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Honeyed Thorns: Part five of five

Friday, July 18, 2003

A happy return to the status quo

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CHAPTER FIVE

“Hey!” Mal yelled cheerfully to his first mate and pilot as he walked up the hatch. He had their lucrative cargo slung over his shoulder and they were soon to be back in the sky. Life was very good. “How long ‘till we can be on our way?”

“Where we goin’?” Wash asked.

“Bulwark,” Mal said.

“Bulwark?” Zoë asked, bewildered. “We’ll never get work there, Cap’in.”

“On the contrary,” Mal said, tossing Zoë a black duffel bag. “We already got work there. Mind stowing the cargo?”

“This is the cargo?” Zoë asked skeptically. “Seems a might light.”

Mal smiled as he walked past her and into the cargo bay. “Would you believe there are over a thousand condoms in that bag?”

“What exactly did you do in that jail?” Wash asked, although his tone of voice made it pretty clear that he didn’t really want to know.

“We learned that, if you know how to fence them right, those baby’s go for a credit a piece on Bulwark.”

“That’s a little pricey,” Wash said, following his wife to the nearest smugglers nook to help her remove the heavy deck plating.

“Didn’t you two know God created sex is for procreation, not for fun,” Mal said with mock seriousness. “’Thorities on Bulwark want to make sure it stays that way.”

“Well,” the pilot said as his wife threw the small, lucrative bag, in the hold, “I’m all for bringing good, fun, consequence-free sex to the people of Bulwark.”

“Feels good to do good,” Mal nodded. “And, with a generous 30% transport fee, it pays good to do good as well. So, how ‘bout we hit that sky?”

“Can’t sir,” Zoë said quickly, leaving the hatch for her husband to close alone.

“Can’t why?”

“There’s someone waiting for you up in shuttle one,” Zoë said, nodding up to the shuttle’s closed door. “Lookin’ to rent the place.”

“Oh,” Mal said, pleasantly surprised. “Great, I guess we can delay a couple minutes. But, ah, make sure we’re set to go when I say.”

“Yes sir,” Zoë clipped.

Mal smiled, “That’s what I like to hear.”

* * *

“Zhi fan shi fu xi

Comments
Saturday, 19 July 2003 03:33
I think you write the best Inara, and I really like your River as well.

Great Story !!!!!!!
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Saturday, 19 July 2003 21:23
super-shiny
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 22 July 2003 00:48
Hi there Harriet I just want to say that I really enjoy your writing and that I log on to this website daily to see if any you've blest us with any more of your prose. That said i have to say I am a little disappointed in this last chapter. The lovey dovey parts were so trite and a little goofy. The scene with Mal and Inara was confusing he at first he wants to compromise her and the next moment...well i really don't know what to makeof it. I just have come to expect more sinceyou have written emotional pieces with much more depth and complexity-The Ties That Bind and Passengers; those have been much more mature and layered. I really want my critism to be constructed not hurtful i am sorry if it is the former and not the latter. I hope to read more from you soon you truly are a talented writer and i do hope i haven't offended you.
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Friday, 01 August 2003 21:40
Hey there, I just wanted to drop a review and let you know this is a great fic! I like the way the happy ending was happy but not unrealistically so. Simon and Kaylee all the way--what can I say, they ARE goofy and adorable, it's just the way they are together.

I've never been a huge fan of Inara (too ice-queen for me), so I got kind of a kick out of her getting the cold shoulder from everyone. HA! So much for this much-vaunted Companion training we keep hearing about. Honestly.

Oh, and like in all your stories, the writing and characterization are wonderful. I love your Simon and River especially--you always take care to keep Simon's polite, educated manner of speaking, and you do the best River ever!
Tuesday, 02 December 2003 03:26
The ending was good, I liked it. I like how you ended it with Simon and Kaylee. I think you're a very talented writer. I can't write well, but I'm going to try my hand at a fanfic.

Keep writin', keep flyin'!
Thursday, 28 April 2005 23:33
"on the core, you don’t need other people the way you do on the outer planets. Society is so built up, so automated, that you could get everything you needed without seeing another human."

How astute of you... maybe this is why I'm always dreaming about living on Serenity instead of in our apathetic culture. Sigh.

I liked the story a lot, but I was expecting more oomph from this last chapter. Things tied up a bit too neatly for me. I would've loved more drama when Mal returned, after all that's happened with Kaylee, and a more complex Inara/Kaylee reunion. I'm a sucker for hurt/comfort in fics, hehe.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 07 September 2005 23:17
This is a great series with lovely, excellent moments. Especially Simon and, naturally, Inara... I'm very impressed.
Not to mention all that lovely detail you put into her background and the great planet of Sihnon!

The only thing that didn't quite work for me was this chapter. Yes, Inara messed up. But she's not the only one on board who ever did, and Simon, of all people, was willing to forgive Jayne a far more threatening betrayel on the show, so I'm a little put off by the utterly uncompassionate reception Inara is getting. I appreciate the hesitancy, but the utter rejection of her apology, the distinct play at coldness and the fact that no one is trying to understand her side of the coin without judgment, no one... That's too harsh.

It's not unlike Mal, really, her fear of intimacy. Her way of dealing with it is different, though.

It was an unsatisfactory ending to an otherwise magnificent story.

Still, I very muvh enjoyed reading it. Wonderful job!
Monday, 23 January 2006 22:17
This was so excellent. I'm a huge Simon and Kaylee fan and this story was just wonderful. The characterizations were just spot on.

Love it.

Hope you continue to write!

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