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Peanut butter, we got

Thursday, January 9, 2003

A vignette: After “Serenity” River tries to understand her new life with Mal’s help. (NOT a M/R story, not at all)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 7695    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Author’s Note: This story was inspired by something I read in Rosie Magazine (I hate that magazine, just for the record, but given a choice between it and staring blankly at the ceiling, well, my convictions falter). Anyways, this story would have happened about 45 minutes after the end of “Serenity,” and steels the punch from a lot of the conversations in “Train Job” – which is just fine with me because, timeline wise, “Train Job” make no sense whatsoever (like you can have a near-fatal gun shot wound and be up and about in less than three months of intensive physical therapy (Shameless self promotion, see my fic: Therapy)). Anyway’s that’s the stitch; enjoy and thanks for reading.

Peanut butter, we got

River wondered through the ship.

It felt like a dream.

One of those annoying dreams people only have when they are extremely hungry or thirsty and yet, are too tired to wake up and remedy the situation. A dream where there is a waterfall that you drink out of, then you think you wake up, and go to a large fountain to drink out of, then you think you wake up and go to a drinking fountain, then you wake up for and you realize you are in your bed and none of the thirst-satisfying situations you conceived had done you a bit of good: you still have to get out of the warm bed and find something to drink.

But River knew this was not a dream, because she wasn’t in pain and she wasn’t afraid. Of course, her stomach did hurt a little. It felt hollow and seemed to twinge. She was hungry.

Simon had said the drugs would help her sleep. He’d wanted her to sleep. She didn’t understand why. It occured to her, as she crept past him, sound asleep on a couch, that perhaps he wanted her to sleep so he could sleep. Perhaps he thought she needed sleep. Perhaps he knew that they were living in a dream and a fantasy. She wasn’t sure.

Her thoughts seemed to shift, like puzzle pieces in a box. They were disjointed, unformed. She hadn’t had to think for so long, or maybe she hadn’t been free to think fo

Comments
LJC
Thursday, 09 January 2003 18:43
This is just lovely!
Thursday, 09 January 2003 22:29
Do they at least have jelly?

Cool character interaction. I don't know about Mal calling anybody "sweetie" though.

Good insight into River's character. Very nice.
Friday, 10 January 2003 02:30
I think that this is a great character study. I can imagine that it must be hard to find River's words. That dialogue never pulled my focus. I agree with goldenthorn on the "sweetie," though. I think that the Mal and River path could be a fruitful one. You're much farther down it than I. What do you see?
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 11 January 2003 00:38
i really enjoy this story. The descriptions are really great. It's very refreshing to see Malcolm playing a caring, sweet guy. I would like River and the captain to have more one-on-one dialogues. Some more chemistry. They are just perfect. She softens him up. Please write more about them. Since I new episode on TV, these fanfics have cheered me up.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 16 January 2003 00:10
You capture the scene real well. I love the way Mal speaks and especially his kindness. Thank you for sharing. Please write more. These fanfics cheer me up as well.
Sunday, 26 January 2003 05:20
Only thing that sucked was realizing that they're all going to go blind soon. ;)

I dunno about "sweetie" either, but I can't talk since in my maiden voyage into Firefly ficdom I have him call Kaylee "sweetheart."

I had a hard time believing that Zoe and Mal couldn't do a damn thing for Kaylee's stomach wound, but they patch old Book right up after he gets shot in "Safe", and in my uneducated opinion, a bullet in close proximity to the heart would be more fatal than one to your belly. Course next ep he seems to be just fine and dandy. That left me thinking that 500 years from now, all "very smart" doctors and all Gestapo Space Cops are damn good at puttin' folks right after they've had a fatal wound. lol
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 29 January 2003 19:53
Hey,

It's too short a story. You captured River's dialogue beautifully, for the most part...and Mal's dialogue is just about perfect. My only commentary is that Mal is a bit *too* kind here. Maybe he just hasn't worked up that edge yet with River, but you'd think he'd start hard, and soften with time as he comes to understand her plight. Don't think of that as a criticism of what you wrote...because it really is very good. If you expand, though, that might be something to look at. Good luck!
Sunday, 02 February 2003 05:10
I really enjoyed this. Don't care that Mal isn't as ornry as he's usually shown. Late at night, dealing with an obviously wounded child, maybe he doens't need the defenses of acerbic wit and 'I'm a bad man' attitude. :) River is written note perfect, and Mal is how I'd like to imagine he could be when necessary. Dong ma? Thanks for posting,and please keep writing about Mal. :)
Thursday, 27 March 2003 07:16
Hi,

I have to say, this is one of my favorite fics. It's a great character study, drawn with a delicate but sure hand. Lovely--and thanks.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 07 April 2003 02:36
This is at least the 4th time I've read this story...
It just keeps getting better. Thank you.
Wednesday, 27 August 2003 21:21
You amaze me! Short, simple and yet soooo good!
Wednesday, 26 January 2005 04:05
Great job. You write River very well - I can't wait to read some more of your stuff!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 01 November 2005 05:18
You captured River beautifully! Would love to see what Mal is thinking at the same time.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 20 March 2006 19:18
wow, nice character interaction, Mal could really help bring River outta her creepifying-ness, but I dought that he would call anyone "sweetie," real interesting work, I would like to see you continue this.
-Browncoat2006
Thursday, 20 April 2006 20:14
Your River is very good. I really enjoyed listening to her. Mal didn't quite sit right for me, but it wasn't the "sweetie" as much as the "yer". Just one man's opinion, though.

On to the story - this is a very nice read. I like the setup, I like the premise, and I enjoyed the outcome. Very nice, indeed.
Wednesday, 12 July 2006 19:17
A moment with Mal's defenses, nice. I liked the story, I think you captured a moment that tells a lot about each character.
Friday, 15 December 2006 14:07
A very pretty moment.

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