cahpter. Sequel to dress up.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2398    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Chapter 4

Authors Note: I FIXED IT! I rewrote some of this. Sorry that I took a while to post this… I started a new job… It sucks and I have been trying to smooth out the coming chapters of the Mattie crisis. Umm that next one might take a few days to get up. Well I hope you like this… It is questionable in my mind.

Jayne bunk closed as River entered the hall. She scowled at the closed hatch. Walking quietly over to it she tested to see if it was locked, and of course it was. She growled; he was not making this easy for her. After fiddling with the controls for a moment she stopped and waited. A green light notified her that Jayne’s bunk was now unlocked. Knowing the others were coming up the stairs she opened the hatch and slid down into the large merc’s room.

Jayne looked over when he heard the hatch relock. “What the gorram are you doing in here you fung luh girl?” River ignored him and ventured father into the room. “Not here. Tell them…” She said inspecting the pictures of almost naked women on Jayne’s walls. “Who?” he asked, only to have Mal’s voice answer his question.

“Jayne is River in there with you?” Jayne growled and moved to his com. He looked over a River, she was gorgeous, he just wanted to throw her down on his bed and take her right there.

“Nah Mal. I don’t know where that lil’ Crazy is at.” He replied. River giggle at him then made her way to his bed, swaying her hips the whole why. Jayne groaned and rolled his eyes.

“What do ya think you’re doin’ crazy girl? That’s my bed.” He growled out, annoyed. River just smiled and then patted the spot next to her. When Jayne didn’t move she gave him her puppy dog look. Jayne gave in and sat down next to her. Suddenly Jayne felt like a teenager on his first date.

“I miss your dreams.” River whispered into his ear. Jayne froze. Which dreams? He thought to himself. “Last night… before Mattie…” Jayne started at her. She knew… somehow she found out about his dreams of her. “You better be staying out of my head Girl!” Rive

Comments
Tuesday, 14 February 2006 20:41
It was ok. Not as good as the least few. Still trying to be okay with the thought of Jayne and River, keep working though its very intersting.
JOY
Thursday, 16 February 2006 04:04
I disagree - this is turning out wonderfully! Kudos on incorporating the crew's first meeting in River's dreams. You may, however, need a beta-reader, and I heartly volunteer! Can't wait to see what happens when Jayne introduces River to his Mother!
Saturday, 18 February 2006 03:58
lol... i love it!! As for the baby names i was suprised u mentioned tara... cause that's my name lol!! i think the jayne and river thing is great! everyone's got someone! :)
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 24 February 2006 03:48
first version was good, this rewrite is even better! -Joy
Tuesday, 28 February 2006 11:53
Both of their thoughts went straight into the gutter.
i'm proud to say, so did mine *wink*

and my favourite line:
"Cake?...I like cake."
heehee!!!

b

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