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The Close Shore, At the End, Untenable

Saturday, December 19, 2015

“Dead ’re in my head tonight,” he said finally. “Can’t get ‘em out. Don’t got the booze or the bar to distract me. Don’t know why I’m here ‘cept I don’t think I can go through it alone.”

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Title: The Close Shore, At the End, Untenable

Author: 2x2

Word Count: 1075

Pairing: Mal/Inara

Summary: Mal has to find a new way to deal with his least favourite day a few weeks after Miranda. Post BDM.

Author’s Note: Written for Isha_Libran’s prompt: a tipsy truthful Mal who forgets everything the morning after but it didn’t really work its way into the fic at all I’m afraid. But I’m quite happy with what did come, so I’m going with it. Maybe some day I’ll try and redo the prompt. Or, you know, you could give me another ;)
I used a bit of a different style on this one, one I’ve used a few times before and was reminded of while reading ‘The Killer Angels’. I like it. I’m curious to know what you think of the title? The words just came to me, like someone else was speaking them.
I also just discovered that Unification Day falls on Mal’s birthday, September 20th. Is there nothing the ‘Verse won’t take from this man? ;)

They were extra difficult this year. The memories. The ghosts. Voices that were normally mostly silent but that always came louder, more frequent, as this day approached. Was why he did his damnedest to find an Alliance friendly bar to pass the day in. A way to blur the memories, ease that pain with a fresh application of fists.

Was different this year with the day falling so close on the heels of Miranda. More ghosts, walking his ship. Weren’t safe to go looking for a place. Stick to the black, keep flying. And then there was Zoe. Wasn’t the best idea she should go looking for a fight right yet either; he weren’t exactly sure he wouldn’t be the one on the receiving end if he did ask her. Had its appeal, he had to admit. But Zoe hadn’t set foot outside her (her’s and Wash’s

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Thursday, 31 December 2015 09:34
I really enjoyed this moment of tenderness and comfort seeking. It was written very honestly and seems very true to the characters. I do wonder about the tense change - the action of the first half is past tense, but suddenly turns present tense once Inara wakes up. My first inclination as the reader is to keep it all the same tense... but that might just be my bit of OCD showing through.
2X2
Thursday, 31 December 2015 09:38
No, you're right about the tense thing. Normally, I am a stickler for that too, but somehow I couldn't write the two sections in the other tense - I tried, both ways, but neither seemed to work for me... so I just let it be. It's a failing, I admit.
Thank you for the comment :) I appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite it's flaws ;)
2X2
Thursday, 31 December 2015 09:48
No, you're right about the tense thing. Normally, I am a stickler for that too, but somehow I couldn't write the two sections in the other tense - I tried, both ways, but neither seemed to work for me... so I just let it be. It's a failing, I admit.
Thank you for the comment :) I appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite it's flaws ;)

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