Even Roses Have Thorns, Chapter Twenty-Two
Monday, January 8, 2007
Simon has been captured by the Alliance. Some more angst for the angst lovers. This chapter is rated NC17, for adult themes. Positive comments perfered.
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Even Roses Have Thorns
Chapter Twenty-Two: Vixere fortes ante agamemnona (literally, brave men lived before Agamemnon; which is to say heroism exists even if it's not recorded) Part II
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, , *** *** *** Not an arraignment cell, then. Well, it had been worth a try. As soon as he’d been dragged to the holding cell, a small team of medics started to load him up saline and blood, nutrients given intravenously, but he was given no food. It would help him to prepare to survive another round of interrogation, without in any way relieving the pain of his hunger. Simon thought that that had been a particularly efficient, if sadistic, touch. When the medics finally left, he peeled himself off of the floor of his cell, and stumbled to his cot to lie down for what little rest he would be permitted. *** He forced himself to close his eyes. It was another cell, with no hope of escape. Better to rest than to worry. His newest guards had chained him down tightly, his calves and ankles strapped tightly to the floor, and his arms each, separately, chained to the ceiling of the darkened room. He’d been strung up to his maximum extent, so that he couldn’t even switch between the straight and sitting kneeling postures. Even if he hadn’t had broken bones, large swathes of bruised muscles, and cut tissue, he would have been stiff. But his bones were broken, and he was finding it increasingly difficult to breathe even in the little amount of time that he had been left there. His eyes flew open at the sound of the opening door. Two men, very blank – walked in. Simon didn’t think he’d ever seen anyone who more perfectly fit the term ‘spooks’. One of them leaned back on the front of the desk, and eyed Simon piercingly. The othe
Poor Simon.
It doesn't seem like Simon is much worried. He's real calm in the face of all this. Like he'd prepared for it happening eventually.
It's Kaylee and his sister, and to a lesser extent, everyone else, who is going to end up suffering and guilt-ridden.
These are really very short and I don't typically like such short stories. Though, the emotion and the angst rolling off of them, its probably better that they're not much longer :)
I can make them longer. I like longer.
I thought more people were in the 'don't make me scroll down camp'?
No complaints about the length from me. =)
Ah. Well, only fair to warn you that you might want to stay close to the scroll button/bar next chapter. There will be some owwie parts.
>The end was really good.
Thank you.
I have no doubt Simon has expected something like this to happen for years. I often get the feeling he considers himself expendable compared to his sister (or really, given his list of nightmares, everyone else, too). He's probably somewhat relieved he's finally caught and it will be over.
You make your points just fine. :)
Your commentary is actually very helpful, especially for seeing what isn't coming across properly, etc.
Although I agree with Leiasky - they are too short - let us scroll, we don't mind!
Very well. Longer it is. It does also mean a longer wait between posts, of course, but I will do my best.
QUESTION: what is the ideal lenght, roughly?
>But what I love more than anything is the amount of tension you've built.
Thank you so much!
And I gotta say...you definitely know how to write Mal! I was seriously awed and humbled with how you just had him lay it all out for Inara about what's been done and will be done to Simon to get the crew to ride to the rescue with River at the front of the pack. Definitely am torn between reeaaallllyyyyy wanting to see how far Simon's mind and body will get destroyed before the rescue and what will happen to Kaylee when she sees the results, and desperately hoping for some cliched "it was all a terrible dream" plot twist of Kaylee's that allows her to see where she's been going wrong. And that's good writin' ;D
BEB
Hunt and Smith are scaring the bejeesus outta me!
Then you're just going to love them, next chapter!
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