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The Shiny Affair of Mr. Pink- Chapter 5

Friday, November 18, 2005

Jayne's cranky and Mr. Pink is... well...

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CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1907    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Jayne pushed the barbell away from ‘im like it’d done somethin’ personal.

His teeth were still grit. They were startin’ ‘ta hurt. But he was frustrated. He’d been frustrated fer… over a year now. Frustrated lookin’ at Kaylee an’ not touchin’. An’ now frustrated with bein’ so close an’ havin’ that go se doc…

It was like they was lookin’ at each other through a little hole in a wall. An’ she was practically beggin’ fer ‘im ta come over ta her side.

Huh choo-shang tza-jiao duh tzang-huo.

His knuckles were white on the barbell. Gorram fantastic time fer Kaylee ta notice that there was a big piece a Jayne hankerin’ fer her.

Fan-ruttin’-tastic.

An’ what was he supposed ta do? He weren’ no gentleman. Under normal circumstances, he’da smacked the doc around an’ taken Kaylee. But this weren’t normal circumstances. They was all sittin’ in a little ship in the middle of a little rock waitin’ fer a gorram companion ta—

“You tryin’ ta hurt yourself? ‘Cause you’re doin’ a good job.”

Jayne let the barbell drop inta place real loudly an’ sat up ta look at Zoe. “Why the gorram hell are we still on this gorram rock? There are other jobs ta be done an’ other money ta be had. What’s so special about this job an’ this money that we have ta sit here an’ rot while ‘Nara goes an… an’… whatever?”

Zoe looked at ‘im real even. “We’re still on this rock because Mal said we stay on this rock. For whatever reason he has.”

Jayne stood up, his anger flarin’ an makin’ ‘is ears buzz. “Well I can’t stay on this ruttin’ ship forever! I can’t sit here an’ just…wait. If the money is so gorram important, why don’t we just go in there an’ take it an get OUT of here?”

Zoe was still givin’ him that look. “Because there are seven of us and at least twelve of them that we saw. Probably more. So if you want ta go try, be my guest. I’m gonna sit here an’ wait.”

Jayne ground his teeth an’ went ta his bunk.

***

Inara came back way before anyone expected ‘er ta. Mal called ‘em all together again

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 18 November 2005 08:10
"Suddenly, the doc weren't smilin' no more."

The best part.
Friday, 18 November 2005 09:29
Absolutely brilliant! I was laughing so much had tears in my eyes. Wonder what will happen next? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 18 November 2005 10:36
Bwahahahaha!

I so love that whole scene, from blurty!Mal to the not-smiling-anymore Simon. Hi-larious!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 18 November 2005 11:52
“Who’da thought?”

Jayne snorted. “All’ve us.”

heh heh heh
Friday, 18 November 2005 11:55
Oh, Simon. Teee heee heee. This was awesome. Jayne's gonna have so much fun with him.

(my bippies are currently in escrow, you won't collect 'til I see some Jaylee).
Friday, 18 November 2005 12:48
An unexpected twist, what fun! But more Jaylee please??
Friday, 18 November 2005 14:29
OH MY GOD!

That is priceless. Simon, SIMON, has to seduce a pimp. What a twist, and I can't wait to read it!

*Grin* You so completely rock.
Friday, 18 November 2005 15:44
"suddenly, the doc weren't smilin' no more"
bwahahahahahahahahaha…ha…hack…hack…furball *grins* love it!!!

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BEAUTIFOOL
Friday, 18 November 2005 17:06
can i just say how much i love you all? oooh, my darling darling peanut gallery. may i keep you?

more jaylee is on the way, jaqui, so you keep those bippies on hand. but you haveta admit... simon seducing mr. pink the supa pimp is just too nice ta pass up. this... THIS is the part of the story that had me giggling to myself at night.

but yes. much more jaylee sweetness comin'. cross my heart.

<pounds bellona on the back to get the furball out>

and no, rinny... YOU rock.

love love love for you all.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 18 November 2005 20:05
Heh, Simon's gonna get all gussied up and go strutting the streets. ROFL!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 19 November 2005 13:52
oh I missed this! I can't believe it. I've been waiting somewhat patiently for another chapter and then somehow I missed it.

grr

Ok enough ranting on to commenting. . .
"Suddenly, the doc weren’t smilin’ no more."
Bwahahaha!

This is a fun twist! I can't wait to see where it goes. I love poor Jayne ranting in his head as he lifts. Poor baby.
Saturday, 19 November 2005 13:54
gorram stupid logout!

Annon above is me. ::rolls eyes::
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 21 November 2005 18:04
I just laughed out loud. At WORK!!

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