Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Thinking things throught part 6

Sunday, January 22, 2006

The captain gets involved and things are progressing slowly for Kaylee and Jayne

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3217    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Kaylee opened her eyes and groaned. The light was so blindin’ ‘n’ Serenity’s engine was poundin’ in her ears. Her head ached ‘n’ her innards were rollin’ round like marbles. Yep she’d had too much to drink last night.

On the plus side at least she’d managed to make it to her bunk. Unsteadily she sat up; somehow she’d even got herself a pillow for her arm and a blanket too.

Wished she could remember more of last night. She remembered bein’ so mad with Jayne that she’d gone out intendin’ to find a willin’ man.

When she started dancin’ she’d found plenty who were willin’, willin’ and able. Swai too, a couple of ‘em. In former times she would already have left the bar and got her needs tended to. A little sexin’ up, a little fun and no thinkin’ to worry her.

But she’d been nervous of lettin’ ‘em too close, didn’t want ‘em touchin’ her, kept thinkin’ of Early. Kaylee had thought herself over that; she really wanted to be over that.

So she’d taken a couple more drinks and danced all the harder. She loved dancin’ ‘n’ knew men were attracted to her dancin’. Sure enough more of ‘em had joined in, she had her pick. And that’s where her ‘not-thinkin’-‘bout-Jayne’ plan fell down. ‘Cause none of them were him. None of them were as big, as ornery, as clueless, as muscle-bound, and as thick as the man she wanted.

Dancin’ wasn’t fun anymore, so she went ‘n’ joined Mal at the pool table instead. They made a good team her and the Captain. Fellas usually underestimated her pool playin’ skills and the Captain took advantage of that. They always made a little extra coin. ‘Course playin’ pool with the Captain usually meant drinkin’ more than they should so that was the last bit of the night she remembered with any clarity.

The long shower she had still didn’t clear her fuzzy brain and she certainly didn’t feel like breakfast this mornin’. Even sittin’ at the table would make her sick. She’d just go up and check on the engine, maybe her memory would come back then.

When she arrived at the engine room, Kayle

Comments
Sunday, 22 January 2006 15:22
Awwww.

Now this part does a girl's heart good. It really does.

You're going so slow with them, it's really good, but very frustrating for the reader.

I like that you've got Mal seeing a lot more than either of our stubborn couple.

Keep 'em coming.
Sunday, 22 January 2006 16:28
This is such a gorgeous fic, I love how you have had these two circling each other, it's making things awful tense on a ship who's name sake means other wise.

Keep 'em comin!
Sunday, 22 January 2006 17:11
Very sweet!

and Mal being the go-between

I really like Jayne's voice and how his reactions aren't what Kaylee expects
Sunday, 22 January 2006 18:29
I love it.

Lots and lots.

*sighs*

good way to start the morning.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 22 January 2006 18:51
i love th stroy write more please
Sunday, 22 January 2006 19:33
This rocks all the harder the more of it I read, bookaddict.

Fave line: "And that’s where her ‘not-thinkin’-‘bout-Jayne’ plan fell down. ‘Cause none of them were him. None of them were as big, as ornery, as clueless, as muscle-bound, and as thick as the man she wanted."

Oh lords, I see him just that way too. And he's every bit as addicting to me as I'm happy to see he is to Kaylee.

Nobody writes these two quite as swai-ly as you do, book, and I'm all kinds of glad when I see a new chapter of your Jaylee come about.

Get back to writing, as often as you can. You've got anxious fans to continue satisfyin'.

Sunday, 22 January 2006 19:35
Oh! And another thing: I've got some of those awful experiences you mention that Jayne can't tell Kaylee heating up in The Way of Jayne. Working on my next part, but the part after that will take our boy places even I'm scared to go. And he's only 14 right now in my writing clutches. We'll see how that plays out...
Sunday, 22 January 2006 20:27
Awww!! I'm loving this story, bookaddict.

Going slow, keeping us readers interested, and a little frustrated as we wait for Jayne and Kaylee to get together........

Hey, are you flirting with US, like little Kaylee flirting with Jayne??!!!

Don't keep us waiting too long, or we may need to go find us sone trim!!!! We want to wait for YOU, but that flirting's getting us hot & bothered and we may have to read other fanfic for fictional satisfaction whilst we're waiting!!!!

LOL!!!!!
Sunday, 22 January 2006 21:53
Excellent! People are always underestimating Jayne and I can see him developing feelings like this for Kaylee. I also loved it that Mal pointed out to Kaylee that Jayne isn't like other fellas she's been with, that he ain't tame because that hits the nail too. Love how you are not rushing this story, that elevates it even more. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 23 January 2006 01:40
I love protective, guidance counsellor Mal. He's very insightful about his crew at times, and they really needed his input here to give them that little shove forward. I like that he's kind of reluctant about giving that shove, too.

I'm also glad that both Jayne and Kaylee are coming to realize that there's something deeper than just lust goin' on - although there is plenty of that! ;P

And now fishin'. Yay! Someone gonna fall in the creek? I love me the idea of a soaked-to-the-skin Jayne...

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