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Even Roses Have Thorns, Chapter Fifty
Saturday, April 14, 2007
The BIG DAMN Rescue. Some revenge, some poetic justice. Very narrator pov, but I like it. Hey, it worked for Dickens. NC17 to be on the safe side, but mostly implied. Canon pairings +1 (River/ofc).
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Chapter Fifty: Virtute et armis (By courage and by arms) Part III
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, , , , , , , , , *** *** *** With an almost gentle brush, Jayne cut the comm. He knew that he should feel happy, but all he felt was overwhelmed. Inara had stepped off the bridge, and no-one else even knew that he’d received a wave. He wasn’t a subtle man, but he was private. Still, his choices were pretty simple. He could keep it private – tempting in its own right, and because the timing gave him an instinctive uncomfortableness, or he could do something about it. Like he wanted to. Like his sisters wanted him to. Like his mother wanted him to. It really was an either/or. Inara stood quietly outside the bridge, paying no attention to the words that she could almost hear on the other side of the door. If it hadn’t been Jayne, and hadn’t been so mysterious, Inara probably wouldn’t have been curious at all. But Jayne and a wave from home? That was indeed a curiosity. And the girl – well, she’d been taken aback to have her wave answered by a Companion, Inara could tell, but she’d recovered quickly, and broke into a big grin nearly identical to Jayne’s, before she announced herself as Katie Cobb, and could she please speak to Jayne?
Comments
Sunday, 15 April 2007 00:01
Ok, so it's up a little early - I hope that doesn't confuse/annoy anyone.
In my defense, it is Sunday afternoon in New Zealand, which is /almost/ Sunday evening, right?
There is a chance that chapter 51 will go up this week before next Sunday (if so, chapter 52 will go up on Sunday). It's writing itself, which is always good, but I do have to complete a draft of my MA thesis by Wednesday afternoon Zulu Time, so we'll see.
Thank you to everyone who's stuck with this story, especially for the support and encouragement I've gotten.
Next chapter:
How far did Green and Banks get? What did Katie want? Kaylee has some moments of reflection, and Mal avoids thinking about his fiancee lobbing grenades.
In my defense, it is Sunday afternoon in New Zealand, which is /almost/ Sunday evening, right?
There is a chance that chapter 51 will go up this week before next Sunday (if so, chapter 52 will go up on Sunday). It's writing itself, which is always good, but I do have to complete a draft of my MA thesis by Wednesday afternoon Zulu Time, so we'll see.
Thank you to everyone who's stuck with this story, especially for the support and encouragement I've gotten.
Next chapter:
How far did Green and Banks get? What did Katie want? Kaylee has some moments of reflection, and Mal avoids thinking about his fiancee lobbing grenades.
EPM0001
Sunday, 15 April 2007 00:52
Great stuff!!
Sunday, 15 April 2007 10:11
Hot damn girlfan!
That was a freakin' awesome chapter!
As for the postage timing-you can post early all you feel like, and you'll hear no complaints from me.
This whole thing concerning Jayne's wave has me intruiged in a mighty big way. It's not often we get a glimpse into Jayne's private life, and even rarer that we see his family life exposed in any real fashion. I surely hope more light gets shed on this.
The whole rescue....just exceptional. Inara lobbing grenades, and the whole thing between Mal and Inara there was genuinely great.
Gotta love the conniving of Simon and Ceres right under the snivelling, black hearted noses (yes, I realise noses do not have hearts) of Banks and Green.
Speaking of Banks and Green...did they scuttle away before the trouble started? Or did I miss something?
And indeed, how far *did* they get?
I think Jayne looking after Kaylee is pretty much spot on. We've always known the big merc is at least not immune to the sensitivities of life.
The crew dynamic seems to have shifted much in Simon's absence, and it's refreshing to see.
Ceres breaking free from her binds made me grimace, it was a realistic and brutal touch (that is to say, it fit perfectly), and the proceeding paragraph with little Sam taking the *fight* to Cooper was just so well done.
River's thoughts on those she was killing was creepy in the right way, and the deal of her and Ceres fighting and killing their way towards each other was excptionally well done.
Here I am gushing about the amazingness (yes, that's a word...now) of your work, so I'll stop.
>This time the box would remain closed<
Incredible.
That was a freakin' awesome chapter!
As for the postage timing-you can post early all you feel like, and you'll hear no complaints from me.
This whole thing concerning Jayne's wave has me intruiged in a mighty big way. It's not often we get a glimpse into Jayne's private life, and even rarer that we see his family life exposed in any real fashion. I surely hope more light gets shed on this.
The whole rescue....just exceptional. Inara lobbing grenades, and the whole thing between Mal and Inara there was genuinely great.
Gotta love the conniving of Simon and Ceres right under the snivelling, black hearted noses (yes, I realise noses do not have hearts) of Banks and Green.
Speaking of Banks and Green...did they scuttle away before the trouble started? Or did I miss something?
And indeed, how far *did* they get?
I think Jayne looking after Kaylee is pretty much spot on. We've always known the big merc is at least not immune to the sensitivities of life.
The crew dynamic seems to have shifted much in Simon's absence, and it's refreshing to see.
Ceres breaking free from her binds made me grimace, it was a realistic and brutal touch (that is to say, it fit perfectly), and the proceeding paragraph with little Sam taking the *fight* to Cooper was just so well done.
River's thoughts on those she was killing was creepy in the right way, and the deal of her and Ceres fighting and killing their way towards each other was excptionally well done.
Here I am gushing about the amazingness (yes, that's a word...now) of your work, so I'll stop.
>This time the box would remain closed<
Incredible.
Sunday, 15 April 2007 14:42
This whole thng was awesome. And the 'Adrenaline, god bless its little cotton socks' line was brilliant. Cos thats just such an awesome saying lol.
Sunday, 15 April 2007 16:24
I hope Kaylee does some thinking - like how Jayne puts her first and foremost and Simon puts the bigger picture first. She has to decide if she wants to be part of the bigger & dangerous picture, or to be the only consideration in someone's safe life.
My guess on it all, Jayne has to go home and he may take Kaylee with him? But I don't see a romance happening between the two. Kaylee might fall for Jayne and all the concern he's shown her, but like I don't see her as an equal for Simon I don't see her as an equal for Jayne either.
Sam getting some of his own back was fabulous!
Loved the plan and the execution of the plan. I can't wait to find out what Green and Banks got up to, and what Kaylee does!
My guess on it all, Jayne has to go home and he may take Kaylee with him? But I don't see a romance happening between the two. Kaylee might fall for Jayne and all the concern he's shown her, but like I don't see her as an equal for Simon I don't see her as an equal for Jayne either.
Sam getting some of his own back was fabulous!
Loved the plan and the execution of the plan. I can't wait to find out what Green and Banks got up to, and what Kaylee does!
Monday, 16 April 2007 16:27
Inara lobbing a grenade on Jayne's behalf is priceless...although I don't know why Mal's so surprised. Aside from Jayne and Zoe, she easily did the most damage during the stand off on Mr. U's moon (and is also the only one that came out without some type of major injury). I'm sure he's heard the stories of that crossbow by now.
I'm not sure what Kaylee's going to do. She and Simon had trouble relating on most days - mainly because they never communicate what they're thinking (or in Simon's case at times, communicationg without thinking). Now he can see everything in her head, even when she's trying to be evasive. I don't think she has the level of trust needed to deal with that - especially since trust was the big issue that literally started it all way back when.
On the other hand, I don't see Jayne stepping in to fill the role. He's been excellent support, but he also seems to be keeping a "brotherly" distance on purpose. Lord knows he could probably have made a move when she was really pissed at Simon (yes, that would be quite uncool of him, but that's Jayne for ya).
I predict a lot of soul searching for her. Hopfully she puts on the big girl pants and acts as a partner for the men (and women) in her family.
The rescue was awesome, and I think more because it was so understated...very much "the readers have made a plan. Everyone please get out of the way while we kick ass."
I'm not sure what Kaylee's going to do. She and Simon had trouble relating on most days - mainly because they never communicate what they're thinking (or in Simon's case at times, communicationg without thinking). Now he can see everything in her head, even when she's trying to be evasive. I don't think she has the level of trust needed to deal with that - especially since trust was the big issue that literally started it all way back when.
On the other hand, I don't see Jayne stepping in to fill the role. He's been excellent support, but he also seems to be keeping a "brotherly" distance on purpose. Lord knows he could probably have made a move when she was really pissed at Simon (yes, that would be quite uncool of him, but that's Jayne for ya).
I predict a lot of soul searching for her. Hopfully she puts on the big girl pants and acts as a partner for the men (and women) in her family.
The rescue was awesome, and I think more because it was so understated...very much "the readers have made a plan. Everyone please get out of the way while we kick ass."
Tuesday, 17 April 2007 17:55
Holy shit was this awesome! Definitely worth some serious pointage in my books:D
I was really impressed by the whole scenario, but River's evasive conversation with Mal about Simon's new abilities and the rescue itself were just golden.
Gotta say though....not really seeing where all this "could Kaylee hook up with Jayne" talk is coming from. Now, maybe I am blind, but I get an "older brother" vibe off of Jayne during the engine room scene and Jayne was needed to protect both Kaylee and Serenity's powerplant from any possible retaliation. Even if Simon and Kaylee can't manage to find the trust they need, especially in light of Simon's new skills, I don't automatically assume it's gonna be Jayne she turns to. Part of what stops me from whole-heartedly supporting the concept of Jaylee is that Jayne's perspective on violence - especially the fatal kind - is anateham to Kaylee's probably naive view of the world. They could change...but would they still be anything close to who they are now?
Oh, and concerning Mal's discomfort about Inara hurling grenades? I would just like to point out that I doubt Companions get trained in how to handle explosives. Close-quarters combat and weapons like pistols and bows? Yeah...for self-defence and hobby. But explosives? Sorry....but I too would be "Uh...wtf?!" if I saw someone not properly trained to use grenades handling one. And that's not even getting into Mal's issues with Inara being a front-line figure when violence needs doing;)
BEB
I was really impressed by the whole scenario, but River's evasive conversation with Mal about Simon's new abilities and the rescue itself were just golden.
Gotta say though....not really seeing where all this "could Kaylee hook up with Jayne" talk is coming from. Now, maybe I am blind, but I get an "older brother" vibe off of Jayne during the engine room scene and Jayne was needed to protect both Kaylee and Serenity's powerplant from any possible retaliation. Even if Simon and Kaylee can't manage to find the trust they need, especially in light of Simon's new skills, I don't automatically assume it's gonna be Jayne she turns to. Part of what stops me from whole-heartedly supporting the concept of Jaylee is that Jayne's perspective on violence - especially the fatal kind - is anateham to Kaylee's probably naive view of the world. They could change...but would they still be anything close to who they are now?
Oh, and concerning Mal's discomfort about Inara hurling grenades? I would just like to point out that I doubt Companions get trained in how to handle explosives. Close-quarters combat and weapons like pistols and bows? Yeah...for self-defence and hobby. But explosives? Sorry....but I too would be "Uh...wtf?!" if I saw someone not properly trained to use grenades handling one. And that's not even getting into Mal's issues with Inara being a front-line figure when violence needs doing;)
BEB
Tuesday, 17 April 2007 17:56
Holy shit was this awesome! Definitely worth some serious pointage in my books:D
I was really impressed by the whole scenario, but River's evasive conversation with Mal about Simon's new abilities and the rescue itself were just golden.
Gotta say though....not really seeing where all this "could Kaylee hook up with Jayne" talk is coming from. Now, maybe I am blind, but I get an "older brother" vibe off of Jayne during the engine room scene and Jayne was needed to protect both Kaylee and Serenity's powerplant from any possible retaliation. Even if Simon and Kaylee can't manage to find the trust they need, especially in light of Simon's new skills, I don't automatically assume it's gonna be Jayne she turns to. Part of what stops me from whole-heartedly supporting the concept of Jaylee is that Jayne's perspective on violence - especially the fatal kind - is anathema to Kaylee's probably naive view of the world. They could change...but would they still be anything close to who they are now?
Oh, and concerning Mal's discomfort about Inara hurling grenades? I would just like to point out that I doubt Companions get trained in how to handle explosives. Close-quarters combat and weapons like pistols and bows? Yeah...for self-defence and hobby. But explosives? Sorry....but I too would be "Uh...wtf?!" if I saw someone not properly trained to use grenades handling one. And that's not even getting into Mal's issues with Inara being a front-line figure when violence needs doing;)
BEB
I was really impressed by the whole scenario, but River's evasive conversation with Mal about Simon's new abilities and the rescue itself were just golden.
Gotta say though....not really seeing where all this "could Kaylee hook up with Jayne" talk is coming from. Now, maybe I am blind, but I get an "older brother" vibe off of Jayne during the engine room scene and Jayne was needed to protect both Kaylee and Serenity's powerplant from any possible retaliation. Even if Simon and Kaylee can't manage to find the trust they need, especially in light of Simon's new skills, I don't automatically assume it's gonna be Jayne she turns to. Part of what stops me from whole-heartedly supporting the concept of Jaylee is that Jayne's perspective on violence - especially the fatal kind - is anathema to Kaylee's probably naive view of the world. They could change...but would they still be anything close to who they are now?
Oh, and concerning Mal's discomfort about Inara hurling grenades? I would just like to point out that I doubt Companions get trained in how to handle explosives. Close-quarters combat and weapons like pistols and bows? Yeah...for self-defence and hobby. But explosives? Sorry....but I too would be "Uh...wtf?!" if I saw someone not properly trained to use grenades handling one. And that's not even getting into Mal's issues with Inara being a front-line figure when violence needs doing;)
BEB
Tuesday, 17 April 2007 17:57
Ugh...really wish there was an edit function for feedback, so I don't have to double-post to fix mistakes:(
Tuesday, 17 April 2007 19:47
>Ugh...really wish there was an edit function for feedback, so I don't have to double-post to fix mistakes:(
Me too.
Me too.
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