Back Stories I, Chapter 4/14 - Jayne
Thursday, May 10, 2007
A pleasant experience turns confusing for Mal, then – certain irritants in Jayne’s present life remind him of irritants long past.
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Rating: PG to NC17. I will not put warnings on each chapter, because I don’t want to give things away. In general, don’t be getting into any of this if you’re not prepared for adult storylines, violence, explicit sexual content, and - oh my - bad words.
Many thanks: to several fireflyfans.net members: and for hours of beta reading and entertaining discussions of many things. , , and provided additional beta time on the early chapters. The talented did the lovely artwork. (Ain’t it nice?) and http://www.chinesetools.com provided many colorful Chinese phrases. One of fine fics provided a useful plot bunny. (I won’t tell which yet!) Finally – kudos to for her inspirational fic . Links: Prequels: The Fish Job () () and Easy Tickets () (). Timing, pairings, and canon blurbs are in my .
Thanks HeWHo KicksAlot! And Chazzer! And SwedishMystery!
Leiasky - I thought you'd like the Simon drawing LOL!
tkid - I just laugh evilly....
nbz - hmm re implanted suggestions... I didn't intend it that way, but it totally works! Um... I mean.. Yes, that's exactly what I planned... ;)
TamSibling - I like your interpretation! Your take on Simon and Kaylee fits my feelings - a simple sudden hookup wouldn't solve much, as fun as it would be. (sorry tkid)
Katesfriend - does this chapter do anything to confirm your guess on where I'm going?
BEB and Platonist - It's funny how Inara's generally so separate from the rest of the crew, but they really do feel her absence when she's gone.
Platonist - thanks for the agreement! I've found that showing a needy, frightened, out-of-place, and very human side of Simon explains a lot about him that the rest of the crew never sees. Or maybe I just like my men better if they come with a healthy dose of angst. ;)
Vera
Of course, the writing was as good as always and I liked the back story you developed for Jayne as well.
And Jayne doing something for River... [singsong voice] I know what he's getting her [/end singsong voice] ohh, I can't wait to see Simon's reaction . . .
Utter brilliance here, m4p! Jayne, I think, is a difficult character to really work with, since you have to really dig deep to create motivation and backstory that allows the existing hard-ass side to blend with a background of being a big brother and provider to his family. And his perusal of the other ships is a definite plausibility at this stage, since his continued shift in perspecetive is something that I would imagine is troubling for someone who's spent 20 years or so focused on his own needs.
BEB
P.S. Will Inara's chapter be the last one in this series of perspectives? Cuz I can imagine having Inara be last and getting a WAVE from Kaylee about what's been going on that causes her to "temporarily" return;)
You are going to drag out the torture for Mal (and us) for awhile, aren't you? Playing us along bit by bit as you weave the story out slowly and wonderfully, line by line. Can't think of a better way to spend the summer.
What really impresses me about your work is how you are interweaving all the character's storylines bit by bit. Kaylee's especially I think will be wonderful against the background of the whole theme of the fic. I can imagine how you can converge them later - and can hardly wait!
As to whether I'm guessing right or not, am I?
And Simon taking a swing at Jayne? Kinda tuggin' on the tiger's tail, wouldn't you say? But I've always liked how Simon will thoughtlessly throw himself in harm's way to protect River.
Most excellent. Oh, and a grammatically correct Fic really goes a long way with a lot of us. ;)
"Man lookin' to kill some folk."
Rob O.
I loved his reaction to Simon's punch, and how his physicality is what gets him by.
Nice job!
You can't take the sky from me
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