Getting Book Published
POSTED BY: queenofthenorth
UPDATED: Friday, March 17, 2006 04:43
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Hey, Queen
Just thought I would hallor at you and give you my advice and ideas on the book. Sorry its taken me a while, been pretty busy lately. Anyways with out further a due...... I thought it was a really good book for your first novel. The last half of the book had me interested from the first battle, to Griff coming back and retaking his kingdom. pg 19, I felt was a little bit of rough phrasing and could have been worded better. Also at the beginning you hardly discribed the journey back to Cantilia. Asuming that Aldrain tried to get away as far as he could from the warlocks, it should have been at least a 2-3 days journey, by ship. So a little bit longer detail on the journey back would have been helpful. Rydia I liked all the way up to the end where I felt she just became a bitch. I'm sorry, but you don't do that to man or a women. Same w/ relationship in Firefly w/ Mal and Inara. You either say whats on your mind and work it out or you don't and screw up the entire relation. Otherwise liked most of the characters and you had a good plot. At times I felt the wording in the dialogue shifted and changed tone. Anyways hope that helps. I will try and add some more things as I have time. Some books I would recommend reading are The Count of Monte Cristco (sp?), Books by R.A. Salvatore, and books by James Clavel!!!
mata, Ookami yori
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Thanks for getting back to me, Ooka, I appreciate it. It's encouraging to know that overall you liked the book, characters, plot, etc. I've heard from a lot of people that I should have taken more time describing journeys and that, so I'm definitely going to work on that in my next book. I'll check out the other things you pointed out, too. I have read books by R.A. Salvatore, he's one of my favorites. I've also bought the Count of Monte Cristo, but haven't gotten around to reading it yet. Maybe I will for my next book. The other guy you mentioned I've never heard of. Do you know any of his books that might be around? If so, I will look at getting them. Anyways, thanks again for the help. I'll get back to working on part 3.
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Hey Queen,
No prob hope it helps you out!!!!
James Clavell is the Author of the Book "Shogun"
focusing on 16th cent battles in which Tokugawa unified Japan. Although its fiction, the story is based on actual facts, just names and somethings have been enbalished. He also wrote a triolgy about a British Trading house based in Hong Kong --- "Taipan", "Gaijin", and "Noble House" The outher two novels he has are "King Rat" (about a Japanese World War II POW camp) and "Wirlwind" (set during the Iran revolution) so hope those help for you. He has a really good style that includes the culture, language, and history woven into exciting plots and characters. Well hang in there and have fun okay. Hope your 2nd and 3rd novels become stronger. Talk with you later.
mata, Ookami yori
I ain't Disagreen, I only wanted another drink!!!
Iaido ---- slow, slow, and slow.... spiritual and 1 strike.
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