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Back Stories III: Chapter 7
Saturday, May 16, 2009
A few strange, dangerous interactions on New Melbourne.
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Chapter 7.
It belongs to Joss and all those business people. I'm just playing.
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Simon looked over his shoulder, trying to make out a pair of dark gray uniformed figures about thirty meters down the aisle, but the fish market had erupted in chaos and his view was blocked.
“Who are they?” he shouted at Zoë.
“If they shoot us, I’ll be sure and ask,” she replied bluntly. “Now get down!” She shoved Simon flat to the floor as another burst of
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Saturday, 16 May 2009 20:10
An honest conversation with Inara about her career? Things really HAVE changed! I'm with Kaylee, I'd love to hear Inara's side.
And poor Simon, I enjoy how he's stuck in the middle of all the violence and getaway,and the emotional (and physical elbows and kicking) discomfort he experiences.
One thing I was a little confused by, Jaynes comes back to Zoe and Simon to report in, checks his guns for a fight... And then I can only assume he spotted the van nearby and left to get it without Simon and Zoe noticing.
And poor Simon, I enjoy how he's stuck in the middle of all the violence and getaway,and the emotional (and physical elbows and kicking) discomfort he experiences.
One thing I was a little confused by, Jaynes comes back to Zoe and Simon to report in, checks his guns for a fight... And then I can only assume he spotted the van nearby and left to get it without Simon and Zoe noticing.
Saturday, 16 May 2009 21:30
The one conversation that Inara needed to hear from Mal so badly, that could only come from Malcolm's heart. Priceless. Now maybe Inara has an idea of the depths of what Mal tried to give her earlier, and how much damage was done. Poor Mal - wonderful explanation of why he loved Inara and worried about her but hated what it did to her. He was the expert of being used up by others for their own gain. He learned that in Serenity Valley.
Loved how Jayne got to feel like the hero, Zoe got the drop on Kamath finally (yeah answers!) and Book and River and Wash all had cameos of a telling nature. You communicated so much of the ship's routine and the characters' backstories in very few words - very professional! Nobody got left out. But the best part was not including Inara's questions. It let Malcolm have his own monologue without the distraction of keeping up with Inara's side of the conversation, and let his ideas flow much more smoothly and succinctly. No wonder Inara was destroyed by it. I was - honest, there were tears...
Eagerly waiting for more, and hoping for healing for all these relationships.
Loved how Jayne got to feel like the hero, Zoe got the drop on Kamath finally (yeah answers!) and Book and River and Wash all had cameos of a telling nature. You communicated so much of the ship's routine and the characters' backstories in very few words - very professional! Nobody got left out. But the best part was not including Inara's questions. It let Malcolm have his own monologue without the distraction of keeping up with Inara's side of the conversation, and let his ideas flow much more smoothly and succinctly. No wonder Inara was destroyed by it. I was - honest, there were tears...
Eagerly waiting for more, and hoping for healing for all these relationships.
Saturday, 16 May 2009 21:35
The ugliness that always accompanied Mal's opinions about Inara's career made it impossible for what he really thought and felt to get through. But now here it is from the same person but in a form that she can't ignore. And so, so beautifully put by Malcolm. Now Inara must understand far more herself why she loves Mal. 'You ought’a have a man giving reverence to you.' So, so true that that is what Inara deserves. No wonder she is devastated.
Saturday, 16 May 2009 21:51
Very nice, curious where you are going to take things in the next few chapters.
Monday, 18 May 2009 01:01
Whoa. That was some intense chapter, I can't help but feel for Inara, the state she must be in, finding out everything she did. From young Malcolm's beautifully stated belief in sacramental sexual love (brought to mind the line from the old English marriage vows, "with my body I thee worship"), does she have a different understanding of what happened between them before she left? And his comments about the tragedy of living with a barren and empty soul, it's heartbreaking to see just how much the war took from him.
Monday, 18 May 2009 15:21
Oh my, spot on reaction for Inara, to Mal's truthsome talk...I often wonder what he would have said at the end of HoG if she hadn't stopped him:)
And the others in search of answers, going back to the beginning, a nice circular arc.
And the others in search of answers, going back to the beginning, a nice circular arc.
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