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Possibilities: Part 7

Monday, May 7, 2007

Sorry it took so long....I got stuck, thats why I went and did the other stuff but here is the next in the series! Hope you like it!

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He’d been surprised and at the same time not surprised when they had landed on Persephone three weeks ago…and not taken off.

Mal had quietly turned down the various jobs that were offered.

The same way he’d kept them to prairie runs.

With Zoë heavily pregnant, a shoot out wasn’t any place they needed to be.

Still and all he could wish that Mal weren’t so damned determined to stand by her side.

The babies would be born in the infirmary, with the hospital nearby just in case.

But he needed someone who had a steady hand to assist him with the delivery.

And Mal was determined to hold her hand, putting him off the very short list of assistants.

Kaylee’d flat out refused, though he hadn’t asked…or intended to.

Much as he loved her, she just wasn’t someone he could count on to remain calm.

He’d been relieved when she’d refused, saving him from having to not ask.

He considered River, but she herself had told him to forget it.

That left Inara and Jayne.

Or rather that left Inara.

He’d been hesitant about approaching her.

She and the Captain were still dancing around each other.

He wondered if the crew had been as frustrated by his stupidity when he and Kaylee were still dancing around one another as he was with the Captain’s.

She was no longer a Companion.

Though he wondered if that was part of the problem.

She hadn’t left after Miranda, but she hadn’t renounced being a Companion.

Not that she’d had any clients.

But the wave that had been broadcast over the cortex from the Guild’s Central House declaring that Inara Serra was no longer a registered Companion and that anyone found dealing with her as such would no longer be welcomed by any registered companion had pretty much put paid to the possibility of any clients.

She hadn’t been upset, or even surprised by the wave, but the fact that she hadn’t quit but had been fired seemed to bother the Captain.

She stayed in the guest room she’d occupied since they’d “rescued” her, had taken over cooking, cleaning

Comments
Monday, 07 May 2007 05:29
very nice and my favorite lines are

That left Inara and Jayne.
Or rather that left Inara.

Nice pacing on that!

Minor caveat--sometimes it takes me a line or two to figure out when you are taking River's perspective.

You did that with Simon in the beginning and, there, it worked. With River, not so much. It just interrupted the flow.

But, nonetheless, one of my favorite fanfics so far. Thank you!
MERRYWYN
Monday, 07 May 2007 05:36
Thanks for the suggestion....I'll have to work on that! I try to keep a good flow of thought for each character, but while I find Simon, Zoe, Mal, Kaylee and Jayne easy to achive, I find myself struggling with River and Inara....which is why they have been scarce. Lol
Tuesday, 08 May 2007 23:26
Darn it! You stole one of my plot ideas!

;)

Still...this was great work here, MerryWyn! I love how you had Simon obsessing over who to ask to be his assistant for when Zoe goes into labour, and how he had struggled to find Mal and Inara together and not trying to either kill one another or such each other's faces off;)

BEB

P.S. In case you're wondering about the idea comment...its the "Guild fires Inara and Mal gets pissed" plot point. Though I was/am gonna make it a bigger factor;)

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