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Counting Perfection

Wednesday, April 12, 2006

Written for FF_Friday challenge 113 - numbers

Angsty Drabble.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3569    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: Counting Perfection

By 2x2

Rating: PG

Spoilers: None

Word Count: 137

Author's Note: I don't know where this came from. I was in a very strange mood, full of dark images.

She touches his hand, wraps the tiny fingers around her own. Counts the digits, five perfect little fingers, twenty-seven bones, carpals, metacarpals and phalanges. His other hand is the same in its mirrored perfection.

Two hands, ten fingers. Two arms, two legs, ten perfect little toes, ten little piggies waiting to go to market.

She traces a finger down the sole of a foot so small it fits in the palm of one hand.

Two eyes, blue, blue, blue eyes.

Two ears. One nose. One mouth. One heart.

She counts the perfection in her arms. All these numbers are right, they all add up to the flawless child they have created.

She wants to stop counting there, but other numbers come, unwanted.

Twelve heartbeats. Five little breaths. One weak cry…One long, terrible, droning alarm.

Two lives, shattered.

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 05:15
oh my! this was so sad!!!!! this was really good....you've made me teary! who is it i wonder?.........
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 09:15
Yeah...what's going on? Is it Zoe holding a child by Wash (though unless Zoe's got some blue-eyed relative in her family tree, the usual cliche of a son having blue eyes is kinda impossible)? Kaylee holding a child by any of the remaining mn on Serenity (cuz I ain't being close-minded here)? Or is Inara or River losing a child by one of the guys?

We have to know more!

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 14:18
hmm now my first thought (with the blue eyes) was inara holding mal's baby. (maybe i'm biased?) but the counting and words like carpals make me think of river. very powerful stuff. and BEB is right--we need more!

~kaynara
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 17:31
I think that this could be River holding Simon and Kaylees baby-blue,blue, blue eyes, remember? It would be just like River to count the number of bones...wait...shattered lives...are Simon and Kaylee... dead!!!!!??????!!!!!!???????(etc...)
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 20:42
I'm with Kaynara on this one and if she's right... you may just have had a fairly successful go at breaking my heart.
2X2
Wednesday, 12 April 2006 21:35
Well... it can be anyone *you* choose it to be...

but let's just say, if you know my OTP, it's not too hard to figure out who *I* think it is ;o)

*hint* Taya and Kaynara know what I'm talkin' about *G*
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 13 April 2006 08:10
GHA! it me oldsoul1987 and you just broke my heart

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