Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Red Run Chapters 6-10

Wednesday, September 13, 2006

Attacked and on the run, staying one step ahead of the game, the crew of Serenity heads toward Ita Moon.

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Red Run 6: Fightin’

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19 hours out from Ita Moon

Jayne turned and looked at Zoë. “Huh?” he asked.

“I said, ‘now’.” Zoë whispered urgently.

“Oh yeah. Right.” Jayne pushed his chair back from the table. He hitched up his pants. He knew this wasn’t going to be easy. The risk had grown substantially in the last few minutes, given the nature of the confrontation before him. In fact, unbelievably risky. “Who’d a thought Mal was knockin’ River around?” Jayne thought to himself. Nevertheless, Jayne had given his word, and now he had to cover.

Kaylee looked up at him. “Be careful.”

Inara echoed her, with variation. “Yes, do be careful. And thank you, Jayne.”

Jayne responded gruffly without looking at her, his mind occupied with survival. “Yeah…no problem.”

He wasn’t sure how he was gonna pull this off.

The direct approach offered some temptation. Just make his move and be done. ‘Course there were a lotta pitfalls to barrelin’ straight in on somethin’ like this. Maybe a side on approach would be better. If he split the room on the left side, there was a chance of coming in behind Simon and---but gorramit,…River was standing more to that direction. Be like trying to sneak up on a radar unit. Simon’d miss him sure, but River never would.

That left Mal’s side.

Unfortunately, there wasn’t as much area to maneuver on Mal’s side of the room as there was on River and Simon’s side. He’d damn near have to brush Mal’s right sleeve to pass him. The odds of doing that undetected were impossible, although by this time he’d settle for simply being ignored. Done right, he could be in position, carry out his mission, and be back before any of the combatants took note. Tough enough before, but

Comments
Wednesday, 13 September 2006 16:53
Hmm, very interesting set of chapters. I can't say that I imagine this sort of 'confession' scene playing out but you did well with it. Even punctuated it with a few funny lines to break the tension a bit.

The russian phrase that Simon used in the Maidenhead is spelled wrong, you might want to correct that.

I do like how you're writing River and, of course, I want to know why the hell Inara kissed Kaylee full on the mouth like she did! :) I like the downplayed relationship between Simon and Kaylee but wouldn't complain if there were more looks or gestures between them.
Sunday, 17 September 2006 20:54
Oh...Mal's probably regretting getting this whole scenario set up in the first place. Cuz a bit too much information is now floating around and it's blocking up some of the ways for the water to flow:(

Not really sure I agree with Leiasky's assessment that this kind of confession scene would have never occurred the way it did. Maybe in individual fits and spurts along a bigger timeline, but I do think that this kind of moment is necessary post-Miranda for getting everyone on the same wavelength for dealing with what comes their way. Secrets are dangerous when they are concealed...but even worse when let out to play;)

Still..I can't wait to read more:D

BEB

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