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The Job (Part V - the conclusion)

Wednesday, April 16, 2003

They land on Shadow

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Well all thing s must come to an end. Hope you like the ending.

The Job (PartV - Conclusion)

It had been a difficult day. The town where they landed hadn’t been his home, but he and his family had visited there once before. It still looked the same, as if nothing had changed in the last 20 years. But as far as Malcolm Reynolds was concerned, everything had changed. In the intervening years, his family had died, he’d sold the ranch, he’d lost a war and his faith, and he’d been beaten, tortured, arrested and left to die on more than one occasion. It was hard to look at the shops ringing the docks and remember the innocent kid he’d been back then. It was harder still to remember his mother and his sister shopping for party dresses at the same shop that still stood on the corner of the main street.

Mal didn’t avoid difficult tasks. So he’d gone himself to meet with the owner of their cargo and arrange for the delivery and the return shipment even though just about the last thing in the universe he wanted was set foot on that planet. Zoe and Wash had both volunteered to go in his place, but it was a harsh universe and a captain who couldn’t do the job of a captain didn’t last very long in it. So Mal had gone and now he was back on Serenity.

They were unloading the cargo now, but the return cargo wouldn’t be here for three more days because some flooding had cut off the delivery route of the grain. So they had to wait while the wagon train took a longer route.

Everyone was standing in the cargo bay when he returned except Simon and River, who always stayed out of sight when strangers were on board. They were there to give him support, he knew.

Inara came down to greet him looking cool and elegant as usual. "How are you doing," she asked.

"Fine." She gave him a look that clearly said, "That’s a load of gos se." But she let it pass without remark for which he was grateful.

It was due to her that he was functioning at all. The last three days of discussing his feelings and nightmares with her had he

Comments
Wednesday, 16 April 2003 08:07
That was pretty heartfelt, HLGEM. I almost sensed a rececnt loss in your own past as something you may have drawn on in your writing. It's hard to get stuck in the first stage of the healing process. I liked how vulnerable you could tell Mal was feeling by his almost conspicuous lack of comments when Inara is being convincing. Yes, I liked this. Good story. Xiexie.
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Wednesday, 16 April 2003 18:12
Very good. Holding in pain and grief can do as much damage as the inital pain of the loved one lost. But it can take years to let go.
Wednesday, 16 April 2003 21:27
Good story, thanks for sharing!
Thursday, 17 April 2003 19:52
Wow, very well done, very smart and true. Thank you for writing it you did a great job.
Monday, 05 May 2003 21:57
Beautifully done. Grief is a hard thing to get past, but putting loved ones properly to rest is a good way to start. You've put Mal propertly on the path.
Wednesday, 09 July 2003 04:49
Totally shiny. Read the first 4 parts and thought it'd be easier to review on the last one.

I love Mal's inner despair, his crew's unrest, and the fact that Zoe and Kaylee both felt it was their own fault they had to go to Shadow for their own reasons. And especially how Inara gets through to Mal in this chapter, suggesting he's going to snap and get Kaylee or the others killed. Nice work dear.
Saturday, 03 January 2004 22:36
Absolutely brilliant and so touching I had tears in my gorram eyes. Just loved this to pieces, so happy you went on to write it out in full rather than just the one chapter. Kudos to you, Ali D :~)
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