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Left Behind

Tuesday, January 10, 2006

I offered Rinnypj fic for her birthday, and she said she wanted Zoe and Jayne bonding. So here it is.

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Zoë pulled herself slowly up the rocky hillside, using her uninjured arm to heave herself over the top of the incline so she could peer down into the deep crevice on the other side. She squinted into the darkness, looking to make out any forms that were hidden below.

She could just make out a hint of yellow that seemed more vibrant then any color the environment would provide, so she withdrew her last glow stick and used her teeth to crack it, mixing the chemicals so that it gave off a soft yellow light. She reached out and dropped it into the abyss and watched as Jayne’s prone body came into view.

Using the small increase in light to survey the crevice, she searched for a way down or and alternate path to reach the mercenary. She quirked a small relieved smile when she saw his hand reach out and cover up the light.

His voice was so low she only heard it because of the stillness around them. “Gorram it woman, ya tryin to let everyone on this moon know where I am?”

“Just myself,” she said in response to his growl. She knew that the risk was in fact hers and not his. Since their enemy had shot him and tossed him into this crevice like so much garbage, it was likely they already knew where he was. Zoë threw up a silent thank you to whatever forces saw to such things that the mercenary was still alive. Backing away from the edge, Zoë looked carefully around. She had seen an access point at the southern tip of the crevice, and with her left arm next to useless she would have to see if she could gain entry that way. Should she fall and become further injured she wouldn’t be able to help anyone.

She maneuvered her way down the slope, sliding several times in the loose gravel.

When she reached the bottom she sank into the shadows the hill and rocks provided, and made her way south. In the darkness she used her fingers to aid her eyes, searching for anything that might be an access point to the crevice Jayne had been abandoned in. After several long moments her finger tips sank into a sand filled c

Comments
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 00:47
This was really good!

It's very believable between the two and you had me smiling more than once during this.
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 02:06
Good stuff! Very Zoe and Jayne. I was grinning the whole way through.

“I don’t leave my men behind.”

Aww, Zoe's men. I bet she thinks of them that way too.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 03:17
Very Shiny!

You set the perfect tone for Zoe and Jayne to bond a bit.

I loved the dialog, very true to character.
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 06:33
What everyone else said- great story, great setting, great dialogue.
True to life and totally believable
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 12:54
Really good interaction between two warriors.

"Too damn annoying to die."
Like that one!
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 14:16
A really, really great piece of writing. They're both so brusque it's hard to get real emotional connection sometimes, but you did it with ease.
*thumbs up* Good job! ;P
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 16:34
Had the show run longer, I know we'd have seen more episodes like "War Stories" where characters get to interact one on one. This feels like a perfect slice from one of those episodes. Good work.
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 19:17
“What else is a girl s’posed to give her mercenary?”
what indeed?

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