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The Road to Haven: Chapter 6: The World, The Flesh and The Devil

Wednesday, June 25, 2008

The crew are seeing things, remembering things...not all of it is good, not all of it is real and some of it is very strange indeed...

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chapter six: The World, The Flesh and The Devil

Someone is in pain. He should do something about that, he‘s a doctor after all...

Breaking through the dark waters of unconsciousness – Simon Tam lets out a long loud gasp for oxygen, pure reflex, no thoughts to confuse the mind for the space of that one life-full breath. He tries to force words through his parched mouth.

“Here,” and a straw between cracked lips, blessed coolness. “Don’t try talking.”

“...mother?”

“Hush, baby,” Hand on his brow, “it’s gonna be fine...”

Zoe, glad of something positive to do, adjusts the drug-patch on his temple. With what they got, and what Mal brought back, she can improvise. She’s done more with less, before.

He looks so young. Man’s eyes hidden, it’s a boy’s face, shadowed with bruises. Reckons that look of youth was never hers; time she was his age, war was about done. Remembers a sergeant his age, though, burning with a cause - same fire in this boy. That’s why he and the captain clash; don’t either of them like to be taking orders, gotta be the one giving them.

Zoe don't mind orders, don't mind being seen to follow. Truth of life was always more complicated - take her and Mal. He'd been a living banner through the war, and even with the heart ripped out of him, he’d held them alive in that Valley. She owed him for that, they all did, though she hadn’t thought to see him again, when she was ‘repatriated’ from the ‘rehabilitation centre’ - and then he’d turned up, still in that coat of his and his eyes full of nothing but valley shadow. She'd followed his ragged lead - there weren't no-one else to do it, and when he told her he needed to fly free, well, he needed someone to watch his wings. Yeah, doing him a favour... didn't think too much of where his lead might take her... didn't figure that he might just take her home.

Introduced her to a worrisome man with a dreadful taste in shirts. Next thing she knew, she'd been as lost as the captain and never knew it. If Mal's heart had be

Comments
Wednesday, 25 June 2008 22:18
Trippy!! I think this would even be better after a few beers. LOL

Great stuff!!
Wednesday, 25 June 2008 23:11
"Cognito ergo sum of the parts is greater than the whole"

gorram brilliant.
Thursday, 26 June 2008 17:26
>She knows why he keeps these two on board. Ain’t to do with anything you could put words to exactly. But it’s a little to do with watching kids shot through the lungs, a little to do with sending those same kids out through the wires, a little to do with the way he’s always been one to spit at the lightening, to take the road less travelled.

That is so beautifully written, and exactly Mal. And so exactly Zoe, too, understanding her Captain, her friend.
Thursday, 26 June 2008 19:38
Wow - good chapter. :)

The connection between Zoe caring for Simon and Mal's reasons for keeping the Tams on board is lovely, and truly right at the heart of the show and of Mal's character.

I like how you're representing River as a girl. I think she is very much younger than her age, and younger than Summer. Not often written this way, which is unfortunate. And I really like the idea of a connection of sorts between her and Book. Much fodder for interesting interaction with these two, since they're so outwardly different but have hidden commonalities. I think. Possibly. Hard to tell with Book LOL!

Excellent Jayne line: “Hell, if I woke up and found I’d bin eatin’ people soup, reckon I’d go a bit feng le, too.” Considers. “Mebbe not so far as this, mind.” Totally captures his simplicity, with that tiny tinge of depth.

I did got a bit confused about who's thinking what and seeing what . It's all kind of... fluid.... POV shifting wildly about... I get lost! Maybe you intend that.

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