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A Day of Prayer (Part One)

Thursday, November 21, 2002

(If you don't already know) Serenity's crew enjoy a day of shoping and relaxation, until Simon finds trouble.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 5509    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A DAY OF PRAYER

"Tell me again," Simon said as he pulled the gauze out of a drawer. "How did you hurt your hand?"

"Well, it all started in bed . . ." Wash said, holding his injured hand in front of him like some sort of peace offering. Perhaps, to Zoe, it was. To Simon, however, it was just a simple problem with a simple solution.

"You can skip that part," Simon said quickly, then glancing up at his patient nervously he asked, "Can’t you?"

"I guess," Wash said, clearly enjoying how unnerved the young doctor was at the prospect of a blow by blow account of his nuptial bliss.

"Let’s just say we got into an argument that could only be solved by hand to hand combat."

"I . . . see," Simon said slowly, not seeing at all.

"So I challenged her to an arm wrestle. Best two out of three."

"Do you solve all your martial problems that way?" Simon asked, taking Wash’s hand and prodding the swollen thumb joint very carefully.

Wash winced and kept up with his story, though his voice was thin and tense, "So we go get the Captain to be the ref and we set up in the common room right?"

"I’m starting to think I don’t want to know how this story ends," Simon said. "It looks like the thumb is just dislocated. I’m going to have to pop it back into place."

"Well then, pop away," Wash said.

"Who won?"

"Oh, hello Shepherd," Simon said, before he turned back to the counter to prepare the anesthetics.

"Hey Book, what up?"

"I heard you got injured fighting with your wife," Book said in a knowing tone that only a Shepherd could have.

"Fighting isn’t quite the word," Wash said, "Epic battle is more along the lines."

"Ok, Wash," Simon said, approaching him with a dope gun. "I’m going to numb your hand, you’ll have to . . ."

"Wait, wait, wait," Walsh said. "Numb my hand? I need my hand.&quo

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 22 November 2002 01:35
This is very good! The characters are consistent with what I've seen on the show, the dialog is very good, and the action is well-paced so far. There are several really bad spelling errors (I'm quite qualified to proofread it for you if you'd like), but overall, it's very enjoyable. I'm looking forward to its completion.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 24 November 2002 00:24
I really enjoyed this! What impresses me most is that the characters all sound like themselves. Authentic dialogue and realistic action make this story a pleasure to read. Hope the second installment arrives soon!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 25 November 2002 05:10
I can't wait to read more of this story! It is very well written and suspenseful. It captured the personalities of the show very well.
Tuesday, 26 November 2002 17:24
very very good!
there was just one little thing I found not to be too right. Mal seems a bit overdone. he isn't all that bad all the time. or maybe I just don't see it on the show. I mean he is that bad but not with every sentence he speaks. get what I mean?

but apart from that it's perfect. I'm really looking forward to the next part.

and don't take the critical part of my comemnt too hard. I just don't want to see Mal as unredeemable badmannered (is that an english word?).

Idefix
Tuesday, 03 December 2002 08:58
Well done! It's a good read!

The only thing I can critique on is Wash and Mal, Wash seems just a touch too out of character ("What up, Book?"), but that's just fine! Other than that, I heard the actors in my head as I read it, I `spect you captured them rather well! :)

---Aabh
Tuesday, 03 December 2002 19:54
Great story!! I"m going to go read part II now
Wednesday, 08 January 2003 05:40
ok, please, keep writing damnit. ANd call joss about a job. Goddamnit, youre good. Id give it a perfet 10, but im drunk and know i have no fucking judgemnet left. Hey, i my be many things, but at least im honest.
Tuesday, 19 August 2003 18:25
I'm riveted. Been looking for some good fan fic that didn't have all sorts of weird coupling and unrealistic situations. Not to mention I like seeing Book pray out some faith.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 12 January 2004 16:24
I have to agree w/most of the others, great story & well done. You kept very true to the characters w/only the most minor deviations that were a little off. (Mostly Wash's "What up"). Please, keep it up - I really am enjoying this story.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 29 April 2004 22:51
Quick note: I don't think bacterial infections are necessarily contagious. If one crew member caught a VIRUS, then everyone would get sick, but antibiotics wouldn't help.

I'm not a doctor, and it's a small thing, but I'd suggest you research the amoxicillan (sp?) line further.
Monday, 17 January 2005 18:30
“Simon doesn’t have a calico skirt,” River said, a little more insistently. “He doesn’t wear dresses.”

-- love it!!
JAZMYN
Tuesday, 15 February 2005 08:51
i love it it is so great it fabulous
u must write more
jazz
Sunday, 28 August 2005 19:29
hmm, simon in a skirt...
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 05 September 2005 05:16
You do an excellent job capturing each of the character's voices. What a skill!

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