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The Reaction (Part II of The Suprise)

Wednesday, August 6, 2003

So just how did the crew and passengers react to the surprise? Read this and find out.

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OK this starts where The Surprise (http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=244)leaves off. Won't make sense unless you read it first. You know all the disclaimers and such. Hope you enjoy.

The Reaction (Part II of the The Surprise)

There was a sudden shocked silence in the cargo bay. Inara was the first to react. She turned dead white, gave Mal a look of utter pain, and ran to her shuttle. Wash broke the silence with a joke. No one laughed. "Dying," River exclaimed. Everybody jumped at that and turned to stare at her. Mary Jo started crying harder and Mal hugged her close.

Mal and Simon exchanged looks. Simon could see that Mal would appreciate it if he explained rather than making Mal do it. Well he was a doctor, he was used to giving people the bad news. "That’s right, River, Catie is dying. But I can make her more comfortable here. I need to get her to the infirmary though." On that note, he guided the stretcher to the infirmary.

Kaylee came up to Mal and put her hand on Mary Jo’s shoulder. "Honey, I’m Kaylee. I’m very pleased to make your acquaintance. Let me introduce you to everybody and take you around and show you the ship. Then we can settle you down in your own quarters. Captain, you want me to put her in the free room in the passenger dorm or the crew quarters?"

"She can choose, I don’t care which it is." Mal gave Kaylee a sort of a half smile, that being as much as he was capable of at that moment, and said, "Thank you for helping get her settled."

"No problem Cap’n. Anyways I’m sure you have something that needs doing." As she said that, she gave a pointed glance at Inara’s shuttle. Then she peeled Mary Jo out of Mal’s arms and took her over to where Jayne and the preacher were standing. Mal turned and headed for Inara’s shuttle.

For once Mal knocked. Somehow he didn’t think now would be the best time to just barge in. There was no answer, but she hadn’t told him to go away either. He took that as an invite and went into the shuttle. Inara was sprawled across the bed, cr

Comments
Wednesday, 06 August 2003 03:08
I liked it well enough, but, uhm, that just didn't seem quite like Mal & Inara.
I can't see Inara spilling her guts to Mal. Maybe Kaylee.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 06 August 2003 06:36
Although I find the premise of the story intersting and I felt the first story remained reletively true to the characters. Especially I
Wednesday, 06 August 2003 09:44
I am interested in seeing how you continue this storyline. For myself I don't think Mal would just have gone straight to Inara on his return to Serenity. The poor Cap had his hands full with Mary Jo and her dying ma and Inara has been keeping him at arm's length since arriving on Serenity so whatever his burgeoning feelings for her may be she is still not ready to deal with her own feelings for him in an honest and up-front way. I think he would have gone to the infirmary with Catie, perhaps given Mary Jo the opportunity to go with him or with Kaylee, and I think he would have sat with Catie while Simon made her comfortable. After all Catie is his childhood sweetheart, he loved her, and now she is dying. The conversation with Inara I think would have come better from Zoe, filling in the backstory as far as she knows it. The rest of the crew would have been in a kind of stunned aftershock, slowly adjusting to what would amount to some pretty fundamental changes in the group dynamic and their individual relationships with their Captain. I also don't see Inara blurting out her love for Mal like that. I don't think she would have been so selfish as to put herself first at that moment. I think her heart would automatically have gone out to the girl, the one totally innocent person. But this is your story and therefore looking at the way the characters evolve and react to each other through another set of eyes is always a challenge and I can't wait to see what happens next. This is very well written and takes us on another leg of the journey you are unfolding. Thanks for writing a sequel. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 06 August 2003 15:08
As a Mal/Inara shipper , I have no hangups about the way you play the story . I am just happy :)to read any fic on their `ship. Can`t wait for the next installment. Oooh-so-shiny.....
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 14 June 2004 00:47
afraid of being a father

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