Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL
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Tuesday, 24 January 2006 17:42
Way to build up the tension! Excellently written as usual! More soon please please please? :D
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 17:46
“A man can’t get a bit a’ respect around here,” Jayne mumbled as he washed his scone down with tea from a delicate china cup.
... such a great visual.
Thank you for another treat!
Taya
... such a great visual.
Thank you for another treat!
Taya
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 17:55
Oh, thank goodness you updated! I've been dying to find out what's happening. Please don't delay too long in the next chapter! I'm completely on the edge of my seat! :-D
I'm glad to hear about the Prefect actually being one of the good guys. You had me nervous there for a bit. Now to find out how poor Mal's doing. *bites nails*
Whatever he's gone through, I'm hoping it doesn't make him externalize and reject the crewmates come to rescue him. Hopefully, although he'll still have to work through the grief and trauma of what he's endured, River's messages to him will help him to see what's real as well.
What Mal's gone through is such a personal thing that I hope that while the crew get the gist of it, they don't get to witness his fears... (Or that they get anything of value from him.)
But either way, you've done fabulous with this story so I trust you to keep up the great work. Thanks!
I'm glad to hear about the Prefect actually being one of the good guys. You had me nervous there for a bit. Now to find out how poor Mal's doing. *bites nails*
Whatever he's gone through, I'm hoping it doesn't make him externalize and reject the crewmates come to rescue him. Hopefully, although he'll still have to work through the grief and trauma of what he's endured, River's messages to him will help him to see what's real as well.
What Mal's gone through is such a personal thing that I hope that while the crew get the gist of it, they don't get to witness his fears... (Or that they get anything of value from him.)
But either way, you've done fabulous with this story so I trust you to keep up the great work. Thanks!
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 18:14
Hahahahaha. Jayne is always the whipping boy, but always comes through. Love it.
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 18:50
I adore Marone. He's a great character, interesting and useful and he fits into the action very naturally! His conversation with Inara at the beginning was perfectly paced between teasing and revealing.
Love to see a plan unfurling, love to see Simon's unshared memory of Dr. Mathias influencing the research he is doing here...
Oh, the suspense.
Next part soon?
Love to see a plan unfurling, love to see Simon's unshared memory of Dr. Mathias influencing the research he is doing here...
Oh, the suspense.
Next part soon?
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 19:03
Woo-hoo! I squeal and jump out of my chair when I see your updates. Wonderfully written, as always. I especially like how you've developed the Prefect, I had a great visual and audio of his and Inara's conversation. Super depiction of the crew swinging into action, everyone is spot-on. Love your Jayne. And I *think* I know what Zoe is taking care of, and if I'm right, I could hug you, because I think about it every time Mal gets caught with his hands up.
Whee!
Whee!
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 21:12
Can't wait for the next post!! You have me hanging on the edge of my seat!!
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 23:34
Absolutely brilliant! I was thrilled to see you had the next part up and ooh, what a great character the Prefect is! I was holding my gorram breath throughout the scene with Inara, hoping and praying that he is what he purports to be and isn't simply helping them get the Captain out in order to set them up to something even more sinister. But I definitely think there is much more to that character than any of us are seeing right now and that is a bit creepifying. I also love the way in which the whole crew is swinging into action to get Mal out. That's when you know a crew is family. Excellent! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 02:05
This is Excellent!
Must have more!!
I'm still worried about that prefect *and* what was Zoe's request??
Post 'em faster!
Must have more!!
I'm still worried about that prefect *and* what was Zoe's request??
Post 'em faster!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 05:23
Wow - cool - *nodding with approval*
I can totally see Prefect as a complex character, I think we'll see him again - good or bad.
Look at me, thinking there are more episodes coming, like this is part of the series and it is ongoing. Take it as a compliment :)
Chairman Yeng... how 'well-connected' is he? And is he going to have to die?
I can totally see Prefect as a complex character, I think we'll see him again - good or bad.
Look at me, thinking there are more episodes coming, like this is part of the series and it is ongoing. Take it as a compliment :)
Chairman Yeng... how 'well-connected' is he? And is he going to have to die?
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 07:26
Oh man, I love this. Just freaking adore it like nothing else. The plot the characterization, the speed with which you write.
ScrewTheAlliance is a major force around here with his last two epics and in my opinion s/he's rather cocky about his/her writing. You, on the other hand, have created a far more interesting and MUCH MUCH MUCH more true to character story here and yet are far more humble.
It is no easy feat to keep nine characters so completely honest to who they are as you've done. Let alone create such a wonderfully complex plot without overloading us with information or giving anything away too soon.
And... because I can't resist, I just adored this exchange:
“You pull this off Jayne,” Kaylee said, “I’ll lay a big juicy kiss on ya. Right after I’m done kissin’ the Captain.”
“You know I don’t kiss on the mouth, so you’ll have to pick out someplace else.” Jayne grinned at her. “I can make a few suggestions.”
Of course Kaylee would offer to kiss him, and Jayne would ruin it by being all crude. So perfectly in character and yet satisfying my love of Jayne/Kaylee at the same time. It's not a hard strech for my imagination to see something developing between these two at all.
ScrewTheAlliance is a major force around here with his last two epics and in my opinion s/he's rather cocky about his/her writing. You, on the other hand, have created a far more interesting and MUCH MUCH MUCH more true to character story here and yet are far more humble.
It is no easy feat to keep nine characters so completely honest to who they are as you've done. Let alone create such a wonderfully complex plot without overloading us with information or giving anything away too soon.
And... because I can't resist, I just adored this exchange:
“You pull this off Jayne,” Kaylee said, “I’ll lay a big juicy kiss on ya. Right after I’m done kissin’ the Captain.”
“You know I don’t kiss on the mouth, so you’ll have to pick out someplace else.” Jayne grinned at her. “I can make a few suggestions.”
Of course Kaylee would offer to kiss him, and Jayne would ruin it by being all crude. So perfectly in character and yet satisfying my love of Jayne/Kaylee at the same time. It's not a hard strech for my imagination to see something developing between these two at all.
Wednesday, 25 January 2006 11:42
Way cool! Another great installment.
But don't leave it too long, the suspense is killing me.
I like Inara's staunch defence of the captain.
Jayne and Kaylee's interaction is great, so them.
But don't leave it too long, the suspense is killing me.
I like Inara's staunch defence of the captain.
Jayne and Kaylee's interaction is great, so them.
Wednesday, 12 July 2006 17:12
*Jayne made peace with the idea of scones as food*
HAHAHAHAHA nice, I would have to agree with his reluctance.
I am glad they have a plan, and hopefully it will go somewhat smoothly. Naturally, I am very curious as to what Zoe asked the Prefect for.
HAHAHAHAHA nice, I would have to agree with his reluctance.
I am glad they have a plan, and hopefully it will go somewhat smoothly. Naturally, I am very curious as to what Zoe asked the Prefect for.
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