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The Fish Job: Chapter 10

Monday, January 23, 2006

What has that lazy crew been up to?

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River sat in the Prefect’s private transport and fidgeted, one hand under her veil so she could chew her thumbnail. The Prefect offered her a chocolate turtle, but she shook her head impatiently. Her eyes flicked from the window to Simon sitting across from her; since they’d left the flowershop she’d wanted to talk to him, but knew she wasn’t allowed.

The ride to Chairman Yeng’s residence took barely ten minutes. River was out of the transport as soon as the door opened, leaving Simon to gather her gifts, murmur an apology to the Prefect, and rush on his sore leg to follow her. She moved amazingly well considering her borrowed high heels were two sizes too big.

The door to Inara’s shuttle was open, and River ran in without pausing. Inara rose from the cortex just in time for the girl to throw herself into her arms.

“It’s okay honey,” Inara said. “We just need to leave a little early.” Inara threw a questioning look at Simon as he followed River into the shuttle.

“What’s happening?” he asked with his own look, noting the tousled bed in an otherwise empty shuttle.

“I was just trying to find you. Apparently the Captain has gotten himself into another mess and they’re leaving already. That man can’t even deliver a few fish without hitting a snag.” Inara looked down at River and lifted the veil off the girl’s face. “What happened with you two? River?”

River was hysterical, eye makeup running in smears down her cheeks. “No knives. Wires. Burn from the inside out. Turn everything bad.”

Simon took River out of Inara’s arms. “She was doing fine and then suddenly…” he shrugged. “…she just said we had to go.”

“She was right about that. I got a wave from Wash not ten minutes ago, they’re leaving the station. In a hurry. We’re to meet them in wide orbit.” Inara turned to seal the shuttle hatch. “Is River all right?”

“She

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 23 January 2006 14:41
Hmmm, interesting. I had to go back and read the lot to remember quite how River ended up pretending to be Daphne. Not a bad thing at all.

The question is, whose side is the Prefect on? And how is the crew going to get their Captain back? And what good is it doing Mal to be awake right now? I'm very intrigued to see how you'll draw all these threads together.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 23 January 2006 15:09
Oh, goody, another chapter!

Great job reflecting that exhausting, uncertain waiting process of looking for someone. I really feel for Zoe, here.

And ooh, I love the taste of threatening tension you put over the Prefect, his questions, the sense of Inara not being able to escape them without blowing her cover, the ice-freezing moment of being caught... and still I don't think he's evil. River would have felt it earlier, right?


I'm most curious to see this go on. :)
Monday, 23 January 2006 15:25
Another thrilling installment! It's like reading two different stories, going back to River and Inara after all the stuff Mal has been through! Well done though :D
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 23 January 2006 15:44
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Monday, 23 January 2006 16:10
It was a loooong weekend waiting for more, but again, a great chapter. Interesting how you're tying the Prefect into everything. Nice job with Inara, good job with River's dialogue, which is always tricky. I feel for the crew on their search - could visualize it all, from Kaylee & Jayne, to Zoe buying coffee for her informants, to the crew meeting up again over dinner. Really superb work.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 23 January 2006 16:45
I am so SO SO in love with this story, you don't even know.

This especially: “Jayne Cobb, I do believe you have a talent for this.”

“Glad someone gets that.”

Hee, of COURSE Kaylee's going to be the one to recognize that. This story is wonderfully put together, characterization is spot on.

I adore it. *Whispers* Some more scenes between Jayne/Kaylee would not go amiss.

Rinny
Monday, 23 January 2006 19:19
What a great day. First Kaynara's next chapter and then yours. You guys sure know how to keep a browncoat happy!

Taya

(Also... good job pulling the plot back in, it was starting to get a little rambling!)
Monday, 23 January 2006 23:57
Uh oh, I am not sure what to make of the Prefect. He seems to know way too much and now he has Inara! Gulp. I really don't like it that he chose to draw her away when she is alone, that can't be good. He's telling her jsut enough to go with him but not enough to say whose side he is on. I love how the whole crew is working together to try to find the Captain but think it will be River who will clue them in - hope, hope. Brilliant story! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 01:47
m4p,

Another cracking chapter! Sorry about not getting back to ya about beta reading....been a might backed up with class and work:(

Hope to get that remedied so you can roll out Ch. 11 & 12;)

BEB
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 11:33
Wow!
Did I mention you're a genius? this is so enthralling, and you write all of the characters so well, I don't like the Prefect- I get bad vibes, he'd better not hurt 'Nara.

Anyway a thrilling read as always m4p!
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 12:04
Great chapter, poor River not being able to explain herself.

I love the Jayne & Kaylee interaction too.

You've left us guessing with the Prefect, good or bad? Can't wait to find out.



Wednesday, 12 July 2006 15:59
Yikes @ Inara being found out, hopefully SImon and River can get some sort of warning, though I don't know how.

I am also very curious to see what the Alliance is trying to find out from people, so I am off to read the next chapter.

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