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Betrayal

Friday, April 27, 2007

They’d had no choice but to leave him behind when the Reavers hit. 100 word drabble series with a hint of Rayne, 1 of 7.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2745    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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They’d had no choice but to leave him behind when the Reavers hit. River had been incoherent with rage but with the application of copious amounts of smoothers, could resume piloting duties. She consoled herself with the thought that he likely put his gun to his head when he found them gone but she couldn’t shake the feeling of betrayal.

Months later, Serenity was boarded but even River’s best did nothing to keep them out. She slammed against the wall, the Reaver’s body weight holding her off the ground. Her head snapped up to meet her attacker’s wild eyes.

“Jayne?”


Comments
Saturday, 28 April 2007 01:40
This was very creepy but way too short. I would love to see a reworked version in which you detail Jayne's being left, the crew's reaction to it and then the attack months later
Saturday, 28 April 2007 14:06
hmmmm short but crazy with potential....
Monday, 30 April 2007 00:35
Oh...this gets all kinds of more creepy with the next 5 or so parts, redhead and divinemissm!

Loved this on the Rayne LJ group and I definitely loving it hear;D

BEB
Monday, 14 May 2007 07:37
This cornered the market in creepiness and really, you crammed a whole lot of horror into a lyrical brevity that is impressive. Ali D :~)
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