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Back Stories I: Chapter 7/14: Kaylee
Monday, May 21, 2007
Mal figures something out, then – Kaylee's really in need of a friend.
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Rating: PG to NC17. I will not put warnings on each chapter, because I don’t want to give things away. In general, don’t be getting into any of this if you’re not prepared for adult storylines, violence, explicit sexual content, and - oh my - bad words.
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Comments
Monday, 21 May 2007 14:27
Much to respond to this time! I see how it is - set up an odd pairing and throw in a sex toy, and suddenly all the comments come rolling out, LOL!
Leiasky - thanks for the help with this chapter. Angry Kaylee really isn't easy to figure out!
Jane0904 - Thanks again for the comment! Yes, poor Mal. :(
Hoperules - re Mal... it's going to be a long strange trip - hang in there...
Stormwolfdawn - I know exactly what you mean!! Do not abandon hope!
BEB: thanks for saying it so many words: "You actually had Jayne go out and buy River a vibrator?!? Damn" LOL! Everytime I read back through that part I have the same reaction! It's just insane!
Platonist (Orlando Bloom's father-in-law-to-be) - Count your blessings, at least it's not the age of the Backstreet Boys. *shudder* As for Inara - we won't really get there for a bit, but I'll certainly be curious to hear what you think. I can't decipher Joss either, so I went my own way. It sort of fits. If you squint...
Katesfriend - Actually, I am very much River. On all those personality tests? Oh, yeah, hands down, River.
Let's see... I'm a physicist , a dancer, and my brain works in mysterious ways...
jetflair - thanks! I'm glad we agree!
amdobell - Oh! That's why I never heard from you! PM sent...
desertgirl - evil intentions? hmm....
nbz - yay for the unexpected! I hope that I continue to deliver on that! And this chapter clears up where(when) Mal thinks he is, right?
Leiasky - thanks for the help with this chapter. Angry Kaylee really isn't easy to figure out!
Jane0904 - Thanks again for the comment! Yes, poor Mal. :(
Hoperules - re Mal... it's going to be a long strange trip - hang in there...
Stormwolfdawn - I know exactly what you mean!! Do not abandon hope!
BEB: thanks for saying it so many words: "You actually had Jayne go out and buy River a vibrator?!? Damn" LOL! Everytime I read back through that part I have the same reaction! It's just insane!
Platonist (Orlando Bloom's father-in-law-to-be) - Count your blessings, at least it's not the age of the Backstreet Boys. *shudder* As for Inara - we won't really get there for a bit, but I'll certainly be curious to hear what you think. I can't decipher Joss either, so I went my own way. It sort of fits. If you squint...
Katesfriend - Actually, I am very much River. On all those personality tests? Oh, yeah, hands down, River.
Let's see... I'm a physicist , a dancer, and my brain works in mysterious ways...
jetflair - thanks! I'm glad we agree!
amdobell - Oh! That's why I never heard from you! PM sent...
desertgirl - evil intentions? hmm....
nbz - yay for the unexpected! I hope that I continue to deliver on that! And this chapter clears up where(when) Mal thinks he is, right?
Monday, 21 May 2007 15:11
Oh, you already know how much I love this chapter. Poor Kaylee trying to work everything out. Her conversation with Simon at the beginning was painful to read. But painful in a good way as you portrayed their hesitation most perfectly.
I love River's question about why Kaylee isn't with Simon. Leave it to River to be direct. And her announcement, like Jayne's, about going to her bunk made me giggle. And Kaylee's is clearly not herself because she didn't pick up on the implication. . .
And I love Kaylee's arguement with Mal. It parallelled her issues with Simon perfectly. She's mad at herself, not as much the Captain, for what's gone on, or not, with Simon. And that when she ran, it was to the infirmary, said a lot, even if she doesn't get it at that moment.
When she noticed how the infirmary calmed her, she made a little breakthrough into seeing just a little bit more of Simon.
It was nice to see Kaylee stumble around for words for a change, and have Simon think of such an obviously innocent (or the start of something?) way to calm and spend some time with her.
Now what was the movie? LOL!
I love River's question about why Kaylee isn't with Simon. Leave it to River to be direct. And her announcement, like Jayne's, about going to her bunk made me giggle. And Kaylee's is clearly not herself because she didn't pick up on the implication. . .
And I love Kaylee's arguement with Mal. It parallelled her issues with Simon perfectly. She's mad at herself, not as much the Captain, for what's gone on, or not, with Simon. And that when she ran, it was to the infirmary, said a lot, even if she doesn't get it at that moment.
When she noticed how the infirmary calmed her, she made a little breakthrough into seeing just a little bit more of Simon.
It was nice to see Kaylee stumble around for words for a change, and have Simon think of such an obviously innocent (or the start of something?) way to calm and spend some time with her.
Now what was the movie? LOL!
Monday, 21 May 2007 19:22
I actually cooed out loud at the movie at the end.
Lovely stuff, as with the rest of this so far. I adored Kaylee in this. After the bit in Jayne's chapter with her harping on killing, still with Ray on her mind, I was almost surprised there wasn't more of that here, but I suppose that as was implied in the letter to Inara she deliberately isn't thinking of it. Simon as a more proximate concern... lovely.
(And River: "I'll be in my bunk." Priceless.)
Lovely stuff, as with the rest of this so far. I adored Kaylee in this. After the bit in Jayne's chapter with her harping on killing, still with Ray on her mind, I was almost surprised there wasn't more of that here, but I suppose that as was implied in the letter to Inara she deliberately isn't thinking of it. Simon as a more proximate concern... lovely.
(And River: "I'll be in my bunk." Priceless.)
Monday, 21 May 2007 20:50
What came through loud and clear in this chapter is how out of her depth Kaylee is with the Captain not being himself and the rift between her and Simon. The latter overshadowing everything else until it all comes out when she lets out the pent up anger at the Captain. And now Zoe will be left to calm him and get things on an even keel until they can figure out what is wrong with him and fix it. My heart goes out to Mal and I hope you don't have him permanently miserable and unhappy but have a light at the end of that dark tunnel. I smiled at Kaylee and Simon making their first tenative steps back to each other, with Simon actually coming up with the notion of watching a movie together! What movie did he choose? Is is "Four Weddings and a Funeral"? Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 22 May 2007 03:49
Oh, poor Kaylee I can just feel the angst seeping out of her. Seems like the Captain was calling Zoë to task when Kaylee snuck out of there. Not sure I’d want to be Zoë just then.
I loved River announcing that she’s “be in her bunk,” but more so I loved her waiting for a reaction that never came.
Most importunately - I want to know what movie Simon picked out. He said something about a flick he thought was funny during prep school but stupid now. My guess is something by Monty Python, maybe “Holy Grail” or “Life of Brian.” Or could it be something really off the wall like “Spinal Tap”
Oh dear, I’m I aging myself naming all the cult movies I watched in High School???
I loved River announcing that she’s “be in her bunk,” but more so I loved her waiting for a reaction that never came.
Most importunately - I want to know what movie Simon picked out. He said something about a flick he thought was funny during prep school but stupid now. My guess is something by Monty Python, maybe “Holy Grail” or “Life of Brian.” Or could it be something really off the wall like “Spinal Tap”
Oh dear, I’m I aging myself naming all the cult movies I watched in High School???
Tuesday, 22 May 2007 05:30
I only noted my honest feelings about the scenario, mal4prez. Cuz, to me, if Jayne can take a look at the situation River is facing, realize that she needs a way of getting rid of some shexual tenshun (use a lisp when reading that;D) but knows she ain't ready for some interpersonal contact, and gets her a vibrator without flinching or acting like Simon on a bad day when he hands it over? Yep...the man's ready for a tampon run. That and Jayne's definitely the right man for the job of wooing the 'Verse's most dangerous 17-year old Reader and assassin;D
This chapter was seriously, seriously brilliant work, mal4prez. Kaylee is a fun nut to crack in the best of circumstances and to write her as being angsty and suffering from PTSD as it manifests itself in a seemingly uncontrollable rage? Definitely some new territory for the character. I do feel for her though...all of her safety nets and comfort zones have been stripped away over the past few months, starting with Simon and River's arrival on-board before moving on to stuff like Early's invasion and concluding with all the problems relating to the Oeneus and Niflheim jobs (both personally and involving Mal).
Honestly have to admit though I busted a gut a couple of times while reading this. The scenes where Mal thinks Kaylee is coming on to him and River channels Jayne? Hilarity of the highest order:D
BEB
This chapter was seriously, seriously brilliant work, mal4prez. Kaylee is a fun nut to crack in the best of circumstances and to write her as being angsty and suffering from PTSD as it manifests itself in a seemingly uncontrollable rage? Definitely some new territory for the character. I do feel for her though...all of her safety nets and comfort zones have been stripped away over the past few months, starting with Simon and River's arrival on-board before moving on to stuff like Early's invasion and concluding with all the problems relating to the Oeneus and Niflheim jobs (both personally and involving Mal).
Honestly have to admit though I busted a gut a couple of times while reading this. The scenes where Mal thinks Kaylee is coming on to him and River channels Jayne? Hilarity of the highest order:D
BEB
Tuesday, 22 May 2007 11:19
"Oh?” Zoë asked. “Dinosaur escapades?”
Wash looked thoughtful. “I guess.. there could be dinosaurs involved. That’s not my personal kink, but if you’re into it, um…”
“Kink?” Jayne asked, and he looked at his uTex with a new level of respect."
Much that's quotable in this chapter, but that in particular cracked me up. I think you're handling Kaylee really well, with complexity yet remaining true to the character.
It's going to be interesting to see how Mal responds to the plan - :eyes boggle:
Wash looked thoughtful. “I guess.. there could be dinosaurs involved. That’s not my personal kink, but if you’re into it, um…”
“Kink?” Jayne asked, and he looked at his uTex with a new level of respect."
Much that's quotable in this chapter, but that in particular cracked me up. I think you're handling Kaylee really well, with complexity yet remaining true to the character.
It's going to be interesting to see how Mal responds to the plan - :eyes boggle:
Tuesday, 22 May 2007 23:11
Brilliant!
Loved the awkwardness of Kaylee more or less throughout. I can see how it must have been hard to write.
I can see where the pieces fit.
I expect the next chapter to be full of brimstone and fire. Maybe even lepers?
Oh, and River's melodramatic moments. Nothing more to say. :) She is a teen afterall.
Loved the awkwardness of Kaylee more or less throughout. I can see how it must have been hard to write.
I can see where the pieces fit.
I expect the next chapter to be full of brimstone and fire. Maybe even lepers?
Oh, and River's melodramatic moments. Nothing more to say. :) She is a teen afterall.
Tuesday, 22 May 2007 23:35
I know that you are somewhat sidestepping the BDM, but I think we may have seen subtle hints from Joss on what was going on in Kaylee's head about this point in time. Events post OIS leave Kaylee feeling angry, frustrated and obviously sad. I think you've successfully given good reasons for her waning optimism, at this juncture.
I'm enjoying the "fleshing out" of all the characters that were unfortunately given little time in the movie.
great job, and waiting for your next post
By the way, your guess is as good as mine on Inara's story. I do believe she was the "victim" rather than the purb, something out of her control happened... or perhaps a victim of circumstances?
I'm enjoying the "fleshing out" of all the characters that were unfortunately given little time in the movie.
great job, and waiting for your next post
By the way, your guess is as good as mine on Inara's story. I do believe she was the "victim" rather than the purb, something out of her control happened... or perhaps a victim of circumstances?
Wednesday, 23 May 2007 02:01
Two realities? the question floats across his mind. Ain’t that one more than usual? And maybe two more than the truth?
Hmm, more hints here?
I love how you added plausibility to Mal's plight by mirroring it in Kaylee. And since you're really River yourself, Kaylee would have been quite a stretch - but you pulled it off flawlessly, down to her retreating from the Mal/Zoe conflict to come. I especially liked how she reasoned that Simon was too special to have to put up with her new found darkness of character - perfect!
So many potential plot bunnies being born in every chapter - you're keeping my brain occupied in deciding your next move - I love it! Thanks for the thrills!
Hmm, more hints here?
I love how you added plausibility to Mal's plight by mirroring it in Kaylee. And since you're really River yourself, Kaylee would have been quite a stretch - but you pulled it off flawlessly, down to her retreating from the Mal/Zoe conflict to come. I especially liked how she reasoned that Simon was too special to have to put up with her new found darkness of character - perfect!
So many potential plot bunnies being born in every chapter - you're keeping my brain occupied in deciding your next move - I love it! Thanks for the thrills!
Wednesday, 23 May 2007 02:36
P.S. Special kudos as to how quickly River recovered from her crush on Mal.
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