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Honest Run: Dance

Friday, November 26, 2004

Peeking in on the rest of the crew...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3798    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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She was a picture of beauty.

Wash stood there admiring his wife as she watched most of the crew down below in the cargo bay from one of the catwalks above it. She had just gotten the wave from Mal half an hour ago. She had been quiet since.

The captain and the doctor were just beginning to descend into the planet. According to what Zoe had just told the rest of the crew, everything and everyone was fine.

“So,” Wash pulled gently on Zoe’s arm, “What did the captain say?”

Zoe snared Wash’s wrist sharply, before abruptly letting it go.

“Ow,” Wash took back his hand, “That’s a bit painful for foreplay, dear.”

There was an apology in her eyes, but it didn’t make it to her lips.

Wash offered his hand back, “It’ll be hard to do what I do, but you can have it if you want it…”

The statement couldn’t bring a smile to Zoe’s face, but there wasn’t one on Wash’s either. The offer was genuine, if a little macabre.

“Thanks, honey,” Zoe said, “I’ll let you know.”

Unsatisfied with the response, Wash leaned over with her, “You want to talk about it?”

Zoe didn’t look at him. She wasn’t looking down below either, “About your hand?” she asked.

“No.” Wash said seriously, “About this thing with you lately. Somethin’s on your mind,” he said sharing with Zoe the particular piece of hull that had earned her scrutiny, “Been on it since the captain got the bug to do this job with the doctor.”

“And?” Zoe clearly wasn’t in the mood.

“Nope.” Wash said, “Not going to do it,” he laid his hand, slower this time, on her shoulder, “I’m not going to let you push me away. Not by making me mad at least,” he smiled, thinking of a joke, but having the control to keep it to himself. He banished the smile in quick order too, “I know that I’m not Mal, but being the other half’s gotta count for something…”

The confession was hard, but it did the job. Zoe turned her head, “It does, honey. It does. But I don’t understand it myself. I couldn’t explain it to Mal either.”

Its just a feeling?” Wash said, “Intuition?”

“Somet

Comments
Friday, 26 November 2004 11:10
I'd seen this idea float around the message boards, so I thought that it would make for a great complication/explanation for Inara's leaving.

I live for the comments, so let them fire.

Happy Thanksgiving all,

And most of all,

Keep flyin'
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 26 November 2004 13:27
Excellent but ow! Poor Inara. This was beautifully put together and it also had those nice touches with Inara teaching Jayne to dance, a Jayne who already knew how (chuckle). I am curious at Mal taking the Doc with him planetside presumably on a job without the rest of them. Makes me wonder if he knows something is wrong with Inara, why else take Simon? He is doing some detective work of his own? One last thing, with all the shiny advances in the Core planets I would have thought even something currently as invasive as cancer was curable. Can't wait to see how you intend to further this story. Kudos to you, good myth. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 26 November 2004 13:46
You do all the hard people - Jayne and Zoe - with depth and perception, bringing something fresh out of them. Very professional, very good.
Friday, 26 November 2004 21:33
Very good. I'll have to come back and read it again when I'm not so tired! Is there a part one that I missed somewhere or is this the begining of the tale?
Saturday, 27 November 2004 00:40
Excellent job jack!! Zoe and Wash were right on. Loved the interaction between Inara and Jayne more than words. I torment several people by alluding to Inara/Jayne ship so I was gleeful to see this fic.;)

Fine job all around. Can't wait to see more.
Monday, 29 November 2004 02:29
Very much enjoying this story! I went back and reread the first part that you'd posted a ways back. Looking forward to seeing all the parts and elements come together.
Tuesday, 11 January 2005 19:42
Excellent but ow, poor poor Inara. And I can only imagine the shock the others are going to feel once they find out, if she even tells them. Great story and I just loved bashful Jayne! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 13 January 2005 02:17
The Calvin and Hobbes reference for Wash is perfect!
Does anyone else think Wash is a bit like Spaceman Spiff?

Great work on the Jayne dance thing, too.
Monday, 12 December 2005 06:54
I'm with the anonymous poster, I liked the Calvin&Hobbes reference. Wash as Spaceman Spiff, though... I don't know about that quite so much but it's within the realm of conceivable.
Anyway, I'm new but liking the story so far.Good work.
Sunday, 11 June 2006 14:59
Really good. So sad for Inara, but so sweet with Jayne secretly being able to dance, and Kaylee being so happy about having someone to dance with....

Beautifully written, CastIronJack!

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