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Breakfest and Clean Up

Saturday, February 11, 2006

Sequel to Pained Hearts. Jayne now deals with the crew's pity and finds out more about River and her medication.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2368    RATING: 8.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Pained Hearts

Chapter 2

Authors Note: Okay so this Chapter kinda is just to fill up time and establish a few things. Enjoy!

The ship was quiet. This was the way River liked it. She didn’t get lost in others thoughts this way. She had gotten better after Miranda, but she was still a reader and everyone’s thoughts bombarded her. It caused her pain and made everything confusing for her to the point she couldn’t even sort out whose thoughts were whose. So when the ship was quiet and most everyone was asleep her mind was clearer and she could wander through her mind and everyone else’s with no pain or confusion at all.

River slid open her door and dragged Jayne inside with her. Jayne couldn’t help let his thoughts wonder from his dying brother to the small minx in from of him. Her nightgown pulled at all the right places. He stared at the white fabric stretched across her hips and backside; it was amazing no one had snatched her up as their own. It really made sense though, since she never really left the ship unless they had work. Everyone was taken too, but him, which made him feel lucky till he realized she would never want a merc like him.

River growled to herself at his last thought. She was starting to think all the men on this ship were boobs when it came to women. With a good push Jayne was sitting on her bed. He watched her in surprise when she shut her door and then proceeded to take the bottle of engine whine from him. It was a pure shock when she lifted it to her lips, and took a shot from it, and then handed it back to Jayne making a disgusted face. Jayne’s laughed echoed through the small bunk.

Moving past him with a smile, River climbed into the bed and covered herself up so that she was facing Jayne. “Sleep, Jayne.” She said pulling on his shirt.

“There ain’t no ruttin’ way I am sleepin’ in here with you, Crazy.” Jayne replied, taking a swig from the bottle.

“Please?” Asked her little voice. “Makes all the monster dreams go away... Please?” She had jutted out her lower l

Comments
Saturday, 11 February 2006 17:29
I Love It!
The idea that Jayne is River's anchor- such a good one!
Keep 'em coming!!
Saturday, 11 February 2006 17:32
I was the person who commented on the on your last one but name was anomymous. Anyway the River and Jayne thing still is a might unsettling. But its really good writing and I did enjoy reading it.
Its funny too see everyones variations on fanfiction for the show. Weather it be Mal and Inora porn (a little bit akward) or a story about jayne thinking of his family during hard times. Well Keep flyin'
JOY
Saturday, 11 February 2006 22:08
No, it's great! I'm enjoying it - in River's logic, similar to Simon's thinking to Kaylee, Jayne is the only choice based on eliminations of family, married or otherwise taken (Book, by God, and Mal by another godess). I like the pairings that are going on in your story too. This is a wonderful start. I even like Kaylee's engine "whine" - not the proper spelling, but I bet that's' exactly what it makes people do the next morning!

Just a few notes that might help: if someone is going to whisper or even facially express something, we want to know, even if no one else in the story hears it. It helps if their thoughts are the same as their individual speech patterns. Also, I find the most accurate portrayals of River have her referring to herself in 3rd person.

Sorry, that was more than i was going to write - I just get so excited when there's a new author brave enough to post because it gives me more to read! Keep it up!
Saturday, 11 February 2006 23:59
I hope Simon is able to help Jayne's brother and that they make planet fall soon. Keep going, want to see what happens next! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 12 February 2006 01:31
More please. I love the thread you've created! I love your Rayne, and the Wash/Zoe.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 12 February 2006 03:12
After Maranda River, starts talking in first person. She and her, are replaced by I if you have seen the movie. But when she gets more confused later on you will see the She and Her again.
Sunday, 12 February 2006 12:16
Good continuation and even me a confirmed Jaylee fan is enjoying your Rayne.
Tuesday, 21 February 2006 21:04
“Birth-control.” River giggled into his ear. Jayne’s thoughts went crazy.
hee!!!! that is so jayne...

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