Author’s Note: This story was inspired by something I read in Rosie Magazine (I hate that magazine, just for the record, but given a choice between it and staring blankly at the ceiling, well, my convictions falter). Anyways, this story would have happened about 45 minutes after the end of “Serenity,” and steels the punch from a lot of the conversations in “Train Job” – which is just fine with me because, timeline wise, “Train Job” make no sense whatsoever (like you can have a near-fatal gun shot wound and be up and about in less than three months of intensive physical therapy (Shameless self promotion, see my fic: Therapy)). Anyway’s that’s the stitch; enjoy and thanks for reading.
Peanut butter, we got
River wondered through the ship.
It felt like a dream.
One of those annoying dreams people only have when they are extremely hungry or thirsty and yet, are too tired to wake up and remedy the situation. A dream where there is a waterfall that you drink out of, then you think you wake up, and go to a large fountain to drink out of, then you think you wake up and go to a drinking fountain, then you wake up for and you realize you are in your bed and none of the thirst-satisfying situations you conceived had done you a bit of good: you still have to get out of the warm bed and find something to drink.
But River knew this was not a dream, because she wasn’t in pain and she wasn’t afraid. Of course, her stomach did hurt a little. It felt hollow and seemed to twinge. She was hungry.
Simon had said the drugs would help her sleep. He’d wanted her to sleep. She didn’t understand why. It occured to her, as she crept past him, sound asleep on a couch, that perhaps he wanted her to sleep so he could sleep. Perhaps he thought she needed sleep. Perhaps he knew that they were living in a dream and a fantasy. She wasn’t sure.
Her thoughts seemed to shift, like puzzle pieces in a box. They were disjointed, unformed. She hadn’t had to think for so long, or maybe she hadn’t been free to think fo
Cool character interaction. I don't know about Mal calling anybody "sweetie" though.
Good insight into River's character. Very nice.
I dunno about "sweetie" either, but I can't talk since in my maiden voyage into Firefly ficdom I have him call Kaylee "sweetheart."
I had a hard time believing that Zoe and Mal couldn't do a damn thing for Kaylee's stomach wound, but they patch old Book right up after he gets shot in "Safe", and in my uneducated opinion, a bullet in close proximity to the heart would be more fatal than one to your belly. Course next ep he seems to be just fine and dandy. That left me thinking that 500 years from now, all "very smart" doctors and all Gestapo Space Cops are damn good at puttin' folks right after they've had a fatal wound. lol
It's too short a story. You captured River's dialogue beautifully, for the most part...and Mal's dialogue is just about perfect. My only commentary is that Mal is a bit *too* kind here. Maybe he just hasn't worked up that edge yet with River, but you'd think he'd start hard, and soften with time as he comes to understand her plight. Don't think of that as a criticism of what you wrote...because it really is very good. If you expand, though, that might be something to look at. Good luck!
I have to say, this is one of my favorite fics. It's a great character study, drawn with a delicate but sure hand. Lovely--and thanks.
It just keeps getting better. Thank you.
-Browncoat2006
On to the story - this is a very nice read. I like the setup, I like the premise, and I enjoyed the outcome. Very nice, indeed.
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