The first two chapters are here:
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Chapter Three: Sub Rosa (under the rose; which is to say, secretly, or in confidence)
As she approached the infirmary, Zoë could see Simon making some notes in one of his files. She often wondered how he managed to spend so much time in there – he had, at least recently, blessedly little to do. She noticed that he seemed a little distracted when she greeted him but she said nothing, merely closing the door behind her. At that little sound, he immediately put his file aside and turned his full attention to her. She’d trusted he would. Dr. Tam was never far away when Simon was around. She handed him her little home pregnancy kit; while he glanced at it she spoke. “I’d like you to do a proper test.”
“Of course, Zoë.” He turned and hit the button for the privacy blinds, and put the test on the counter. “I’ll have to give you an internal exam, so please slip off… what you need to slip off, and try to get comfortable on the table.”
I am a war veteran, the soldier reminded herself. This is not hard, she tried to think confidently, but she didn’t find it convincing. “Captain not spare any coin for gowns?”
Simon shook his head. “Sorry, Zoë.”
“Should’a thought to buy my own planet side.” She muttered to herself. Simon, standing solidly on professional ground, knew better than to acknowledge that he’d heard her. He turned around and opened his file on her, making himself busy with jotting down – very slowly – the date and reason for her visit. He heard the sounds of clothes rustling and a thought struck. He reached into one of his cupboards and grabbed a splatter shield, which he held out to her over his shoulder.
“Thanks, Doctor.” He heard the plastic rustling and figured that she was done, but he waited for her. “I’m in position.” Variants on the theme of that sounded so tactical appeared in both of their minds. Simon filed the phrase away in case he ever had to use it, as he turned around.
To respond to the comments for my previous chapters, I would like to say thank you, and that I'm glad you enjoyed it.
To Tamsibling, I would like to say that I am also a Simon/Kaylee fan - I'm just looking at one way things might go, and they haven't told me yet where they are going, for sure.
Sorry ManicGiraffe, no shooting yet, of Simon or anyone... but we'll see if that lasts, the night is still young.
I hope you all continue to enjoy.
Glad to hear that, actually. Not that you shouldn't write the Jaylee if you're inclined that way, but for a moment there chapter 1 and 2 felt somewhat like the standard "dispose of Simon quickly so we can get to the sexin'" that would have to come before Jayne swoops in. But knowing that you're actually doing it as a legit plumbing of their minds (no matter how it ends up, and even if Jayne does end up swooping) makes it that much better.
Poor Jayne. He's the only "sane" one on the boat at this point.
And I really like your characterization of Simon.
Definitely not bad and will be interesting to see where you decide to go with it.
You can't take the sky from me
I too am glad that the Silee split is not being done quickly so Jaylee can be started with a vengeance. Even if Jaylee's the eventual outcome...having Jayne and Kaylee slowly come to realize they wanna be with one another should take time and allow for character moments;)
BEB
Gotta wonder what Kaylee is thinking. Did she really think Simon'd put her before River? And would she want to be with a guy who would do so? And does Kaylee really think that Jayne pairing up with River would really free Simon up to exclusively be with Kaylee? I like that you don't have her as a mature woman here, but that we're seeing more of someone who has been always sheltered and as a result, childish. It'll be interesting to see where you take her character.
i think its totally fair for kaylee to want to be put first, and although she may not be very ballsy, she's honest, so i could totally see her making that demand. and i thought it was cute the way she was sadly seeking comfort from jayne by babbling about him and river - people get woozy after breakups and her wacky logic makes sense - get river occupied so simon can leg go... and plus, i love me some rayne!
"eyebrows, Serenity’s third language", brilliant
"She’s legal in a few weeks, you know" - awh, redneck's in space in nice
“Ain’t an ugly girl on this boat, Kaylee. Don’t make it my job to sex ‘em.”, Jayne gets the best lines
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