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Runaway Part 2

Wednesday, August 2, 2006

There's a new passenger on Serenity, but she may be more trouble than she's worth.

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A/N:So here is the next installment! There's some back story and more Mal/Charlotte sparring. Hope you all like it and please comment (tell me what you think of Charlotte because I love writing her but you may not like her after the next few installments!)

Thanks to Leaisky for beta-ing and swimming through all the commas.

Disclaimer:Not mine, just writing for fun

Link to http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=12148>Runaway:Part 1

Simon deposited Charlotte in his old dorm room, telling her he would be right back, and closed the sliding door behind him. As he turned, he found himself standing face to face with Mal. Simon motioned to move away from the door, not wanting to disturb his cousin while she took a few quiet moments to collect herself.

They walked into the infirmary, where Mal promptly confronted Simon, “What’s goin’ on here?”

Simon crossed his arms over his chest and sighed deeply before responding, “I have no clue, Mal, I‘ve had two minutes alone with her and I haven't seen her since before I broke River out of the Academy."

"You think she's in some kinda trouble?"

There was concern in Mal's voice, but it wasn't for Charlotte. Simon shrugged his shoulders, "I know she wouldn’t leave her wedding for anything less than life threatening.”

“Last time I had an errant bride on my ship, we were almost fried alive. Now since she’s family, I’ll let you tend to the situation, but I need to know what’s goin’ on here, and right quick. Soon as we’re outta atmo I will send River down to y’all, though I’m sure she already knows what’s what by now.”

Simon nodded his agreement and left Mal to return to Charlotte.

She sat on the edge of his bed, her hands folded on her lap. She had discarded Mal’s brown coat, leaving it to hang on the back of a chair. Simon noticed that she had washed her face and had tried to fix her hair, but the wayward strands kept dangling down her back, some new ones added for her efforts. She looked fragile to him but not broken

Comments
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 17:49
Well, and here I thought Charlotte was a pompus little bitch in the last chapter. This one has tempered my feelings for her a bit.

I like how you're writing her and am looking forward to seeing if Simon sees any of who he used to be when he first arrived in Charlotte.

River's last line makes the story, though. That was just hilarious.
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 18:17
> Well, and here I thought Charlotte was a pompus little bitch in the last chapter

Nah, I'd say she still is. You'd think losing it all would temper her tone some, but apparently she's as thick-headed as her cousin. I think Mal's going to have to lay the smackdown on her at some point. Or maybe Inara. NOT Jayne (well, not the verbal type of smackdown, anyway...)

I do like the subtle Mal and Simon interplay. Mal simply let Simon go do what he needed, and in turn Simon agreed to share info with the captain rather than fight him. Nice to see them working together.
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 19:21
Not really liking Charlotte and her high handed attitude, as if money can buy anything. Yes, Serenity and her crew need money like a body needs blood but part of the reason they didn't get paid was because of a certain impromptu rescue which the lady in question would do well to remember. Absolutlely love the way you are writing River. I'm thinking it will most likely be Zoe that puts Charlotte in her place, not that I'm confident she'll listen. And Simon, such a caring worthy soul and written so beautifully too. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 02 August 2006 21:53
How can you not love Simon? He would solve all the problems of the 'verse if he had the power ... so caring towards family, even though Charlotte may be a bit less-deserving - for all her pomp, she's got no backbone!

I would love to see Mal take her to task, although it would intrigue me to see Zoe do it as well. However, the only person Charlotte would listen to would be Inara - maybe the Companion can lay into her a bit.

And I agree - River's last line - PRICELESS!

More soon please!
Friday, 04 August 2006 15:47
Last time I had an errant bride on my ship, we were almost fried alive.
-BWAHAHAHA !!!

Simon running off with Charlotte is very much akin to his saving River in the opening of the BDM. I like it. And I like the way that Charlotte is written, I'm sure she'll have to make some of the same adjustments Simon had to make when he first set foot aboard Serenity.

River gazed longingly at Mal, her eyes sweet and beguiling, “I’d like a puppy.”
~Wonderful River line, and a great line to end on.

Please post more of this story soon, I am really really liking it.
Saturday, 05 August 2006 07:19
Oh...River is sheer perfection at the end, with her request...and the imagined look on Mal's face with all these comments coming at him;)

Charlotte definitely needs a bit of "orientation" from someone. Zoe or Inara...they have the right blend of je ne said quoi for the job:D

BEB
Wednesday, 09 August 2006 04:35
“I’d like a puppy.”

LMAO

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