Wash is in his cell asleep, when he hears foot
steps walking away from him. Then a loud bang,
as the door closes. He looks out left, then
right. He sees nothing, but when he turns around
he See's a brown 2 x 3 feet pony envelope. He
walks up to it and opens it in shock. Because in
side of the package is the blue prints to the
alliance facility he's in. "Wow", he says still
in shock. "Guess I'm not so screwed after all."
Wash has a small smile on his face. This is the
first piece of good news since I woke up I this
place. He thought. And to think, a few weeks ago
he was going no where fast! With his smile
still on his face, he goes to work looking for a
way out.
One hour later.......
The guard walks up to the door. Wash is
pretending to be asleep, behind the gate. As the
guard opens it Wash hits the gate with both his
feet, sending the guard flying into the opposite
wall. Wash gets up looks down at the guard
and says: "Sorry Charlie, Wash is unable to take
your call at the moment. please leave at
the "Beep". Wash takes "Charlie's" gun and heads
off in his pre-planned destination. "I hope this
works." is what he say's to him self, knowing
he's going to need all the luck he can to pull
of this fong luh (Crazy) plan.
30 minutes later.......
Wash is running though the halls looking sightly
confused. "Ok, that was a left, right?" he looks
down at the map again. Then up. And then, hoping
that the map would change, looked down
again. "Ok that," and he points down one of the
four halls. five if you count the one he came
though. "is where I came from. and that," he
points to another hall "is the hall I started
from sooooo......" he looks at the map once
more "I'm back where I started from. Great!!"
he sighs, and looks at the map once more. Then
he see's something. Something he can't believe
he missed. he sighs "Dang-ran. (of course.)" he
says........an
Though I do find the d-spacing for this a mite distracting...though not as bad as massive paragraphs.
BEB
Not crazy about the spacing, but that's just me. You should do it however YOU like it. Write us some more, okay? Hope your pc behaves so you can. *huggles.
The spacing isn't great, maybe it's just me. Space out the dialoge, cause it can get lost otherwise (as happened abit in the early parts of your story).
Looking forward to seeing how it playts out!
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