Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

In Sunshine and in Shadow Part 3

Thursday, April 27, 2006

A nice dinner and a little gun fight.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2442    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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There were good smells coming from the Galley that Mal and Jayne just had to go investigate. They found some kind of spicy meat dish with vegetables, a pile of dumplings fragrant with herbs keeping warm and what looked remarkably like fruit salad in the refrigeration unit.

“Hot damn!” Jayne went for a bowl only to receive a slap over the knuckles from a wooden spoon wielded by Kaylee, clumps of dumpling mix in her hair and a smut of sauce on her nose.

“You just go polish Vera now, or even better change your shirt. This is a proper sit down meal and we’re gonna eat it together.”

“We gotta dress all spiffy just to eat?”

“You heard the lady.” Mal gave a significant nod toward the crew quarters. Jayne stumped of grumbling meanly under his breath.

Mal gave Kaylee a thoughtful look, “On that subject Darling you might wanna take a look in a mirror. Kaylee checked her reflection in a saucepan lid and with a squeal of horror disappeared in the same direction as Jayne calling “Don’t let anybody start on the food till we’re all here!” Over her shoulder.

Mal waited until the mechanic was out of sight then dunked his pinkie in the sauce.

“Hè!, zhòu mà hè!” He automatically stuck his finger in his mouth to cool the burning and the happy look of a man tasting real food after living on too much reconstituted protein spread across his face.

“Malcolm Reynolds shame on you.”

He jumped like a guilty child and with a shamefaced grin turned to face Inara. There had been a laugh in her voice, a tone that was becoming more and more common with her and that did him all kinds of good to hear.

It was no surprise that Inara as ever looked like heaven on two legs, what was a little more surprising was the vengeful killer that Mal had met that afternoon standing a little behind her.

Mal realised that he hadn’t looked at her proper. She’d been covered in dirt and wearing hardwearing, dull clothes and a ridiculous hat. Now she glitter

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 27 April 2006 20:52
I'd like read more when there is some.
Thursday, 27 April 2006 21:21
Well now..that was a mighty interesting gunfight. Would have loved to see River doing this kind of stuff during the series or another movie;)

BEB
ATHOS1029
Friday, 28 April 2006 14:47
This is the second comment I've prepared for you but the evil computer ate the first one. I love this story it's a great read and a nice take on Eldorado.
I can't wait to see where you take it will Tomas side with Mal and his?
How did Al get shot?
Go Two gun Tam !!!!
Wednesday, 03 May 2006 13:33
Just loved that action sequence! I got a clear mental picture of River riding the mule! Great characterisation too!
I agree with a previous comment that lines or stars or something between scene breaks would clear things up some.
Sunday, 02 July 2006 15:22
*cheerleading squad* TWO-GUN! TAM! TWO-GUN! TAM!

b
Thursday, 05 June 2008 23:33
I thought from reading the narrative tag in the Blue Sun Room that I'd like your story. Having finished it:

I love your narrative style. Really fits the style of the wild west both with the dialogue and prose.

I love this line: "It was no surprise that Inara as ever looked like heaven on two legs..."

AND:

“You surprise me, I thought Patience had got that place all buttoned up.”


“She did, but being dead these last five months she kinda let things go.”

ROFTL!!!!!!!

The prose could use a little polish, but otherwise the story and the characters are sharp. Going to look for more of your stuff right now!

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