Disclaimer: Not mine, no pay.
Thanks: To Jacqui, Josh and to Rion, my own personal BDH. You guys are the greatest.
Rating: PG-17, graphic violence
Remarks: Kaylee's been frettin' about Jayne and Mal's job is goin' to hell in a handbasket.
Set after “Objects in Space”. Inara has departed from Serenity and things on board ship are getting more difficult. Click on my name to read the backstory. They’re all backstory.
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Leaps of Faith
Chapter Ten
Jayne’s been nailin’ away at Emerson’s gang fast as he can clear and chamber rounds, doin’ his best to give the Captain and Zoë the cover they need.
Mal’s voice over the radio jerks him out of his head, launches him into action. He slings the sniper rifle over his back, clambers over the boulders and goes sliding down the loose scree of the slope, blazin’ away with the Deckler and yelling like a banshee.
At the sight of the big merc scrambling downslope, sprayin’ lead, Emerson’s wagon driver yanks the team around and hightails it, figurin’ he’d rather survive and it’s likely his bossman won’t.
The slope’s so steep, it’s all Jayne can do to keep his feet under him. He’s just riding it down on adrenaline, wide open, scramblin’, balls to the wall.
Mal and Zoë continue to return fire, but the low pile of crates doesn’t make for much by way of cover and Zoë’s bleeding hard. Mal glances over at her and tells her “You need to get that arm tied off. Here. “ He tosses her his bandanna.
“An’ Zoë, you aren’t allowed to die on me. That’s an order, you hear?”
She fumbles to bind off her arm one-handedly and grits her teeth. “Yes, Sir.”
The zip and crack of gunfire is all around. Mal peeks over the crates and fires again, trying to catch Emerson when he pops up over the dead horse to make a shot. Jayne’s hail of fire catches Emerson’s rema
Ohhh, and now there is the near death angst! Yeah!!
HisGoodGirl, we love you!
love this story...
At least they got paid.
And I did double-check my wound and med info with my buddy Josh the Paramedic, 'cause even I knew tourniquets are risky. Not like Mal had a lot of options here, ya know.
Keep readin' and keep flyin'.
I've just read this series and LOVE it. I can't wait for more!
I'm Kristy by the way, it's just too much trouble to log in. :)
You just want everyone to fall at your feet begging, is that it?
*falls to knees and kisses hisgoodgirl's feet*
please, with a strawberry on top? Keep writing!
btw, you write action very well, the movement of the characters and everything is well described and keeps the momentum of the moment going, that said, keep writing...am becoming repetitive, I know...
And yeah...if the .45 hit an artery, Jayne's chances drop significantly.
BEB
Keep it up.
I haven't been neglecting you I swear. I've been out of town over Easter, so I haven't been able to comment on these last few chapters. I'm caught up now, though, and I just want to tell you how fantabulous they are. It's a wonderful adventuresome epic... Now write more! *grin*
Seriously, the amount of Jayne torture around here lately is astounding. I trust you'll have Simon repair him quick smart, and he and Kaylee will finally have that talk.
Oh, and have her smack him for goin' through Emerson's pockets without making sure he was dead first.
Love the action but am worried for Jayne. I like how Zoe & Mal react to each other during the battle and it's aftermath.
“An’ Zoë, you aren’t allowed to die on me. That’s an order, you hear?”
She fumbles to bind off her arm one-handedly and grits her teeth. “Yes, Sir.”
So cool!
And Rinny is so right; your characterization has steadily been improving. I've always enjoyed your stories, however lately your characters have moved towards achieving that clear quality that rings true to the original characters we all fell in love with. You see, that is the gift I lack. I can write. I can come up with stories and dialog. Really I can…but whenever I do the characters just sounds like I’m talking to myself. The skill of characterization takes time to develop and some can never get the knack of it down pat. Joyfully you have, so I will continue to grovel and follow your stories like the little lost puppy I am.
(I'm loving this, by the way)
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-Keep flying
Holy cow, you got a real pageturner here!
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