Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

The Syntax of Things

Thursday, August 3, 2006

The only thing worse than a waiting room is a cold bed. Immediately after the battle on Mr. Universe's moon, the crew wakes up to a different world. Inspired by the e e cummings poem, "since feeling is first". Simon/Kaylee

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Simon was healing. By the time he awoke, Kaylee was well enough to move about, but still drowsy and disoriented from the poison and its side-effect-ridden antidote. A white light glared in Simon's eyes. His first thought upon returning to this world was make it go away . He tried to pull the string himself and missed. Twice. Kaylee’s hand caught his and curled his fingers around the wayward chain, together dimming the room. She grinned.

“How many dopies does it take to turn off a light?”

“Mhmrm?” he replied.

“You’ll be wantin’ some water. I’m rather outta it myself, but lessee what we can do…”

She missed the plastic cup with the first stream, but instead of giving up she shifted the pitcher and dribbled water all over the bedside tray until she found the right angle. Water was very heavy and mischievous for one recently recovering from a serious load of narcotics.

She lifted the cup to his lips and, with the same method she’d applied to the pitcher, found his mouth by pouring water over his chin and half a cheek first. He gagged but managed to get it down his prickly throat.

“I’m in a hospital,” he whispered hoarsely.

“It’s all okay, your record’s clean now,” she explained, scooting onto the side of the bed and chasing a few stray strands of hair from his face. “River’s safe too, and just bustin’ to see you. Zoe’s patched and Cap’n – Mal’s next door.” Her voice shook, a different quake than the drug-induced waver. “They stuck a lot of tubes in him.”

“Let me see him, I could help – ai!” He had tried to move, bending where muscles and membranes were still knitting together. It was as if an iron ball had swung into his belly and bruised every part of him above the waist and below the collar bone.

“The nurses said you weren’t to move about ‘til they checked on you – I was to notify ‘em when you came to.” Kaylee didn’t move. Her hand was around his; they folded together naturally.

Suddenly all the frustration of being a helpless patient crashed down on him.

He was waking up in th

Comments
Thursday, 03 August 2006 17:08
Oh this is a wonderful look at a scene we didn't get to see in the movie.

>Kaylee’s hand caught his and curled his fingers around the wayward chain
and
>Kaylee didn’t move. Her hand was around his; they folded together naturally.

Such small little things but very meaningful nonetheless.

Simon's thoughts about doing things in the wrong order were excellent and very in character for him as a doctor and wanting to be the one helping his friends.

>He squeezed her hand, and his free arm drifted clumsily to her waist. She nosed into his shoulder, and his neck felt warm and wet where she hadn’t spilt water.

So many little descriptive things that I LOVE about this piece.

The conversation about Was getting old was so sad, and then Mal and then Jayne cheating death. Sooo wonderful!

Among all my favorite lines, though, the last sentance had to be my favorite.

The emotion was so well done here for such a short piece. I hope you write more like this.
Thursday, 03 August 2006 17:26
Oh this was wonderful! Your descriptions were just so visual and perfect! Great Writing! Can't wait to see more from you!
Thursday, 03 August 2006 17:58
I really liked the little bits of emotion here. Not only with S/K, but with their remembrances of Wash and the others.

I like the idea that River is sticking to Zoe's side so that the woman won't be alone. And of course, the fact that Kaylee would find a way not to leave Simon's side, is absolutely in character for them.

>>*It didn’t occur to him that, in the order of things, their first night together should have come after a youthful passion and before this old quiet grace.*>>

I love this line - because for Simon, this would definitely be a thought. He would think this way and I love the idea behind it ... so sweet and innocent in a lot of ways, while speaking to what they could be soon.

Write some more!
Thursday, 03 August 2006 23:26
That was really sweet. I loved the part about getting old. Spring sliding into summer.
Sunday, 06 August 2006 04:15
Well now...it's amazing what you come up with when doped to the gills. Simon's thoughts on things being out of order and his lack of involvement troubling him were spot on and fitting for a "where do we go from here?" moment after the BDHs are saved from execution.

Definitely one hell of a way to break your BSR virginity, snarkandteas;)

BEB
SHANSHEN
Wednesday, 16 August 2006 20:44
Wow! I love how you describe the two of them as gears. Plus, their first night together, under those circumstances, is really beautiful. For them, in that situation, just being together trumps sex.

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