Back Stories III, Chapter 13
Saturday, January 16, 2010
River makes a discovery. So do Jayne and Inara.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3820 RATING: 10.0 (G) SERIES: FIREFLY
Chapter 12.
It belongs to Joss and all those business people. I'm just playing.
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, , , BS Book II, BS Book III, Chapter 1. Timing, pairings, and canon blurbs are in my . Many thanks to desertgirl for the beta read.
Inara laughed at Simon’s question. “No, it’s nothing like Cottonwoods Resort,” she replied. Indeed, the ferry’s breakfast cereal was edible, but in no way comparable to the delicacies available at a Core vacation destination. She smiled at memories of trips to the snow world of Hawthorne, where a few of her more active clients had enjoyed spending their time off. “The champagne breakfast at the main lodge was divine,” she added, “especially when delivered to the Suite. I believe I once stayed in bed all day enjoying it.”
“Champagne?” Simon asked. “I wouldn’t know about that. It had to be… ” He stared into the distance while he calculated. “…maybe a dozen years ago that we last took a vacation there. I was barely in my teens.”
Inara could easily imagine a teenaged Simon tearing up the slopes with his young sister. “Is River a talented skier?”
Simon was momentarily distracted by the waiter bringing out his breakfast, the same hot cereal Inara had enjoyed just a few minutes earlier. After the man left them alone again, he replied.
“Of course she’s good. Amazing, even. Do you recall t
Apologies also for the Mandarin, to anyone who is actually a speaker. I pieced together some words in a attempt to get a phrase I wanted, and it’s likely completely wrong. If you notice and know better, please drop me a line!
And a third apology for the second scene. This is the one I referred to my blog. I actually rewrote this scene to ease off on the wrongness, but I think it’s better if it crosses the line. Because, though I am as anti Mal/River as one can get, in this situation I think they would be attracted and they’d act on it. Lord help me, that was a tough one to write and edit. Writing means entering the heads of the characters, and here River picks up on Mal’s senses. So I had to try to think like Mal mackin’ on River. OK, it’s not really Mal, but it still looks like him, so—not easy! Gave me the uncomfortables something fierce.
Which makes me especially grateful to desertgirl for beta reading the scene and clearly seeing my intent with it.
I will try to get the next chapter out soon!
Inara's situation, as I've fanwanked it, will be followed up some chapters down the line.
And enter Will. :o The worst possible moment for River to let her emotions start confusing her reading.
They're ill-fated proposition all around, and you illustrated that well here.
Will and Inara, not a good combination if I remember correctly.
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