Just a little piece of Jaylee fluff that was floatin’ ‘round my brainpan… Or Jaylee lint that was floatin’ ‘round by bellybutton… You decide.
IMPRESSION
By Canton Heroine
They didn’t meet straight off.
Kaylee’d stepped down into the cargo bay, just in time to see his back end goin’ out t’wards the kitchen. All she could tell from the glimpse she got was that he weren’t average-sized none.
“Man’s hungry,” the Captain commented, nodding at the doorway. “Ain’t been eaten fit servin’s for a month or more.” There was a pause before he added dryly, “Don’t seem none the worse for it though. Still the biggest, meanest gorram tracker I ever saw.”
Kaylee didn’t much like the sound of that. Big an’ mean weren’t her cup of tea. She knew there had to be a grain o’ truth on account that Mal didn’t lie to her, and that he’d specifically been on the lookout for some extra muscle since him and Zoe almost got nabbed a while back, but she weren’t one to make assumptions ‘bout how someone ought to be took on first appearance. She reckoned to follow said tracker to see for herself.
He whipped ‘round from starin’ all lost-like at the table when she come in, and she gasped like she’d had her breath knocked clean out.
Sweet Buddha, but he was swai. Taller’n her pa and built real solid. Her old gramma would’ve called him ‘strapping’.
Thick muscles rippled and rolled along his tanned arms, stretched out the material of his tight blue t-shirt like they had a life of their own. Her eyes shifted from the breadth of that undulatin’ landscape down long, powerful legs, takin’ in with awe how the gunstrap ‘round his thigh was stretched taut with the strain of holdin’ on.
He cleared his throat and her wide eyes shot to his face. That’s when her respiratory system plain shut down altogether. Weren’t fair on a body, him bein’ so unexpected fine.
“Hi,” she squeaked.
“Hey.” They stared at each other for a full five seconds ‘fore he broke contact and scratched at his scruffy dark head. “Uh… Where ya hidin’ the grub?
Kaylee seems right in character. I'm not sure Jayne would jump in so quick to help, but then maybe he was trying to impress her or lookin for an excuse to touch her, so it works. And it's perfect that the first place he heads is to check out that free run of the kitchen Mal'd promised. The comment that Mal makes about him not getting enought to eat is a nice touch too.
Good Job!
Ya done good, ya done real good.
By 'first' do you mean to insinuate there'll be more, 'cause I definitely want more.
I've LOVE more. Especially to see how they go from mutual attraction to 'just friends' by the pilot!
I admire the way you use a Jayne voice to tell the story. I'm not sure I could maintain that for a whole fic. That's definitely a strength.
Do not end here. We must have more.
Oh, yah, almost forgot.
Please?
You're the best...
However, perhaps I should have been more specific. This isn't my first fan fiction EVER, just my first in THIS 'VERSE. It took me a while to find the right voice, and then this fell out yesterday afternoon at work.
My other stuff (BtVS, if anyone's interested) is over on fanfiction.net under the name Dee Bradfield.
A fine piece of writing, and nice to see someone write a description of Jayne that is like spoken from my own lips. A hunk he is...oh yes.
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