Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Even Roses Have Thorns, chapters 3 and 4

Friday, December 15, 2006

Zoe's suspicions are confirmed, and some of her background is revealed. Jayne has some moments of clarity. Canon pairings.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2834    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The first two chapters are here:

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=14482

Chapter Three: Sub Rosa (under the rose; which is to say, secretly, or in confidence)

As she approached the infirmary, Zoë could see Simon making some notes in one of his files. She often wondered how he managed to spend so much time in there – he had, at least recently, blessedly little to do. She noticed that he seemed a little distracted when she greeted him but she said nothing, merely closing the door behind her. At that little sound, he immediately put his file aside and turned his full attention to her. She’d trusted he would. Dr. Tam was never far away when Simon was around. She handed him her little home pregnancy kit; while he glanced at it she spoke. “I’d like you to do a proper test.”

“Of course, Zoë.” He turned and hit the button for the privacy blinds, and put the test on the counter. “I’ll have to give you an internal exam, so please slip off… what you need to slip off, and try to get comfortable on the table.”

I am a war veteran, the soldier reminded herself. This is not hard, she tried to think confidently, but she didn’t find it convincing. “Captain not spare any coin for gowns?”

Simon shook his head. “Sorry, Zoë.”

“Should’a thought to buy my own planet side.” She muttered to herself. Simon, standing solidly on professional ground, knew better than to acknowledge that he’d heard her. He turned around and opened his file on her, making himself busy with jotting down – very slowly – the date and reason for her visit. He heard the sounds of clothes rustling and a thought struck. He reached into one of his cupboards and grabbed a splatter shield, which he held out to her over his shoulder.

“Thanks, Doctor.” He heard the plastic rustling and figured that she was done, but he waited for her. “I’m in position.” Variants on the theme of that sounded so tactical appeared in both of their minds. Simon filed the phrase away in case he ever had to use it, as he turned around.

Comments
Friday, 15 December 2006 17:57
I'm not sure about the proper ettiquette here, so please don't be offended by anything odd that I do.

To respond to the comments for my previous chapters, I would like to say thank you, and that I'm glad you enjoyed it.

To Tamsibling, I would like to say that I am also a Simon/Kaylee fan - I'm just looking at one way things might go, and they haven't told me yet where they are going, for sure.

Sorry ManicGiraffe, no shooting yet, of Simon or anyone... but we'll see if that lasts, the night is still young.

I hope you all continue to enjoy.
Friday, 15 December 2006 19:35
> I would like to say that I am also a Simon/Kaylee fan

Glad to hear that, actually. Not that you shouldn't write the Jaylee if you're inclined that way, but for a moment there chapter 1 and 2 felt somewhat like the standard "dispose of Simon quickly so we can get to the sexin'" that would have to come before Jayne swoops in. But knowing that you're actually doing it as a legit plumbing of their minds (no matter how it ends up, and even if Jayne does end up swooping) makes it that much better.

Poor Jayne. He's the only "sane" one on the boat at this point.
Friday, 15 December 2006 20:51
This is one of the more plausible "Zoe-is-pregnant-after-Wash's-Death" stories that I've read. I don't exactly know why, but I like it!

And I really like your characterization of Simon.
Friday, 15 December 2006 22:38
I, too, thought the same thing as MG and so was hesitant to read more.

Definitely not bad and will be interesting to see where you decide to go with it.
Saturday, 16 December 2006 01:02
My favourite part was Zoe opening up to Simon, mostly because he is such a good doctor little gets by him so there was no point denying the fact that she had been pregnant before. Loved the way Mal just seamlessly accepted the fact and then did all he could to make the adjustment as easy and painful for his old friend as possible. Could so see that between them. As for Kaylee trying to get Jayne and River together that whole conversation felt odd though Jayne's responses were brilliant. And I loved Jayne toasting the absent Book. Nice touch. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 16 December 2006 02:34
While I love Rayne a lot...I am glad you're having Jayne have a rare moment of compassion and honesty about how getting freaky with River at that point is not the best idea in the world. Always thought Jayne was more observant than some might give him credit for;)

I too am glad that the Silee split is not being done quickly so Jaylee can be started with a vengeance. Even if Jaylee's the eventual outcome...having Jayne and Kaylee slowly come to realize they wanna be with one another should take time and allow for character moments;)

BEB
Saturday, 16 December 2006 03:27
Nice chapter, but your Jayne was brilliant. Really liked his responses to Kaylee's creepy suggestions, but his maturity in this chapter and then toasting Book was fabulous.

Gotta wonder what Kaylee is thinking. Did she really think Simon'd put her before River? And would she want to be with a guy who would do so? And does Kaylee really think that Jayne pairing up with River would really free Simon up to exclusively be with Kaylee? I like that you don't have her as a mature woman here, but that we're seeing more of someone who has been always sheltered and as a result, childish. It'll be interesting to see where you take her character.



Tuesday, 19 December 2006 08:10
sweet!

i think its totally fair for kaylee to want to be put first, and although she may not be very ballsy, she's honest, so i could totally see her making that demand. and i thought it was cute the way she was sadly seeking comfort from jayne by babbling about him and river - people get woozy after breakups and her wacky logic makes sense - get river occupied so simon can leg go... and plus, i love me some rayne!
GEIRR
Thursday, 11 January 2007 01:45
Eh, you know how little I watched the series, so I'm not really that familiar, but frrankly that strikes me as way too reasoned and critical for Jayne, he may notice things and connect the dots very fast, but he certainly isn't introspective. I'd be mopre with the River's dangerous as hell, and permanently fucked in the head. Jayne's need to be in love, for his paranoia to be overwhelmed like that. I don't buy the bit about young as his sister, maybe, barely, the bit about flowers and dolls, more as a justification for staying the hell away from the crazy than for real.
YOURADORINGPUBLIC
Wednesday, 07 February 2007 20:18
love Mal's assumption that the only medical problem his crew could have is being shot, again.

"eyebrows, Serenity’s third language", brilliant

"She’s legal in a few weeks, you know" - awh, redneck's in space in nice

“Ain’t an ugly girl on this boat, Kaylee. Don’t make it my job to sex ‘em.”, Jayne gets the best lines

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