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Sunday, February 12, 2006

Kinda post-BDM: River's crazy! A fanfic that attempts (badly) River-speak. It's short.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1923    RATING: 10.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Sky to the left and flung back far to the right: dawn. River ran. Construct that was River ran. All parts flowing: left to right, blood into blood and back through, arm to leg to arm, breast, massy hair, mouth. feet on rock. wind. She went up and down. She went. She hurled herself, and feet caught her, space, wind, until she cried, was crying, hurling forward and being caught.

things in her to surface. The trouble, infinite, with the construct "River" being that in the scope of a ripple-on-ripple model of perception there was far too much River for her "self," her "ego" to encompass (feet against stone, knees up and back, skip stone and hurl front stone on stone)--for twenty people, "River" would have twenty left arms, twenty massy hair, and be all twenty, the state of her reality being what it is

up now into up into air. River danced, and tears flowed down her cheeks and into her hair. Her sobs flowed into the hills breaking like a family of deer around the rocks and promontories curling down the bare ground and up the sides of the valleys like mist. captain captain captain

The Bacchae were followers of Dionysus. Their orgiastic religious practices led them into ecstasies of rage and sex, tearing whole men apart with bare hands

River is dancing. She throws herself out like a net like a fishing net each direction thrum throb thrum throb out into the promontories, thrown out each way like her hands, splayed naked and ragged as a peony petal. sobs split or are they words captain captain. the sky pink now and fresh as lemons, translucent as spilt lemon juice, the milk-white of the split seed river's thighs. the rocks cut feet.

arms down and up and legs up and down. there is a rhythm in it of the heart and lungs but erratic, imperfect, a steadier one. needed. thrum of the sun, rising, arcing, splitting the sky

captain captain

river dances. Sky splits behind rocks and promontories feet arcing on stone head and sob and arm, right arm, right arm and breast, arching into the rock. hair agains

Comments
Sunday, 12 February 2006 12:51
Lyrical, sensual, violent, frantic, hypnotic, lavish, tender.

Also, lovely.

What an overload of information, perception, confusion.

"They find her there. captain and captain-River. Captain-River shakes her head, such wonderful terrible eyes, and can't drop the ax can't rinse out the blood but what a beauty, what a like a sister to take care of"

This is so great!


I have a weakness for things that speak to the senses first, and follow the unreasonable tumble of impressions. Paints just as clear a picture, just on a whole different level. Very very good. You really caught the mess of River there.
Sunday, 12 February 2006 12:53
PS: How is your lovely script series going? Been a while since "Icarus"... *g*
Sunday, 12 February 2006 14:31
Very much enjoyed this, the broken darting fashion of the words mirroring the way I imagine River's mind skips from thought to thought, dipping into and out of subjects at a dizzying pace most others would not be able to keep up with. Very original and shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 22 February 2006 20:37
i love fics from river's point of view, always interesting to see how well people do the crazy. and you do it well, friend!

b

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